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6/15/2025, 5:09:41 PM
>>42272632
>plenty that never even got a punchline
I don't mind that too much. A lot of time it felt like the opposite is true, too, where you could tell that everything being introduced is a Chekhov's gun. It's not the most appropriate criticism for [Comedy][Random] perhaps, so I'm not criticizing the story for how shallow it is. It's not the point here.
>elevated to about the best you could do with those two tags
I do think this is better than Tantabus Mk.II, so yes, you're probably right. At the very least I can't think of anything better with those tags.
>I'm sure somebody knows what I mean
I also got the feeling that he's (or she's, I suppose) inserting quite a lot into Clover. Not just talking about the family stuff; the perspective she has and how the college life is described (more... grounded? that the rest) really made me think the author wrote this when they were at the university.
Oh, and yes, I enjoyed how alien Starswirl was as well.
>>42272637
>side characters
The fic does a good job introducing all of them for their episodic stories and then still doing something with them later.
>The cultists
Maybe it's partially because I was starting to get nervous whenever I checked the time, but that part of the fic wasn't my favorite. As the other anon said, going into their minds felt kind of pointless, really, and making them more well-rounded characters wasn't something the fic's finale should've been concerned with.
>I think I'll even give it a favourite
It doesn't get there for me, but it's a good story that you can't go too wrong with favoriting. It missed for me a bit too much, but it's rarely straight-up bad (only the R63 world, imo), and it's written competently the whole way through. I haven't finished it either, though, and if there really is an EQG epilogue, that's probably not a great place to finish.
>>42272656
>interesting (and dark) element to add to how light the rest of the fic was
Yes, that and a lot of other things to do with Starswirl. The prophecies, the world ending in ice, blood pacts—all the many things he's keeping to himself so that ponykind can exist in peace. He's doing the Princesses job, and I'm certain it's intentional. He probably got it from Luna.
>reading comprehension issue
I'm afraid so. Every time he alludes to the Stars and what happened 90 years ago, he's talking about Luna. Did you miss the part where he gets very upset at Clover using the nig— word? Or that he's studied time travel hoping to prevent NMM? Or that one of the reasons he's about to give up and die is that he won't live long enough to be there in 900 years (when Luna comes back)? Or the fact that he's on Canterlot Street 1 (that he names this way)? I really enjoy the little implications of him knowing Luna and Celestia; I wish there was more to it.
>maybe I'm being too charitable
No, maybe you're right. I could see that. But for me, it's too much of a shock given the tone of the fic. And his dream (which you haven't read?) is also bad.
>plenty that never even got a punchline
I don't mind that too much. A lot of time it felt like the opposite is true, too, where you could tell that everything being introduced is a Chekhov's gun. It's not the most appropriate criticism for [Comedy][Random] perhaps, so I'm not criticizing the story for how shallow it is. It's not the point here.
>elevated to about the best you could do with those two tags
I do think this is better than Tantabus Mk.II, so yes, you're probably right. At the very least I can't think of anything better with those tags.
>I'm sure somebody knows what I mean
I also got the feeling that he's (or she's, I suppose) inserting quite a lot into Clover. Not just talking about the family stuff; the perspective she has and how the college life is described (more... grounded? that the rest) really made me think the author wrote this when they were at the university.
Oh, and yes, I enjoyed how alien Starswirl was as well.
>>42272637
>side characters
The fic does a good job introducing all of them for their episodic stories and then still doing something with them later.
>The cultists
Maybe it's partially because I was starting to get nervous whenever I checked the time, but that part of the fic wasn't my favorite. As the other anon said, going into their minds felt kind of pointless, really, and making them more well-rounded characters wasn't something the fic's finale should've been concerned with.
>I think I'll even give it a favourite
It doesn't get there for me, but it's a good story that you can't go too wrong with favoriting. It missed for me a bit too much, but it's rarely straight-up bad (only the R63 world, imo), and it's written competently the whole way through. I haven't finished it either, though, and if there really is an EQG epilogue, that's probably not a great place to finish.
>>42272656
>interesting (and dark) element to add to how light the rest of the fic was
Yes, that and a lot of other things to do with Starswirl. The prophecies, the world ending in ice, blood pacts—all the many things he's keeping to himself so that ponykind can exist in peace. He's doing the Princesses job, and I'm certain it's intentional. He probably got it from Luna.
>reading comprehension issue
I'm afraid so. Every time he alludes to the Stars and what happened 90 years ago, he's talking about Luna. Did you miss the part where he gets very upset at Clover using the nig— word? Or that he's studied time travel hoping to prevent NMM? Or that one of the reasons he's about to give up and die is that he won't live long enough to be there in 900 years (when Luna comes back)? Or the fact that he's on Canterlot Street 1 (that he names this way)? I really enjoy the little implications of him knowing Luna and Celestia; I wish there was more to it.
>maybe I'm being too charitable
No, maybe you're right. I could see that. But for me, it's too much of a shock given the tone of the fic. And his dream (which you haven't read?) is also bad.
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