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6/22/2025, 6:56:29 PM
>>42290629
>below Sundowner Season?
But over Reticence. And most likely over E485k as well, but I'm not sure—they're so different it's very hard to compare them with any degree of objectivity.
>Are you sure?
I'm not. There could be errors here—or things that are too bold grammatically—but there was nothing that screamed "this isn't proper English". The writing being nice does help mask some dubious choices, convincing me that they're intentional and probably correct.
>he was kind of obnoxious
I beg your pardon, he was great! Even when he's being annoying to Twilight, he does it for her own benefit, and the "surprisingly clever, good-natured boomer adventurer joyfully (and loudly) reminiscing about his older adventures" archetype is very fun when the character is self-aware.
>would have been nice to see more of their adventures in detail
Yeah, but I also agree with your conclusion that it's good that Mono omitted it.
>being "good" by being subversive or a genre-deconstruction is easier
It makes the writer and the readers who agree with the writer feel very clever, even when it's not.
>>42290669
>You're underestimating the severity of what she's done.
I might have been, yes. But what's a little mind control between friends when it all worked out? (joking, of course)
>It would be a better fic if it were more subtle
I don't know if I'd agree—it would be a different fic. Drowning the reader in the nearly-melodramatic story was the authorial intent of the story, and a less dramatic version of it would fail to do that. While that would make it better by some other metrics, I can't agree with such a definitive statement that those other metrics are "objective" better than the goal she'd set for herself here.
>>42290681
>sounds like exactly the kind of thing you'd find in a myth or legend
Mistaken/hidden identities are also a classic trope of the genre.
>>42290699
>it was one of the highlights of the fic
Oh, it was very good, yes! But I liked how the perspective and perceptions changed over the course of the fic, so I don't know if I'd agree with
>Is everyone going to say this?
Hey, I didn't! I was tempted to, but character limit is a pain.
>Rarity is meant to be this old, mythical creature,
Is she, really? For all we know she could've been chased away in her youth and spent her centuries in isolation. Not much room for character development when you're stuck alone in the forest.
>They feel too much like "one-liners" that Monochromatic was clearly very proud of herself for writing.
No, the "I'd have killed gods" line following the reveal that he was being loudly annoying on purpose to find Twilight is a really nice moment highlighting North's actual character versus the first (poor) impression you (and Twilight) get of him.
>forget they're changelings if not for the
And their extremely fae-like introduction, with hidden villages in the woods, blindfolds, etc.
>below Sundowner Season?
But over Reticence. And most likely over E485k as well, but I'm not sure—they're so different it's very hard to compare them with any degree of objectivity.
>Are you sure?
I'm not. There could be errors here—or things that are too bold grammatically—but there was nothing that screamed "this isn't proper English". The writing being nice does help mask some dubious choices, convincing me that they're intentional and probably correct.
>he was kind of obnoxious
I beg your pardon, he was great! Even when he's being annoying to Twilight, he does it for her own benefit, and the "surprisingly clever, good-natured boomer adventurer joyfully (and loudly) reminiscing about his older adventures" archetype is very fun when the character is self-aware.
>would have been nice to see more of their adventures in detail
Yeah, but I also agree with your conclusion that it's good that Mono omitted it.
>being "good" by being subversive or a genre-deconstruction is easier
It makes the writer and the readers who agree with the writer feel very clever, even when it's not.
>>42290669
>You're underestimating the severity of what she's done.
I might have been, yes. But what's a little mind control between friends when it all worked out? (joking, of course)
>It would be a better fic if it were more subtle
I don't know if I'd agree—it would be a different fic. Drowning the reader in the nearly-melodramatic story was the authorial intent of the story, and a less dramatic version of it would fail to do that. While that would make it better by some other metrics, I can't agree with such a definitive statement that those other metrics are "objective" better than the goal she'd set for herself here.
>>42290681
>sounds like exactly the kind of thing you'd find in a myth or legend
Mistaken/hidden identities are also a classic trope of the genre.
>>42290699
>it was one of the highlights of the fic
Oh, it was very good, yes! But I liked how the perspective and perceptions changed over the course of the fic, so I don't know if I'd agree with
>Is everyone going to say this?
Hey, I didn't! I was tempted to, but character limit is a pain.
>Rarity is meant to be this old, mythical creature,
Is she, really? For all we know she could've been chased away in her youth and spent her centuries in isolation. Not much room for character development when you're stuck alone in the forest.
>They feel too much like "one-liners" that Monochromatic was clearly very proud of herself for writing.
No, the "I'd have killed gods" line following the reveal that he was being loudly annoying on purpose to find Twilight is a really nice moment highlighting North's actual character versus the first (poor) impression you (and Twilight) get of him.
>forget they're changelings if not for the
And their extremely fae-like introduction, with hidden villages in the woods, blindfolds, etc.
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