>>42495215
>Also Pharanx should've gone with thorax
I was waiting for this to come up every time Pharynx told Thorax that he was the thing he lived for in the hive, and that he was nothing without his brother. If Thorax has nothing at the hive, and intends to leave, leaving Pharynx with nothing, they should obviously just leave together. There could've been an argument about how Phaynx believes in Chrysalis, or the other drones depend on him, or something, but it was never even considered.

>>42495668
It's really not that different from canon. In Thorax's introduction, he says he abandons the hive after ACW (the gap in time between then and Season 6 is unexplained), and then the Spike episode happens, and he's left working for Shiny and Candy.
In the fic, he similarly saves Spike from falling down a ravine, which is really the only downer part of the ending. It looked like it was setting up the rest of canon: he would make some friends, return to the hive, challenge Chrysalis, and become the big gay.
The main difference from canon is closing the unreasonable timing gap and that he ends up with Twilight vouching for him instead. Is it worth trading a Spike episode for Twilight's character being erased? Since Spike didn't die, I'm going to say no, but it's otherwise a close call.