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I don't think the fic is fine. It's not good, I would never read it again, and I don't think I would even recommend it to a Thorax fan on the assumption that there must be something better. If not for the club, I would've dropped it when Twilight does almost nothing except starve for an entire week, just waiting for Thorax to feed her.
I don't exactly regret continuing to read it, there were a couple good Pharynx scenes after that. It's just absurd how pathetic Twilight was in this fic, and how little the author cares for her, even to have Spike not know the name of Smarty Pants.

It was very unsatisfying to have Pharynx fail to meet Twilight, and him pwning the poorly named bullies didn't make up for that, either.

I liked the epilogue, post-ACW section of the fic the most, I guess. It seemed to have the fewest typos, the fewest awkwardly phrased sentences, and Thorax was the least bad. It still sucked, including a scene with Thorax gazing south of the hive while planning trip to Equestria, which is north of them.

I don't agree that the moral was "they're irredeemable," it was more like "Thorax can't redeem them on his own." There was no B-team supporting him, and he had to spend a long time in TCE as well before he had the resolve to face Chrysalis in the show.