>>150880242
The dialogue is just boring and meandering. The characters feel like cardboard cut-outs. Clunky narration, too, that tells what the comic should be showing instead.
>FAIRY LIGHTS, PILLOWS, and PLUSHIES are scattered about, creating a stark contrast to the dreadful and eternally hostile night just outside.
This reads like a note that got left in the final draft.
>Your background is a field of wonderful yellow flowers. These are a very unusual species of flora and ones not very familiar to the more carnivorous variety on your planet.
It's a visual medium, why are you telling me what the character's desktop background looks like? It's just shitting out text for the sake of filling the page.