>>7639822
>>7639782
>>7639745
Not the other anon:
- you need to be more careful to define forms as rounded. the way you're using line is creating hard corners, which Keane manages to avoid. Look very carefully at the relationships of his lines, how do they show plane changes without making hard corners all over?
- the problem with the hand in the lower left is not the lack of a value statement, it's that you have too many lines and not enough clarity on their relationships. Leaving all the lines from the undersketch is probably the biggest contributor to this problem, if you had done it on a different layer it would look better.
- the massaging hands are almost there, but you're drawing too quickly. you need to slow down and make sure you indicate the various 'sides' of forms and how they wedge and interlock. You're doing it well in some places (middle finger of left hand), but in others you just have flat rectangles (ring finger of left hand). You've got this issue all over the place, the problems with your work are like 20% errors in perspective (looks a lil slidy in some spots) and 80% just not having establishing enough information.

looks like you're on track though, definitely getting across the gap to thinking in form instead of shape.