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There's actually a really simple way to rewrite this to make it better.
Remove Orphie's trauma dumping section.
The boss fight will work without Orphie telling us she's a clone and such.
We already know about Magus' relationship with Isolde and Isolde's grievances. Orphie's part is not required for the emotional stakes to be high.
Add an Agent Story that unlocks after the story, focused on Orphie.
We explore Magus' grief and Orphie's insecurities in the Agent Story instead.