Anonymous
9/7/2025, 2:15:58 AM
No.150241703
>>150238479
Pan, there's a lot to compliment in this pilot, but the writing is not very good, and brings the whole thing down for me. You should have introduced the characters and worldbuilding in a less frantic way, and it's not fully clear what their intentions and goals are.
Otherwise, congratulations for bringing your project to life. This fellow beaner wishes you the best, and hopes you publish more regular videos in the meantime.
Pan, there's a lot to compliment in this pilot, but the writing is not very good, and brings the whole thing down for me. You should have introduced the characters and worldbuilding in a less frantic way, and it's not fully clear what their intentions and goals are.
Otherwise, congratulations for bringing your project to life. This fellow beaner wishes you the best, and hopes you publish more regular videos in the meantime.