>Pic rel. Like really fucking related.

Im working on a book. Its a YA fiction, with queer elements and fight scenes.

Is there any tips for the overall plot that I can use to improve it?

>>24565268 (OP)
You should upgrade those queer elements to queer central themes, also you should make all your protagnonists neurodivergent

>>24565268 (OP)
>Is there any tips for the overall plot that I can use to improve it?
Yeah, every character in the story kills themselves after being introduced.

>>24565283
My mc is slightly autistic and a drug addict.

>>24565268 (OP)
Res is too low to be readable
For good tips watch this channel https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WYHrDyCMUmg

In general YA = slop, queer elements = style over substance (i.e. you focus too much on sexuality over characters and plot) and fight scenes = meaningless spectacle

If you consider these your defining features I would urge you to reconsider.

>>24565343
Self-insert is also bad practice

>>24565319
Seething