Wondering how I can make this opening paragraph for new chapter work. Any ideas? Good as-is? Too much description?
Lawrence, still frozen by the spells of God, could only look in horror as great, big, spherical temporospatial rifts, bright and furious as a thousand suns, flashed, then ruptured, time and again, big and small, all through the vicinity. All along the rims of these vortexes were many electric tendrils flailing wildly like the arms of a raging octopus. They gave away to concentrated mists, from which forth the dogs of war sprang—Imperium Star Dreadnoughts. More and more of them!