Anonymous
10/14/2025, 1:11:54 AM
No.24798545
>>24798534
>Is the "lights of gold and silver"
You're right and I'd actually never notice. It's supposed to be "Torches of gold and silver light burned steadily", thanks.
>PoV
You're right in assuming that. I wanted to see if the writing can hold its own weight without being carried by context or the story or the setting itself, just plain words ooc.
>Vocabulary
You're fine to criticize it. It's meant to be archaic but not too archaic as to not be incomprehensible, though that's something I've noted down for the second draft, mostly.
>Is the "lights of gold and silver"
You're right and I'd actually never notice. It's supposed to be "Torches of gold and silver light burned steadily", thanks.
>PoV
You're right in assuming that. I wanted to see if the writing can hold its own weight without being carried by context or the story or the setting itself, just plain words ooc.
>Vocabulary
You're fine to criticize it. It's meant to be archaic but not too archaic as to not be incomprehensible, though that's something I've noted down for the second draft, mostly.