>>724968076
I don't think there's necessarily anything wrong with the composition, but it might become clearer if there's more movement in the characters actions if you will. The guy going from kneeling to standing up could flow better if he was drawn in the middle of standing up rather than already standing. Drawing Koakuma's head or silhouette in the 4th panel below I think would help give the feeling of her presence even more (as if her ass wasn't doing that already) and also since there's a bit of empty space at the bottom. I hope that made sense