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6/22/2025, 4:46:08 PM
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I liked both almost equally. I absolutely adore sensory deprivation in writing: I love the way it creates intimacy and changes communication, style, and opportunity. So I'm spoiled here with muteness and two opposing perspectives of blindness. Also, I will proclaim now that a long-awaited gentle kiss on the forehead is the apex of physical romance.
>The Creature
This came across as almost fairy tale or fablelike. The tone, background, and setting were quickly established, driving straight into the narrative. Good emotional beats throughout. That little Shining heart-to-heart, Fluttershy existing, and so on. I was expecting a creature maybe a couple centuries old to be more stubborn, cold, experienced, and mature, but it's just a soft, beautiful Rarity. The last quarter of the fic changes into something different, and I'm torn between disappointment that the story wasn't tied up with a clear cut message (typical of fables) and the satisfied, guilty indulgence of a very cute RariTwi ending. With that said, the whole Miss Aurora section may be my highlight across the fics. Out of the two, this fic is in the superposition of being both the worst and best.
Oh, and that cheeky remark at the end.
>The Knight
If the last quarter of The Creature was indulgence, then this was a descent into decadence! Where is the romance tag? "Mystery" is only a technicality here! There wasn't as strong of a fable feeling here, just Mono's refined RariTwi fetishism, lovely. Anyway, this story felt somewhat compressed or cramped, though I wouldn't want it stretched out either — maybe Rivermoon at the library and her adventures with Ridge being efficiently glossed over contributed to this. Most if not all character interactions were fulfilling, although Twilight and Rarity's interpersonal drama of "No, I'm protecting you!" did get tiresome at times. Mender and Rivermoon doing something as simple as sitting together, with the little hatchlings used as a method of interrogation, was amazing and tense. There was also some fine dialogue that's still stuck in my head, such as Ridge's "you’d get to take the title of widower back" and "Kings? Dear girl, I’d have killed gods", Rarity's heart analogies, and Twilight's ending confessions.
With that, it's not the best fic I've read, and I'm not sure if I share Mono's "I think it's the best story I've ever written" compared to their previous works, but this fic is very charming and succinct: satisfying.
With both fics together as a whole, it's a nice package. To smush in some more points (char limit):
I was foolishly expecting twists. Rarity's Chekhov's guns of supernatural speed and controlling ability were never really used, but it was their disuse that was used as a part of the story, I liked that. The changelings didn't do much changeling stuff besides be a convenient third party.
I didn't have much issue with the writing itself; it was good, but Incantation's name being shortened to Ink definitely threw me off.
I liked both almost equally. I absolutely adore sensory deprivation in writing: I love the way it creates intimacy and changes communication, style, and opportunity. So I'm spoiled here with muteness and two opposing perspectives of blindness. Also, I will proclaim now that a long-awaited gentle kiss on the forehead is the apex of physical romance.
>The Creature
This came across as almost fairy tale or fablelike. The tone, background, and setting were quickly established, driving straight into the narrative. Good emotional beats throughout. That little Shining heart-to-heart, Fluttershy existing, and so on. I was expecting a creature maybe a couple centuries old to be more stubborn, cold, experienced, and mature, but it's just a soft, beautiful Rarity. The last quarter of the fic changes into something different, and I'm torn between disappointment that the story wasn't tied up with a clear cut message (typical of fables) and the satisfied, guilty indulgence of a very cute RariTwi ending. With that said, the whole Miss Aurora section may be my highlight across the fics. Out of the two, this fic is in the superposition of being both the worst and best.
Oh, and that cheeky remark at the end.
>The Knight
If the last quarter of The Creature was indulgence, then this was a descent into decadence! Where is the romance tag? "Mystery" is only a technicality here! There wasn't as strong of a fable feeling here, just Mono's refined RariTwi fetishism, lovely. Anyway, this story felt somewhat compressed or cramped, though I wouldn't want it stretched out either — maybe Rivermoon at the library and her adventures with Ridge being efficiently glossed over contributed to this. Most if not all character interactions were fulfilling, although Twilight and Rarity's interpersonal drama of "No, I'm protecting you!" did get tiresome at times. Mender and Rivermoon doing something as simple as sitting together, with the little hatchlings used as a method of interrogation, was amazing and tense. There was also some fine dialogue that's still stuck in my head, such as Ridge's "you’d get to take the title of widower back" and "Kings? Dear girl, I’d have killed gods", Rarity's heart analogies, and Twilight's ending confessions.
With that, it's not the best fic I've read, and I'm not sure if I share Mono's "I think it's the best story I've ever written" compared to their previous works, but this fic is very charming and succinct: satisfying.
With both fics together as a whole, it's a nice package. To smush in some more points (char limit):
I was foolishly expecting twists. Rarity's Chekhov's guns of supernatural speed and controlling ability were never really used, but it was their disuse that was used as a part of the story, I liked that. The changelings didn't do much changeling stuff besides be a convenient third party.
I didn't have much issue with the writing itself; it was good, but Incantation's name being shortened to Ink definitely threw me off.
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