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I can understand most of the feedback, though I'd just like to add the context this is a sort of modern man sent to Arthurian-esque land, so the "wooden dialogue" was more an attempt to differentiate between those who come from our world and those who exist in a sort of storybook land. Do you have any advice on a better way to handle that? I wanted to stay away from the "thee, thou, ye" vocabulary.
Also, can you explain a bit more about the direction-based words you specified? Wouldn't that be a concise way of expressing "meaning", or is it more that there should be some further explanation/description ("barked an order", "directed with a silent glare", etc.)?
I don't really have anyone irl to offer advice on this, so I appreciate your feedback.