>>42330875
>I love, love, love how grim and horrible this one is!
Yup, agreed with most of your post. All of my notes here are five descriptions (like picrel) with a word or two praising them for how good they are. They are, sadly, worse without the buildup.
>we're pulled along with her as she gorges herself
Desu I suspected what was happening before she started eating. And not just because I wrote a worse version of that scene once.
>The ending sequence was probably unsatisfying to most people,
No, I liked the ending. And yes, to the favorites it goes.

>>42331120
>Granny Smith sorta spells it out in the first chapter if you're paying attention,
She does, but it also plays into the fic's themes of earth pony labor contrasted with the unicorn "shortcuts", so I don't think it was a bad bit of foreshadowing.
>but one that I love, and it still managed to get a reaction out of me.
>when Twilight talks to the Granny Smith construct and
The fic was really, really good at making its horror descriptions hit hard in the moment and feel memorable later.

>>42332629
kek at that entire post
>all plants being a blood-sucking hivemind
To be precise, 'the field' being that. Not just plants, but the earth, the worms, etc. And they only take a little.
>two pages of crawling through dirt cave-ins
Hey, it was very good dirt crawling!
>Flim-Flam did nothing wrong.
They did, actually—they got caught in the corn.
>Spike got away
Ah, the true horror is when you realize the implications left by the fic. If only they could chuck him into the corn to buy Twilight's life.
>Pipsqueak solved the riddle by following the music
Well, duh. Moonfags are proven to be at least 100% smarter than your average pony.