>>58333285
>The writing seems to have improved a lot here.
Interesting take. All I really see is the adding of not particularly important expository information, and the copying over. Though I guess the fire thing is neat.
>Which makes me think, people going pale or red-faced isn't that common in real life
Eh, it depends I feel. Especially on climate and the individual's skin.
>blushing Kiki is cute...
Truth beyond truth!
>Msscribe saga
Something that was before my time.