Thread 24824385

>writing novel with female mc
>it devolves into rape rape rape and more rape
why am I like this

You think like a woman

>>24824385 (OP)
Maybe you should try spanking the monkey before sitting down to write

>>24824432
I do not find the rape sexual or arousing.

>>24824454
What the fuck is wrong with you?

literally just stop raping your characters.

Perfect booktok slop i'm predicting 4.38 ratings on goodreads

>>24824477
But I do not dwell on the rape, I use it as scene ending thing, like a punctuation.
>scene opens
>things happen
>dialogue happens
>then she gets raped (single declarative sentence)

>>24824385 (OP)
You have a bright future as a romantasy writer ahead of you. Send it to a publisher and you'll be more successful than anyone on /lit/ could dream of.

Because this is actually what women go through

>>24824493
here's an excerpt, I posted it in another thread. I am an ESL and it is originally written in different language, so I translated it using AI. Any critique is welcome.

Is the female MC the one doing the raping? Because if so, based.

>>24824561
It's fine.

>>24824566
Start doing this

>>24824385 (OP)
haha OP I love froggo XD

>>24824493
>>24824561
>rape is only slightly hinted at
>rape is relatively explicitly mentioned
>dialogue about rape happens
>then she gets raped
It's all rape.

>>24824385 (OP)
The most raped man in existence.

>>24824385 (OP)
You're just like me except the pages start sticking together in my case

>>24824528
Ah yes, having to take a rogue dick from an ugly, short man must be so hard. Meanwhile a guy shoots himself and they say "well shucks there were no warning signs. Guy seemed normal to me"

>>24824561
Why is it always an ESL?

>>24824385 (OP)
edit it slightly and get it published as romantasy

>>24824385 (OP)
Unironically quite accurate.
Women live life thinking about rape 24/7, either because they fear it from an ugly man they know, or because they get wet by the thought of it, all depending on where in their menstrual cycle they currently are, or whether they have a new crush who they wish would rape them.

>>24824982
Or he shoots up his school and classmates

>>24824570
>>24824842
here is how the scene continues.

>>24824385 (OP)
Do women experience character development after rape? They sure do like getting tattoos.

>>24824385 (OP)
you should make her implausibly aggressive and dominant against every man except for the shy awkward guy who is your obvious self insert who she eventually marries

>>24824561
there's a lot of grammatical errors in this and weird unnatural dialogue. why does it keep switching between past and future tense

>>24824385 (OP)
Same except she’s the rapist

>>24825649
the narration is in past tense, the inner monologue of characters for whom the past is present are in present tense, when they think about what they perceive as future they use future tense.
It's pretty basic and pretty normal stylistic choice in literature since like 1950s, Kundera and Hrabal used it often.

>>24825875
look if one sentence goes "would" and the next sentence goes "will" then it's just jarring and unaesthetic. it sounds unpleasant

>>24825887
It's AI translated from other language dude.

>>24824385 (OP)
You know your audience (women)

>>24824561
>>24825629
This is gay and boring. Where's the good stuff? I was promised rape, not this fag shit.

>>24825892
so why was the other guy defending it

>>24824385 (OP)
>writing novel with female mc
>it devolves into rape rape rape and more rape
I am like this and I love it

>>24825898
ok, here is the first rape, it comes midway through, it's 'that night' mentioned in the previous excerpt. It was one of first parts I wrote, it is not edited, just machine translated. if there are grammar errors or syntax errors it is becouse the AI was instructed to translate exactly and did not change the syntax. I didn't really check the translation this time.
The previous two excerpts are from near the end of the story.

>>24825925
All that and only 4 short sentences at the end describe anything like a rape. How am I supposed to get off to this?
Maybe this is an effect from the machine translation, but the writing is really stilted too. It doesn't do a good job of pulling me into the scene.

>>24825945
>the writing is really stilted too
as the guy who wrote it I agree. It's one of earlier parts I wrote, I think the other two I posted here are better written (and they are both more recent).
The approach I am taking to this project is 'just write and edit later'. Becouse I have abandoned lot of projects becouse of overthinking and over editing.
I also want to intentionally combine 'matter of fact' objective 'voice of god' narration with innter monologue of the chracters and to intermingle them (you can see that in the other two excerpts), becouse of thematic reasons.