>>42604158
Blackjack tripping over memory orbs was bad enough. Dumping non-diegetic flashbacks into your story because you really need to explain how Spitfire was blackmailing Rainbow Dash is lazy and excessive.
>>42604310
Maybe I've been playing too much Sonora, but I really dislike the silly/campy bits of lore that crept in around FO2 and have been propagated by Bethesda. Using vaults as social experiments is silly and illogical, even if some stories pull it off well. The Enclave being supervillans that may have dropped the bombs on Equestria themselves is silly and undermines the seriousness of the war. The war spiraling out of control because the mane six abandoned their friendships works better than "peace was possible, but a cabal of pegasi fucked everything up."

Anyways, I'm on chapter 36 and still not sure where the story is going. The Steel Rangers act more like the NCR, and alternate between helping and trying to kill Aurora and her stable every other chapter. The Enclave is cast as a murderous theocracy but so far they've been helpful and empathetic to Aurora's plight. If the story ends with "ah well, the Enclave are evil gotta kill em all" I think I'll end up hating this fic.