>>542391407
This story is generally OK. I don't feel like it wasted my time as badly as some of the others on the Rentry, but there are obviously some problems. The guy being obsessed with Goosebumps has really nothing to do with the proceeding events. In general, the protagonist isn't a strong presence at all, and removing him entirely in lieu of simply describing this version of the game would only improve the story. There's no reason to have the "I'm a big fan of Sonic" spiel. The concept of the story is also just not scary because I'm not scared of a Goosebumps superhero character laughing at me and the Mutant doesn't do anything scary.
All that said, I think this story is better than Clownfag's previous stories (assuming this was written by Clownfag) because it doesn't waste so much time on a play-by-play of the game, like "the second level was like the original game's second level but the bricks were dirtier and Mario's shoes were yellow"; it just gives you the broad strokes of what makes the game different from the original. I'm also biased in this story's favor because I liked Goosebumps as a kid and I'm familiar with the game; this game is a more novel pick than New Super Mario Bros or some shit. Besides that, though, this story doesn't do anything special.

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