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6/11/2025, 2:32:04 AM
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1. >>24454243 PIGS + !s6i9bBCpdw - https://rentry.co/6f9ssxk8. Absolutely fantastic and beautiful, and concise. A+. I have nothing but love to say, even how the bar scene was written so well.
Favorite line: At once the floodgates opened up again. The mere sight of his corpse broke the barrier. The tub once emptied was filled to the brim and overflowing
Least favorite line: none, all were great.
2. >>24455111 (nice trips by the way) ineptia !!/7cMIiSCHvi - https://rentry.co/Noli_Me_Tangere_by_ineptia. I was going to drop this halfway, but then when we got to "My whole" part, and the MC runs with his cilice out in the rain, that was great. Plus the prose was excellent, keep it up! A- with revision, B otherwise.
Favorite line: I didn’t see children holding their parent’s hands; I saw parent’s holding their children’s hands, clinging to perpetuate this idiotic parade via sunk-cost to make themselves feel better about themselves.
Least favorite line: picrel. Just make a substack.
3.>>24455095 yodo !cLLpbu6HI - https://rentry.co/theysaysavsaba. Maybe I'm too retarded but besides the great prose/imagery, I don't get what's the big deal. A kid is born that shouldn't have been, and the village is up in arms about it. Plus it got that literary tone where I don't understand what I'm reading, in terms of cultures/rituals and connections (how does Adamu's birth connect to Lod? What is this your sword stuff?). Maybe if I give it another read I'll get it. But then again, I did not have to do that for 6f9ssxk8, I read it once and not only enjoyed it, I understood the plot, the stakes, the escalation. I'll give it a B+ on prose but C- on plot.
At this point this is where I feel the stories started getting a bit too, I don't know the phrase, pedestrian? Routine? Anecdotal? As in I'm reading events, not stories. I'm reading Florida man does something, with emotional throughline (my own story suffers from that a bit). Plus, I found the prose/imagery to suffer a bit here. I can't say theysaysavsaba was boring me, I can't say Tangere's tangents weren't pretty to read. But I can here.
1. >>24454243 PIGS + !s6i9bBCpdw - https://rentry.co/6f9ssxk8. Absolutely fantastic and beautiful, and concise. A+. I have nothing but love to say, even how the bar scene was written so well.
Favorite line: At once the floodgates opened up again. The mere sight of his corpse broke the barrier. The tub once emptied was filled to the brim and overflowing
Least favorite line: none, all were great.
2. >>24455111 (nice trips by the way) ineptia !!/7cMIiSCHvi - https://rentry.co/Noli_Me_Tangere_by_ineptia. I was going to drop this halfway, but then when we got to "My whole" part, and the MC runs with his cilice out in the rain, that was great. Plus the prose was excellent, keep it up! A- with revision, B otherwise.
Favorite line: I didn’t see children holding their parent’s hands; I saw parent’s holding their children’s hands, clinging to perpetuate this idiotic parade via sunk-cost to make themselves feel better about themselves.
Least favorite line: picrel. Just make a substack.
3.>>24455095 yodo !cLLpbu6HI - https://rentry.co/theysaysavsaba. Maybe I'm too retarded but besides the great prose/imagery, I don't get what's the big deal. A kid is born that shouldn't have been, and the village is up in arms about it. Plus it got that literary tone where I don't understand what I'm reading, in terms of cultures/rituals and connections (how does Adamu's birth connect to Lod? What is this your sword stuff?). Maybe if I give it another read I'll get it. But then again, I did not have to do that for 6f9ssxk8, I read it once and not only enjoyed it, I understood the plot, the stakes, the escalation. I'll give it a B+ on prose but C- on plot.
At this point this is where I feel the stories started getting a bit too, I don't know the phrase, pedestrian? Routine? Anecdotal? As in I'm reading events, not stories. I'm reading Florida man does something, with emotional throughline (my own story suffers from that a bit). Plus, I found the prose/imagery to suffer a bit here. I can't say theysaysavsaba was boring me, I can't say Tangere's tangents weren't pretty to read. But I can here.
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