>>150003799
>first paragraph
Says "no part", should be "no small part".
>Inco would be put on the backburner now. Besides, the Circle of Pride was big.
This line is his thoughts, right? Feels weird to be in past tense as if it's still narration here.
>Loona leaping 50 feet in the air
That... seems a bit high. I assume she could climb most of it with her claws but maybe not leap that outright.
>I knew she was from the Ring of Greed
Should be Gluttony, not Greed.
I loved it, it was cute and I liked Anon and Octavia finally meeting. You do a really good job of making Anon feel like an organic addition to the cast.