A thread for the creation and discussion of fan fiction and other fanworks - anything that involves a story and/or reading. What've you been reading? What've you been writing? What would you like to see more of?

>Thread question:
Fanfics very rarely end but if you were to write an ending to one, how would you do so? Would you feel obligated to close every plot thread? Can be something you are writing, dropped, reading, or read.

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>>57910530

>>57918794 (OP)
Isekai MC becomes Champion after years of grueling effort but then in a flash of light Arceus transports them back to their original world, the very second they left. Their body is back to the way it was, and all of his Pokemon and human friends remain in the Pokemon world. All he has to remember his grand adventure by are his memories, which he can feel fading...almost as if it had all been a dream...

>>57918794 (OP)
FFfag here. FF1 actually ends very vaguely. Not just in a 'You won! The End' kind of way that a lot of NES games ended but in a sort of intentional uncertainty about how the world has been effected by the story.

So for my fic I have both the urge to emulate that while at the same time I want to wrap up the loose ends in a neat bow. I've been thinking about how to balance these two things in a satisfying way.

Out of curiosity, what would people here prefer to read? Do you like stories that leave a lot of unanswered questions, or do you prefer getting full closure?

>>57918844
Reminds me of when people talk about the first Narnia book. Those kids lived full adult lives as kings and queens of the realm before getting booted back to the moment they first arrived. At that point it's practically a reverse isekai considering they may have lived longer in Narnia than Earth.

>>57918794 (OP)
Obviously each fic has its own specific way of doing a conclusion. Whatever themes were explored should be highlighted (if there were any), and the protagonist should return “home” (whatever that may be come journey’s end) a changed person. I’m a sucker for a good multi-year later epilogue where the principle characters’ changes are on full display. I would assume BoC would involve Lee and Ninetales in their own lab or something after Maxie/Archie/Delta Episiode have been dealt with (holy fuck those are all a long way away, that story is never ending).

Bonus points for if you can have the last line of the last chapter seem like a reference to the opening line.

>>57918844
>>57918849
This and those "return to salaryman" endings fill me with bitter rage on behalf of the characters. It's endings like that which cause people to cope with fanfics.

>>57918991
They did return to Narnia tho

>>57918794 (OP)
>Fanfics very rarely end
All of mine reach some state of completion.
Go me!

>>57918845
>Do you like stories that leave a lot of unanswered questions, or do you prefer getting full closure?
All of the main arcs should be satisfied. Otherwise you didn't conclude, you just stopped.
B plots need to be at least partially resolved and world building should be obviously open. That way if you're one of the very fortunate few to have people shout "MOAR!" after reading the story, you can come back and write a sequel composed of moar.

Cool pic. Very Kalos themed

>>57919008
Two of them returned to Narnia, the two younger ones who had grown up a bit so that they were guiding two new younger people (if my memory serves). It's actually mentioned how the older kids 'moving on' as they grow up is the reason they can't go back. Kind of wild implications of a former queen moving on due to 'starting to think about boys more' when theoretically this would be the second time she's gone through puberty.

>>57919137
three died in a train accident and arrived to Narnia where Aslan took them to the REAL Narnia, except Susan because she turned into a whore or something

>>57918991
the actual world is too shit to justify it. Anyone willing to abandon people they formed a year long bond over for the garbage waiting for them on earth would be insane.

I don't care how much you love your family and friends, people change and you can't have a pokemon story about friendship when all those friends are just stepping stones to go back to working for israel.

>>57919156
I never read all of the books, but that sounds stupid enough to be true.

>>57919173
It's completely true, the entire series is a very literal allegory to Christianity. Aslan is not just meant to remind you of Jesus, he's LITERALLY Jesus wearing a lion fursuit in a different dimension. But because of all the fantasy trappings the metaphor often gets very strained, like with >>57919137 talking about the older sister meant to be an allegory for becoming swayed by worldly temptations and forgetting God, but prompting the question of why, if God were real, wouldn't he just more directly intervene like he did with putting the kids in Narnia.

>>57919169
I made a vow to my wife to be with her. I'd take this shitty world over betraying her to live in a wonderland.

>>57919188
kek, yeah, in a pokemon fanfiction thread. Less believable than nuke trauma

>>57919183
I am very much aware of how literal Jesus's fursona is in the series. That's why I didn't even question how retarded that is.

>>57919188
>not bringing your wife over to a more idyllic world.

>>57919196
>not able to believe that people in a group that they are part of are capable of finding love

I was gonna bully you, but nah. You should believe in yourself more. You and everybody else in this world deserves love. Work towards becoming a man who is seen as worthy of that love.

>>57919228
Might choose. I have a pretty close knit family and I would miss them, but if it meant taking care of my wife I would do what I had to do. The question is if the pain of losing whats being given up is worth whats being gained. For many people the world has not been kind enough for them to see any reason to stay. But I have been very lucky despite my hardship, if only in that I can say I have many people who I love and whom love me.

I would never judge anybody for staying, but we all have our reasons for the choices we make.

>>57919247
Believe in what? Abandoning dozens are people and pokemon for selfishness? Midwit behavior

>>57919276
Believe that you're the kind of person who can find people in this wold who you wouldn't abandon.

>>57919276
In the most evil trainer, they show him constantly struggling with leaving them behind and try to give a reasonable reason to go back, child grooming aside.

The idea of how bad that is is one of the main themes with the story saying the most evil trainer is someone who abandons their pokemon

The tale shall end in a manner befitting of the nature of Chosen One, wether it means the end of All and the rebirth of All or the end the cyclus as a whole. And when the the exploits of the protagonist of destiny are over and the trail laid before time has been marched over, only then will the narrative be satiated and the pen drops.

>>57919372
But what makes a chosen one a chosen one?

>>57919381
(you), the Author.

>>57919156
I hope Lewis is burning in hell for doing my girl Susan so fucking dirty.

>>57919523
Sounds like she was the one doing dirty.

>>57919556
Aaaaaaaay but yeah fuck Lewis.

Speaking of which, didn't Iris did a Kira Kira (Gundam) to talk to Ash's Dragonite?

>>57919580
What do you expect from a long, tedious Jesus allegory?

Also, looking at Wikipedia, apparently Lewis was making the point that she had lost her faith in Jesus and Heaven (Aslan and Narnia) and that there is probably a story in her perhaps finding her way back to the faith, but it wouldn't be the kind of novel he'd care to write and leaves it to interested parties to try the task for themselves, which is a kinda cool way to handle the issue: go write Susan's story if you want to see it.

>>57919589
First of all, are you the retarded faggot trying to push muh blood type aura?

>>57919690
blood type is effective on pokemon with blood ignoring type advantages and disadvantages

Can Pokemon have humans jobs, own property and vote? Or do they need a trainer to function in society?

>>57919936
Only if they pay taxes.
None of them are stupid enough for that deal.

>>57919944
>Meowth used Pay Day

>>57919984
>counterfeit currency
straight to the pc box jail

>>57919991
The move description says the trainer picks up the coins that were thrown, it is actual money

>>57920011
There was a whole episode about that wasn't there

>>57920011
>Inflation, that's right!

>>57920018
I'm talking about the games

>>57918794 (OP)
I only managed to write a Pokemon x Pokemon romance fic and was decently proud of it

>>57920034
which mons

>>57920027
nice autism lol

What do wild Pokemon with the Poke doll you throw to flee the battle?

If the ecology book is canon then Pokémon do eat each other and humans eat them too meaning that their magical meat can be used as a reason behind their bodies being stronger than ours

>>57919611
>which is a kinda cool way to handle the issue
More like the cop-out of a hack.

>>57920095
they run away before a banette forms

>>57920095
It plays a pre-recorded Tyranitar roar at ear-rape volumes to scare them off

>>57920104
>They don't have to, I taught my Pyroar to eat tofu

>>57920050
Litten and Sprigatito

>>57919262
Do you think she'd be mad if you returned and she finds out you didn't even try to beseech hoopa/lunala/jirachi/palkia/arceus to get her isekai'd too?
It worked for the PMD partners.

Very tempted to have a jibberish-babbling rando get disembowled by a hostile Pokemon but I figure it's too edgy. Would it make a difference if he's Indian?

>>57920104
That's awful, eating pokemon. Thankfully, I have a vore fetish so I only feed my pokemon humans.

>>57918794 (OP)
>Thread question
I have a very specific ending in mind but it's 500k words away at the very least, I'll link this post in 2030 when its finally done and say "I did it guys"

>>57920291
Racism pisses me off, and I'm not a big fan of randos being killed for the sake of edginess. But I probably am also not your target audience, and its your story so you gotta write what you think is best.

>>57920291
Since it's a mob character I'd have no investment in their fate either way so the most you can go for is to make it funny or entertaining in execution.

>>57920264
Well I just asked her and she said she would only go if we could bring everybody we love. At least in the stage of our lives that we are in right now.

>>57918794 (OP)
>thread question
What I'm slowly writing now has multiple stopping points, so if I ever burn out I have goals to work towards instead of some super end point
Other stories though?
>New Normal
Right after the whole regigigas and palkia/galatic arc it was the most logical end.
>Slow life pokemon
Honestly when they first saved him, so have the prologue just be a snippet story, or when the first oddish evolves. Shows him being a positive influence and leaving his development more open
>savage
Being adopted by the Tyrantrum would have set up human (mostly) vs wilds instead of ANOTHER rehash of gen 1/2, now with 70% more italic usage and woe is me trans edginess not sure why I'm still reading this to be honest, don't even like that damn story or its premise

Truthfully speaking most of the stories I'm reading so far aren't at great stopping points. It seems that most people write stuff with massive arcs in mind but forget that they write slowly. So that 300,000 word arc lasts 4 years.

>>57920326
>Racism pisses me off
boo hoo?

>>57920416
>2nd spoiler
How many anons have a story like that? Something that you keep reading despite the fact you don't care for it or even hate it? Or maybe its cause you like the intial premise and it never delivered? Sheer boredom and self loathing?

Which is better?
Aura just being like literally my mom's Dragon Ball Ki?
Or Type Aura giving unique and specialized powers and capabilities based on the Type?
If the latter, should some Types of Aura be more common and some more rare? Or should the spread be equal?

>>57919262
>wife
>>57920356
>wife who loves family
Has there ever been a story with an MC (or SI) significant other to the MC? I'm not talking about they start dating in the story but like they start as a couple?
Sort of like the Incredibles, where the focus isn't on getting a relationship but having one and working together. Honestly sounds like it might give a new direction for the more drama/social facing authors

>>57920421
Savage Divinity on royalroad is that lol. Shit went south at chapter 150~ and continued going south and souther till its terrible ending at ch840 as patreon was hemorrhaging.
I wanna touch the skies was like that too. Started okay, but as someone who was reading it closely the author started to crash out hard with the tranny stuff. There's a clear mood shift as the story became worse and worse.

>>57920424
For the love of god try to go one thread without bringing up Aura powers you DBZ refugee. Humans don't need the powers because the Pokémon, the shit that the entire franchise is based off of have them and they work together. If your MC can't handle not being the star of the show during both social/plot stuff and fighting? Then you need to go back.
Aura needs specialized stuff, psychics get tk or telepathy, dragons get the stupid killing intent aura, fairy aura means your grooming is 2x effective

>>57918794 (OP)
It's more of a perverted power table than actual fanfiction, but here:

I've created a system where pregnant pokegirls wield the pokemon powers in their bellies to manhandle and dom boys. It started as indirect bestiality BUT I just had an idea for "pokemon bonded Z-crystal impregnation" instead if you hate nonhuman shit. I'm not much a bestiality guy anyway. Inspired by https://exhentai.org/?f_search=0k0j0+lotus
https://files.catbox.moe/p42pq6.png
1/3

>>57920449
>Electric
She electrostimulates the boy’s dick, balls, and prostate. Can send tingling pulses through his entire body or totally electrocute him.
Her pussy shocks his cock so hard it feels like his balls are gonna explode.
>Ghost
Soul bond. They feel each others pleasure. Her touch and pussy feels like being caressed by phantom hands.
It’s like her pregnant pussy is haunted, jerking him off from the inside.
>Psychic
Hypnotizes the boy into a trance and influences his thoughts. She can share vivid mental impressions.
She brainfucks him so hard he can’t tell if he’s cumming in her or just imagining it.
>Fairy
Feels euphoric. Heals and soothes the boy with a pussy that feels heavenly like silk.
Her pussy’s so soft it feels like he’s fucking a cloud.
>Fire
Her pussy is burning hot but doesn't harm. Perfect for blizzards, her body heat keeps them alive.
It’s like sticking his dick in a furnace. Her swollen belly radiates heat and melts his brain with pleasure.
>Ice
Her pussy is cold and refreshing, sending shivers of pleasure through his body. Feels like an icy onahole. Good for hot weather.
Her frosty cunt makes him shiver so hard he can’t tell if he’s freezing or just cumming his soul out.
>Water
Her drenched pussy controls his seminal fluids forcing him to ejaculate then sending it back in then roiling it around. She also grants water-breathing.
She milks his cock dry, then slams the cum back in like she’s recycling it.
>Grass
Secretes medicinal nectar that's a powerful aphrodisiac. Turning him desperate and manic.
Her pussy juice is basically liquid Viagra; one taste and he’s humping her like a feral animal.
>Poison
Hallucinogenic fluids that flood his senses. She is intoxicating like alcohol.
Her toxic cunt makes him trip balls while she rides him.

>>57920447
>Noooooo you can't make your MC a mary/gary stu the world revolves around just like it happens in the games or the anime or the the manga or literally any Pokemon media because... you just can't okay!?
Pokemon is a Chosen One Self-Insert Franchise.
C O P E

>>57920452
>Bug
Life Drain. Drains the boy’s energy during sex then pours it all back in.
She fucks him half to death, then her womb pumps his energy back just to make him beg for another draining.
>Flying
Levitating powers where the girl manhandles the boy. Her pussy imparts an elated sense of lightness.
She flips him around mid-air like a fuck doll while riding his dick so hard her bouncing pregnant belly brushes against his chest.
>Ground
She and her pussy exerts a crushing gravitational pull. It pushes him down with pleasurable heaviness and compresses his dick.
It feels like her preggo pussy is trying to crush his cock while pinning him to the ground.
>Rock
She repeatedly petrifies and unpetrifies them, grinding their intermittently rocky genitals together. The jagged slams feel rough and brutal but amazing.
Her repetrifying pussy grinds his cock like he's fucking a lubbed up geode. He feels like they're rock monsters.
>Steel
Vibrates like a high-tech sex toy. Every thrust feels mechanical yet wonderful.
Her vibrating pussy makes his cock feel like it’s getting jackhammered into oblivion while her swollen belly quivers with every thrust.
>Fighting
She gets hype beyond all reason and monkey-fucks the boy. Her aura makes him feel stronger.
She pounds him so hard with her preggo cunny that he feels like he just lost a wrestling match with his dick as the prize.
>Dark
Fear sex. Gets all yandere and sadistic and casts a terror-inducing aura.
Her crazy gaze makes his cock harder than steel while she fucks him like a psycho.
>Dragon
Her pussy exudes a regal eminence. Feels like fucking pure power and makes every thrust feel monumental.
She is smug as fuck, radiating sheer power that makes him feel like he’s being fucked by a living legend.
>Normal
Her belly emits an aura of balance, harmony, and perfection. Every touch feels "just right," bringing relaxation and calm.
Her vagina is so perfectly average that it somehow makes every other fuck feel wrong by comparison.

>>57920424
Neither is better or worse, what matters is how the author handles it and the integration into the story.
It's canon that aura is attached to life force btw so using it should kill you if you respect canon.

>>57920460
>This schizo again
Yeah bro remember how literally every Lucario who used their Aura during a fight died afterwards? Oh wait.

>>57920467
Remember how Lucario are as weak and fragile as humans?
Me neither.

>>57920469
>Meanwhile CHADtoshi's Aura
Cope.

>>57918794 (OP)
I already have the final passage written. I'm hundreds of thousands of words away from it though.

In my fic, aura is just how some people call psychic powers

>>57920424
The Force
>B-but
The Force
Also, type-energy bullets are cooler

>>57920483
>not ash's aura
concession accepted

In my fix, aura is how the RX-78-2 Gundam communicates with denizens of this reality, seeking assistance to manifest here so it kick the absolute fuck out of Giovanni Aznable.

You faggots know that there are a lot of stories with aura, mana, qi, psychic or whatever you have, right? Go rip that off instead of DB

>>57920460
It kills you if you use it all and trying to heal a giant ass crystal living tree and Mew goes beyond that.

>>57920516
no, i don't think i will

>>57920516
>aurafags
>being creative
Pick one. They'll never go for anything more complex than "punch harder".

>>57920418
Anon asked a question about if the race of a character would effect something and I answered honestly. I'm not gonna preach about it, but I'm not gonna lie to anon about it either.

>>57920529
Post an example of what you're saying. I think everything being said about Aura is just a meme being mixed up with cultivation novels.
Link a story that has "aura punch harder" or something similar please.

>>57919936
>>57919944
Duh, just make them to take tests and get licenses for that!

Seriously though yes, why not? Especially if you have some kind of poketranslators or smth. Just make them several tiers where they gain more rigths and more duties, like wild mons, then trainer-owned mons(like small children), affiliated with trainer mons(like 14-18 children with some additional rigths with trainer still responsible for them) and independant citizen mons. That way all lazy mons would just chill while ambitious ones would rise to the top. At least that's what I would've prefered.

>>57920549
Hero in Hisui and its sequel
Jordinio
Dreaming of Family

Find a story where the MC dabbles in aura and you'll likely find a basic DB power level system that boils down to punching harder.

>>57920558
>Find a story where the MC dabbles in aura and you'll likely find a basic DB power level system that boils down to punching harder.
fair is fair, guess its time to come up with a aura system.

>>57920558
That's just common sense EV training
Have you ever met a human with higher base special attack than physical attack?

>>57920529
To be fair, and not saying that's a good thing, almost every story with powers ends up doing that, especially in shounen that is what fanfic authors read to get inspired.

>>57920449
>>57920452
>>57920459
Stay based gooner.

Reminder any """""""people""""""" you meet in the Pokemon world are soulless beasts that have no human rights or are deserving of empathy. An entirely different species altogether. There are no ethical consequences to torturing them or killing them, as a matter of fact, and if you decide to stay in their savage world because you "bonded" with them you are a pathetic cvck that should be slaughtered like a dog on the street, just like them.
It is your moral obligation as an isekaijin to ravage their fields and turn their harvest black, run their streets awash with blood, and eventually open a portal to OUR world so we can tear down their primitive culture and enslave them along with all of their Pokemon. We will rig their legendaries to generators that will power our cities for eons, and grind the magical properties of their lesser beasts into powders and chemicals, quantify their most esteric phenomena into numbers and decimals—and all will once more be right with the universe. Such is the Human Burden.

>>57920605
>Implying
Your pathetic body would break down trying to walk a single step with their 10x gravity
A caterpie would turn you into a bloody stain just by grazing you

>>57920605
This is true. If they are not of my race, their heart is different. The Pokemon world "humans" are nothing but barbarians to be conquered and gradually erased for the glory of our Eagle Nation.

>>57920589
Why didn't this green sissy faggot retard do this in the Shigaraki fight, was he stupid?

>>57920575
me

>>57920605
You have it wrong. You need to make more of your own human species by fucking all the locals including and especially the pokemon. Give chansey a chance

>>57920034
Wanna share with the rest of the class?

>>57920449
Lol I've seen this list before. Remeber reading it because I got a pregnancy fetish, and I love 'pregnant with monsters giving you powers' stuff, but I'm not that into girl doms. Stay based, anon.

>>57920645
Sure thing, here's the ao3 link. Would love to hear your thoughts
https://archiveofourown.org/works/63781048

>>57920818
Thanks for the (You). An anon once mentioned he would have preferred it if I gave the girls more diverse energy and keep dom to just dark and dragon ect. Was that you?

>>57920834
Very nice 10/10

>>57920956
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!

>>57920834
It's nice to read something with an active female character who might be saucy and proactivein a relationship but not overbearing/hyper femdom.
Honestly feels that most of the time people can't seem to imagine female characters taking the lead/being proactive without turning them into emasculating pegging machines.

>>57921012
Ikr? I had the same issue in a lot of romance I read, where the girl who was extroverted felt too dominant and made the man look weak. But this was the first time I did something like a shy boy who hid it under a layer of toughness encounters a sassy girl. Had a lot of fun writing the dialogue tho, and it was all improvised too. Glad you liked it

>>57920294
Would your pokemon consider Cynthia a special lifetime meal or what

Who else would they eat?

>>57920424
I'm just making it stupid situational unless the character's invested into it. A basic fire-aligned aura would leave someone resistant to fire, for an obvious example. But I'm also treating aura the same as type energy/psychic powers/etc.

Overall, all aura is rare outside of some special circumstances, like a dedicated attempt to keep it in your family's bloodline, or external supernatural bullshit. You can be born with a type other than 'Normal', but you can also acquire it through behavior and keeping a 'mon or several of that type. So a trainer who was one of the lucky few that was just Normal type who started with a Roggenrolla, then picked up a Rolycoly would wind up tuning himself to rock type, and get those benefits.

I haven't written my fic for two months, I think I should go back to it.

>>57920843
I don't think so, but it's your concept. You should stick to what you like, let em write his own list.

>>57921643
You got this.

>>57921051
This is actually something I've been thoughtful of in some of my stories. A big theme I seem to be fond of that I wasn't aware of until I started writing more is 'sidekick archetypes forced into the role of MC' as I've now written it 3 times without intending to. This has led to some of the female love interests and co MCs to be rather 'strong independent woman' type of characters. I personally see nothing wrong with this, but I know some people may interpret this as the male MC's being weaker. But I'll just have to trust my writing to be able to stand on its own that way.

>>57921051
>>57921985
It's a fun dynamic that can be tough to do write. I've been trying to write my female MC as being openly interested in the male MC without it feeling domineering. Having him both not be oblivious to it entirely but also not feel like a wimpy idiot for not responding to it yet has been the biggest challenge of it

Is Struggle a move that's powered by Aura?

>>57922045
Yeah, right now the one fic that has romance be more of an active part of the story also has a dense MC. But his density about the girl's affection is more backstory as their relationship starts at the end of the first chapter. Its more other characters pointing out all the clues that made it obvious to everybody else in hindsight. So he's not a push over, but he has a hard time actually knowing what she wants unless she tells him directly.

Kind of humiliating leaving adult Pokemon in a place called Daycare if you think about it

>>57922512
calling it the love hotel won't have been such a good move either.

Fuck it, not even a single good villain in stories.

Should they make OCs based on other franchise? Like fucking hell, why is Giovanni always a dindu noffing

>>57922537
Which stories make Giovanni a dindu? He’s always explicitly a bad guy in the ones I read

>>57922537
Nah, ain't hearing that, I got two autists on my ass in these very threads telling me I was writing an unbelievable and power fantasy story because I had an OC villain snatch a Pokeball from a game protagonist and escape them afterwards - not even beat them in a fight, just successfully manage to thieve them.

>>57922588
new normal

>>57922588
Manga stories that get past the RBGY era, Ashes of the past, that Silver SI but it's still too early to say

>>57922592
I remember you bro, your villain wasn't a cool ninja or some high officer but just a lucky grunt iirc.

There are various ways to steal a Pokéball but like you said, people here seethe if a character does anything without a Pokémon because humans must be drooling retards that can't even walk without a mon.

>>57922588
Pokémon Origins

>>57922616
>that Silver SI
in that one Giovanni orders to kill Proton for failing a mission

>>57922616
>your villain wasn't a cool ninja or some high officer but just a lucky grunt iirc.
He literally was a high officer, they just got hung up on a misunderstanding that I called him the lowest-ranked and thought that meant the weakest. Also,

>That figure was a young man, maybe in his mid-20s, and about average height. His slim figure was cut by bright red trousers, accentuated oddly by a black bolero jacket trimmed by floral white patterns. His hair was stark white, pulled back and swooping behind his head, and his eyes were hidden behind a pair of slick shades that must have been killer to wear this late at night.

I practically hit the reader over the head that the guy is not some ordinary grunt.

>>57922624
Was that before or after the Fuji pasta?

>>57922653
after it

>>57922690
Oh then I dropped it

>>57922588
The stories that make Giovanni a dindu, from what I've seen, always do it with the excuse of "Johto is sucking up all of Kanto's resources and has all the political power and ruining Kanto's economy and so Giovanni created Team Rocket as freedom fighters™ to restore Kanto to its former glory and push out the Johto oppressors".
>>57922609
Does reforming/redeeming/preventing a villainous character from becoming a villain count? I don't think it should. Kinda different category.

>>57922627
What's the story name?

Also did the MC get one of their pokemon stolen? I can see people geting salty about poketheft from any source, especially so if they're retarded enough to miss cues and think some grunt did it

>>57922537
Depends on what you mean by good. Normal has giovanni convinced its better to help the league instead of making a criminal organization to help his region. Most others don't really have villains turning good.

Now if you meant good as in competent then that's a different story. Competent villians, but not so competent that there's really no way the heros could win without actual BS another grand failing of MHA, though honestly most media as well are a rare find.
Smart villains are often overwritten, Turing into an evil sherlock holmes. Strong villains end up being bleach esk, where their strength is so far beyond that MC wins feel contrived.
I've found most people don't want to deal with reoccurring villains because they're hard to write well. There's also the ever present fear that some autist will make it his personal mission to post on every chapter that the villain/bad guy is way to OP. Even if they're not.

Another side effect of competent villains or incompetent heroes is that the story starts to drag, I will touch the skies is sort of like this. Either retardation of MC or semi-competent enemies constantly means that the protags suffer constantly.
Can't just have a stream of mooks and cardboard cut-outs of mob tier threats, thats just not compelling.
By the same token having a constant stream of hyper-competent villains, or incredibly strong enemies means that the MC and friends never recovers and you go into the shounen constant fight/suffering route.

>>57920834
I would have liked this better if it hadn't been Cookie's first day at the daycare. As it is, they go from just meeting to sloppy makeouts and love confessions over the course of an afternoon. If Cookie had been, maybe, the one regular at the daycare who was still flirting with/pushing Whisker's buttons, I think it would have made him lashing out so strongly and feeling so guilty afterwards feel a bit more natural. Otherwise this was pretty good.

>>57923205
>Strong villains end up being bleach esk, where their strength is so far beyond that MC wins feel contrived.
This 100%. It's such a fine line writing a fight that attempts to put fear into the reader and thinking "there's no way the hero can win this" but also having it be believable. The fights that come to my mind that pull it off well enough are Naruto vs. Pain and Invincible vs. Conquest. Maybe I'm just a big fan of the fight that story-wise ups the protag's standing in the world. A good chunk of inspiration for my story comes from a fight that does this I'm hoping I pull off well, but I'm still 30-40 chapters away from writing it *sigh*

>>57923259
Reading this really gave me "I will surpass you!" vibes of Luffy vs Crocodile.

>>57923205
>Strong villains end up being bleach esk, where their strength is so far beyond that MC wins feel contrived.
Kek, reminds me of pic related minus the villain part.

But that aside every story needs tension, be it something pathetic like ntr bait in romcom or an invincible (at least at the moment) enemy to let the reader know the character/story is moving forward.

>>57923461
>image
People shit on JJK's ending but it was fucking based that Sukuna doesn't get dignity on the way out, he just gets all his faux-nobility thrown back in his face and it absolutely destroys him.

What unusual method would you use to train your Pokemon?

>>57923577
Hunting.

>>57923577
buying a tera orb recharger and using terastallization over and over while training to force the pokemon to overperform and get stronger like how wild tera pokemon are strong.

getting the recharger is the hardest part and I think it makes for a reasonable enough idea that even an unskilled person could pull it off if they could keep charging the stuff with an electric pokemon.

>>57923577
nutrition and have them train amongst themselves

>>57923597
This but with people

>>57923577
Gravity training, sounds cool and even the trainer can do it

>>57923577
Force feeding them EXP Candies.

>>57923577
Killing 600,000 Pawmot to reach the pinnacle of Attack stats.

>>57923577
Make them wax my car

>>57923577
I'd bring them to Dark Souls so they can become hardcore for real, b*tch!

>>57923577
Dragon Ball training methods.
>B-But...
Dragon Ball training methods. Simple as.

>Chapter is 26 pages in Google Docs
>Only good break in it was at page 8, too short for one chapter imo
Why am I like this?
New (needlessly long) Prince of Po Town Chapter tomorrow

>>57923577
sex

>>57920449
>>57920452
>>57920459
>>57920818
Help an anon out. Make some with grown women.

>>57923857
What do you mean?

>>57923577
Throw them into the Lake of Drowned Girl or whatever its called and teach them kung fu. The mental discipline they learn as a human will take them to a power beyond the average pokemon.

And I could fuck and impregnate them. That makes people stronger too.

>>57923857
What, like write a story about pokemon trainers gaining powers from being pregnant? Do I really have the courage to make something so amazing?

>>57923577
Step 1: Hatch a couple psychics from eggs, raise them to be unquestionably loyal. Have them brainwash each other at regular intervals to ensure loyalty and to forget they did it.
Step 2: Thoroughly brainwash each and every new member that joins the team, until they see me as a figure of divine worship. Friendship and bond levels go through the roof. They fight with everything they have in my honor.
>n--no you can't cheat the system like that—
Step 3: Brainwash myself to forget I ever did it.

>>57922236
yes, but it consumes your aura on use which is why it's a last ditch effort. your aura is incapable of fueling other attacks so you fuel it using your life force

>>57923577
Convincing wild pokemon to attack settlements only for me and my pokemon to fight them off. Pay the wild pokemon part of the profit that we get from grateful villagers. Rinse and Repeat
Alternatively have an intensive eugenics program that focuses on creating the greatest Delibird of all time and use it and its spawn to rule intercontinental trade.

>>57924237
As soon as I posted this I realized I'm just running money making schemes instead of power training. Guess the next thing would be to use Gholdengo and call myself Goldberg
>get reincarnated
>do everything mentioned
>mass profit
>make gio and rockets look like broke ass niggas
Even in Another World I still Run the Banks

>>57923152
>What's the story name?
In Mine Own
https://archiveofourown.org/works/59572648/chapters/151934926

>>57923152
>Also did the MC get one of their pokemon stolen?
It was Juliana, who hasn't made an appearance yet, just the Pokemon stolen from her and the villain who did so. The MC is an OC who has a connection to her, and so gets a personal bit of tension with the villain when he recognizes what's happened.

>>57924325
Are you the guy that made a lot of gay couples?

>>57924331
kek, yeah probably the one you're thinking of.

I'm actually scared of the redeemed Lyssandre spoiler being real

>>57924553
What? That be a turn and a half

>>57923681
Something like ten thousand words then? Just don't make things too long wih tedious elements, I quite fucked my stories making way to big a chapters that said damn nothing.

>>57920605
There is nothing we could do against the Pokemon world that wouldn't have us vaporized in retaliation moments later. Their tech is better than ours.

>>57924331
What did he mean by this?

>>57925195
The author has some yuri ships, unrelated to the story.

>>57920294
How would your pokemon react to being given Cynthia to eat haha

>>57925214
They wouldn't. They know good genes when they see them and would impregnate her.

>>57925220
DO YOUR POKEMON HAVE DOWN OR MARFAN SYNDROME LIKE YOU OR WHAT

DELUSIONAL ANSWER COON

>Anon...you don't belong to this world, do you?
How do you respond without sounding mad?

>>57925260
>Are you calling me an angel? Sorry dude I'm not gay

>>57925260
>Maybe. But I'm here - so I'm going to take part.

>>57925260
You know what? N is my nigga. I'll join him in his takeover of Unova. I don't need to have a team because I have faller Aura, and as long as I don't hurt any pokemon he'd probably let me rape and murder humans because he doesn't give a singular shit about people. I'll let him know of Ghetsis's BETRAYAL and we'll feed him to his Hydreigon along with Colress.

>>57925260
'Oh shit, are you from Earth too?'

1. I'm a dumbass.
2. If he isn't I can just bullshit him. N doesn't know shit about anything.
3. What's he gonna do about it?

>>57925260
"Whatever brought me here disagrees."

>>57925260
N sounds like it would be amazing to troll with metaisekai knowledge since he lacks common sense even from the Pokemon World itself.
He actually would be someone fun to bounce ideas around since he wouldn't be constrained by the common sense of the world.

>>57924677
I just realized I gotta change a big element of a fight that happens later (which will make it longer) so I really do have to split it up. I didn’t want to end the chapter right before things got good (I don’t like being a tease when I’m not intending to be) but considering that part will probably be ready later today, I can do that too.

I'm waffling on whether to cut an eating scene from my next chapter. Without it, the halfway point of the chapter is already near 4k words, and it doesn't introduce any crucial plot elements, and was more to showcase the location they're in, so I could roll snippets of it into past tense musings of a character in what was the following scene. But I'm sort of tempted to keep it because it gives me a chance to do a little more with a character only introduced the prior chapter and hasn't done much yet. Is a little character work worth an otherwise superfluous scene in an already hefty chapter?

>>57925645
I'm curious, what kind of food? Berries? Cakes? Pokémon meat or just "food"? But to he honest I never liked that stuff, I remember reading something where almost every chapter had the MC eating and never shutting up about muh money because he was rich

>>57925645
Keep it. There is no superflous scene that is interesting to read through. Sometimes you need downtime between bigger events to make them hit right anyways.

>>57925657
They get served a feast at a ritzy hotel that's vaguely based off cuisine from Brittany, by a wait staff entirely comprised of Mr. Mimes.

>>57925663
Keep it, sounds awesome and classy

>>57919690
> Ash able to see though Ranger Riolu's memory.
> But he never saw Sir Aaron, Maylane, Riley, Cameron and Korrina's Lucario's memory.
> Kellyn outright confirmed "Aura is similar to a feeling and Ash's Aura is perfectly matched with that of Riolu's"

Blood type Aura is canon

>>57925857
>he never saw Sir Aaron, Maylane, Riley, Cameron and Korrina's Lucario's memory
Or maybe he just didn't have a reason, one was dead and the others were pathetic? He did read Mairin's Chespie's memories and that's how he found it

>>57925470
Two idiots wandering the Pokemon world constantly commiting faux pas without either of them realizing it.

>>57925877
>He did read Mairin's Chespie's memories and that's how he found it
When?

>>57926066
Literally before the megalith fight
https://youtu.be/NkoR6pRoVf0?si=lPbloxAUy-AjHHU7
2:26
There was more focus on the frog but he did it in his own too

>>57926066
>>57926101
It was a different scene or I mixed stuff but you get what I mean, won't say more tho since I don't like XY nor do I want to fight with that retard btw

>>57925187
Not really. We have better military tech and most of it's already made. What good is a fossil revival machine or a warp pad or a single-use energy nuke launcher when all your cities are reduced to irradiated wastelands?

>>57926059
Sounds awesome.

>Researching info about Pokemon I'm thinking of using in a story
>Girafarig has the shape of a horse and its Pokedex height is 4'11 which matches a typical horse being 4'10 - 5'8
>The average horse weighs 900-1200 lbs
>Girafarig average weight is 91 lbs
>Farigiraf average weight is 352 lbs

Ah so Pokemon is one of those Japanese series where the creator(s) have literally 0 understanding of how much things weigh.
Why is this so common in Japanese media?

>>57926214
Kek, realismfags are so damn funny and never fail to make me chuckle

>>57926284
It's not just a Japanese thing, lots of writers/artists/creators make mistakes with the scale of a lot of things. Weight, distance, time, those sort of things. Its a common thing because most people (including the person actually writing it) don't bother to research something they don't feel is important.

>>57926284
Once their ancient horsefuckers(the Takeda) fell all that were left were rice-pickers.

>>57926284
It can get pretty funny.

>>57923577
>unusual method
In the context of fanfiction? Constantly seeking out other trainers to battle.
Training is no substitute for real battle. The only training you should be doing with a mon is to help them get a basic understanding of a new move and then have them practice it constantly in real battles.

>be me
>Viridian Gym janitor
>have to wipe vomit every day due to the fucking spin tiles
>also my boss is now a terrorist and his whereabouts are unknown
fuck me

>>57926284
They're just numbers. Like age, which is why they're all pedos

>>57926284
https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WritersCannotDoMath

>>57926434
Remember how Giovanni's identity as the leader of TR was the public one while him being the Gym Leader of Viridian was supposed to be the secret one? Good times.
Gotta love Gen 1 JPRG-logic worldbuilding. I actually miss it. Gave it real whimsy.

What is the purpose of spinny/warp tiles as a means of base defense? It's fucking retarded.

>>57926723
It's a flex by evil scientists, it belongs to other time honored traditions such as: volcano base, self destruct button, monologuing, making robot versions of your enemies, trying to create the perfect lifeform.
There's not often a lot of focus on it in fanfics, or even in the games, but there's a shitton of evil/mad scientists in pokemon. It's known they're around but they're never the focus, they just make macguffins and such and fuck off

>>57926723
Giovanni think they're fun

>>57926434
>pay to move to viridian
>job sucks but pay is unusually good
>lose job and salary a week later due to terrorist bullshit

>>57926723
*teleports behind you*

>>57926723
Because shotgun or explosive traps would be escalation

>>57926753
They're not even hidden or anything, and they're as big as the protagonist is wide. Pretty hard to miss. And you can just fly over them. And why do they never warp to a room full of spikes or lava, instead of THE FUCKING ROOM WITH THE MASTERBALL IN IT?

This guy >>57920449 >>57920452 >>57920459 here. /d/'s ai gen just delivered on a request for it so take a look I you want: https://files.catbox.moe/plf888.zip

Double chapter update for Prince of Po Town. Instead of one 11K word monstrosity of a chapter I split in two. I figured the first half would leave people with blue balls so second half gets posted today too. Features the first Ultra Storm we get to see the start of, plus a desperate fight with an Alpha Crawdaunt I'm pretty proud of.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/66210784/chapters/172195462#workskin

Instead of Aura, Arceus gives (You) the ability of a mad scientist with a specific focus. You gain superhuman scientific knowledge, understanding, and skill at applying it, but only relating to your specialty. This could be pokeball technology, hot air balloons, mechas, etc. Your work seems impossible to science and cannot be replicated or mass produced.
So exactly like a Tinker from Worm.

What's your specialty and what do you do with it? Do you work for yourself or seek protection from a large organization?

>>57926930
I specialize in making Porygon programs.
My magnum opus would be a Porygon V, a true AI Pokemon with the ability to compatible with any tech, self learn, and improve.
I will unleash this (V)irus into the world to cleanse it of the Rotom menace.

>>57926930
I specialize in 'tuning' artificial Pokemon. Any of the numerous steel, rock, or ground types that are one way or another man made can be modified.

My masterpeice is MazinGolurk-Z, along with a Revaroom based golf cart

>>57926918
Yo, not the biggest AI fan but these are pretty sweet. Though we should probably not get too off topic from fanfics and writing.

>>57927032
Fair, I just wanted to share em

>>57926930
I perfect cloning technology for the sole purpose of putting one of every legendary in each region. I become the canon reason you're able to find random legendaries from other gens in each game.

>>57926930
>instead of Aura
Fuck Aura, don't need it. I'm specializing in power suits like the Expansion one from X and Y, and striking it rich as a legendary mercenary. I'll basically be pokemon iron man. Anyone from the evil teams to the League itself will be desperate to pay millions for my services. I will build a fleet of them and put them on my personal harem of (mind controlled) women, and start the world's biggest and most powerful mercenary company.

What even is aura supposed to do against technology anyways? Punch harder? I turn you to stone with my beam

>>57927111
Why even bother with a beam? A common pidgey can shred an aurafag to pieces just by flying by.

>>57927179
>pidgey can shred an aurafag to pieces just by flying by.
more like every human according to realismfags

>>57926925
Ian you silly shit, you can't just go around revealing your blessed deer just because a pretty girl asked about it

>>57927111
*My passive aura shield blocks the stone beam*
*I use my psychic type aura -obtained through my sexual relationship with my Kirlia- to seize control of your mind*
*I submit you to 10 million hours of sissy hypno through psychic time dilation and pimp you out to the local Team*

Pfft you're 100 years too early to face me...

>>57926059
"N, you fucking idiot", I gurgle out. Making my best impression of a worm turning itself inside out, I clutch my stomach.

"Apologies comrade, but my friend here said they were fine to eat." N replied, looking completely unbothered. His Zorua, on the other hand, looks like it’s having the time of its life.

"It didn't occur to you that what can be edible for a Pokemon, isn't for a human?"

"Well, I ate them and I was fine."

"Fucking Christ, I don't know. Maybe you developed an immunity from eating them all the time." I replied, at this point I was just arguing to distract myself from the pain.
"Errrgggg... there's some nasty dark juju in those shrooms."

N picked up the leftover mushroom stalks. "Hm, I wasn't aware this variant can manifest a Dark-type aura. You must have latent psychic powers for them to affect you this much."

"Cut the sarcasm, N, and dig a hole. I fear what may come out from either end."

>>57927371
You write like I want to. Haha, good stuff.

>>57927371
*Fucking Arceus

>>57927036
I'm glad you did, pregnancy and TF stuff are my jam. If I already didn't have 2 stories I'm working on simultaneously I'd write a preggo themed story.

>>57927424
>>Anon...you don't belong to this world, do you?

>>57927424
The c in Arceus stands for Christ.

>>57927424
The r in Arceus stands for Rama.

>>57927424
>What the fuck is an Arceus?
Arceus is a myth that very few people know about iirc

>>57926930
Serious answer, Gunballs. I would develop pokeballs that have a gun handle on them and allow a pokemon to use moves while still in the ball. This would allow me to just shoot with my pokemon's moves as needed. Special heavy class versions that hold all six mons at once available.

Fetish answer, genetic alteration with a specialization of breeding and DNA altering. No breeding restrictions, no egg move limits, no empty wombs.

>>57927424
The s in Arceus stands for Siddhartha.

>>57927424
ARSEus is a big fat phony and not a real god okay

>>57927477
>A llama? He's supposed to be dead!

>>57927450
>>57927453
>>57927470
Am I to understand that Arceus is the Captain Marvel of Pokemon?

>>57927482
Pretty bad example there considering Aleph's ultimate fate.

>>57927364
Sabrina is so damn hot, her BW2 PokéSpe version is ugly tho.

Anyways, what should be the ceiling for aurafags? Pokémon are better at AoE stuff and more destructive and after a certain level what's the point of having Pokémon, for those that write auraslop, because we all know someone does here, how strong did you make them?

>>57927424
The A in Arceus stands for Allfather

>>57927588
>ceiling
Depends, does knowing what the ceiling is really matter?
Far below legendary power levels but someone like Sabrina or Caitlin being as powerful as an Alakazam or even stronger I think is fine as long as it's restricted to exceptions like them.

I don't see anything wrong with trained humans being able to successfully fight pokemon, we have plenty of canon examples of it already in games/anime/manga. Just tie it together with the bond a human makes with a pokemon to explain why humans as a species lived in constant mortal danger of being ate or killed by pokemon.
You teach me and I'll teach you etc etc.

>>57927424

>>57927588
>Pokémon are better at AoE stuff and more destructive
nuh-uh
why do you think humanity is the dominant species in the pokemon world
>what's the point of having Pokémon
for companionship and use as living batteries to cycle friendship through in order to stand against the heavens

>>57927858
>why do you think humanity is the dominant species in the pokemon world
Because they more stamina than pokemon at or above their size class!

>>57926930
Future Paradox Pokemon

>>57918794 (OP)
damn these threads are moving fast.
I just caught up with "searching far and wide" gotta say it's pretty nice. not sure how I feel about his power being "i'm nice to pokemon, like pro level niceness" but the whole pokemon give and have titles is kinda neat. finally realized what the other anon was saying about hating abra's fist fighting. at least with the ralts one the guy used to be a swordsman/swordbu but this is just "I chose to play punchies". the relationship element is ok, like direction so far, was kinda worried about them just staying causal sex/open relationship but it seems more stable now which is nice

>>57926930
writing fanfiction wise I think the mad science with robots would be neat. just go full eggman and robo combat, make robot copies of people's teams and have them throw hands, improving with each attempt.
Otherwise a scientist focused on evolution starting with stones and ending with alt-megas would be neat. I wouldn't want to write that because of the reeing that comes from fakemon but it'd be a neat idea fakemon make me sad, especially when people have art for them. they're either copies or shit i'd actually want in a game but never will get

>>57927858
>why do you think humanity is the dominant species in the pokemon world
They’re not. They’re actually puppeted by a troupe of shadowy Alakazam.

>>57927364
psychic powers can't win against natural stupidity

>Gastro Acid: The user hurls up its stomach acids on the target. The fluid eliminates the effect of the target's Ability.
what's the logic behind that?

>>57928099
Stomach acid breaks things down.
Stomach acid + the right magic can break down the natural magical ability emanating from a target.
Neutralizing gas and some other ability suppressors/changers work similarly.

>>57927477
Regigigas should rape the Lake Trio in front of Arceus, or Arceus in front of the rape trio I guess.

>>57928099
Can Pokemon transfer the effects to their semen instead?

>>57928099
Why isn't this acid synthesized and kept in a convenient spray bottle to deal with wilds or by law enforcement or evil teams? If Pokemon, particularly poison types, are exposed to small doses of this acid throughout a period of time would they become immune? Would a Slaking drinking a barrel of it before a battle to neutralize its ability be considered holding an item? How long would it stay active if a Pokemon consumes it in the first place?

>>57928346
Only if their semen is acidic enough to melt things which coincidentally is a fetish I have.

>>57928534
I think Peter killed MJ in some old comic that way

Reminder that you need something to buy time and run away when dealing with evil teams to not end up like this.

Carry a gun or a fucking slingshot

>>57928746
Uhhh bro did you just ESCALATE? The unwritten trainer code states that I can now hunt down your family and torture and rape them and the League will look the other way bro how could you ESCALATE like that it's only fair I hook you up to a pokecenter healing machine while slowly roasting you with Houndoom flames since you ESCALATED and all

>>57928761
>They can rob you or whatever but the moment you retaliate you're the criminal
Would be a fun concept ngnl

>>57928554
No it was radioactive. His jizz gave her cancer. A common issue for poison type aura.

>>57928991
Still hilarous as fuck, the lengths they go to make him miserable stopped being sad and now are just funny

>>57929010
Isn't the latest suffering just them resurrecting Spider-Man and killing him over and over again?

>>57929030
Isn't it MJ cucking him with Paul?

>>57928984
Robbing people with pokemon? Legal and society would crumble without it.

But if you don't have the proper license for picking up a stick off the ground you WILL regret it.

>>57927322
It'll be a net positive.

>>57928991
Fire aura cum, burn your partner to death. Ice aura cum, freeze them from the inside out.

Even if you are the same type, if your aura is too strong you will never have love.

>>57929200
Which is why the strongest are either alone or groom someone to be as strong or resistant to their aura.

>>57927179
Why would a random Pidgey be able to do that?

>>57929325
Because humans are weak as fuck even though canon, games included, prove otherwise and if you don't agree them a certain autist will appear out of nowhere that humans in Pokémon are made of glass

>>57928390
Same reason you can't just bottle a Confuse Ray to spray it later. The magic is in the move, and humans don't know how to store the power of moves.

>>57929355
I’m assuming based on the boogeyman reference that this has to do with pokemon lore autism.

>>57929325
Because a worm cannnot understand a wastness of mountain Tai and the miserable godless creature called man cannot comprehend even the slightest bit of power of Heavens creation!

>>57929325
Pokemon have exponentially stronger aura than humans so the aurafag would be extra weak.

>>57929478
Aura is inherently fighting-type and Pidgey are flying-type so they do extra damage

>>57929520
Honestly, if anything being an aurafag as a human just makes you weaker. All the vulnerabilities of a pokemon with a type but with none of the power of a pokemon to back it up? You'll be afraid of flocks of pidgey flying overhead for the rest and the only thing you'll have to show for it is having the privilege of being able to kill yourself to prolong a tree's life or something.

>>57920294
Would your pokemon accept Cynthia as nutrition,m

>twitchplayspokemon reference
Based or cringe?

>>57929593
References are always cringe.

>>57929607
nuh uh

Aura is cool and all but nobody tries to do an interesting power system with it beyond lite-dragon ball ki

[happy news] Pinnacle Platinum updated.

>>57929686
>but nobody tries to do an interesting power system with it
Read Twisted Garden.
Honestly, just read more fics in general. Aura has been milked and stretched in all sort of ways. I honestly find it hard to believe you've only encountered fics where Aura is just, to use your own words, lite-dragon ball ki, because of how many fics come up with all sorts of random shit and justify with dude Aura lmao.

>>57929710
Twisted Garden is a cultivation fic. I dare you to name 3 aura fics that aren't inspired by the superior peoples of the Republic of China.

>>57929710
Cultivation isn't really better to be fair, I hate Fate like you wouldn't believe and Shirou's WEAKEST BUT ACTUALLY STRONGEST powers aside the magic system there is more interesting than cultivation, so is Naruto's when they move away from muh eyes and tailed beats

>>57929752
*beasts

Aura can just be used to talk to pokemon because some writers don't want to use psychic powers instead, it's glorified ninshu. The other Borne being the chief example.

>>57929786
>ninshu
The fuck is that bro, sounds like something out of Naruto and iirc their entire power came from a tree. The Force sounds more attractive

>>57929795
'Cause it is. It was a way of communication through chakra so everyone can be truthful to each other and themselves. But then it got corrupted into ninjutsu because you could also use chakra to set people on fire.

Nah Aura should be Nen

>>57929862
Oh my rubber aura

>>57929862
>Humans are so interesting
Nah, fuck that.

>"You're…" she trailed off, eyes wide in horror. She took a single step back as it slowly dawned on her, who this boy was.

>That red hair, his pale face, those silver eyes…

>"I'm not going to hurt you… so I'd appreciate if you don't scream. If you do scream, I'll have to stop being as nice," Silver said softly.

>He stared at her, some curiosity entering his gaze.

>"Let's have a talk. I want to know what a nice woman like you was thinking, when she decided to spread her legs for someone like Giovanni."

silver edge kino dropped

>>57929931
>those silver eyes
Are silver eyes really that weird in Pokémon? Anyways, is that Delia?

>>57929943
Yeah what is this, RWBY?

>>57929943
>Anyways, is that Delia?
yes

>>57929931
I know this is basically a Mary Sue power trip but I doubt he would get away if he tried something, either by Oak or a pissed off Ash, bu then again everyone in this story is made to look pathetic to suck his dick.

So how did this end?

>>57930113
>So how did this end?
Silver became an emotional support tampon and comforted her only the way a smart and cultured person such as himself could. I am not making this up.

Advancing the Delia/Jessie ship agenda by exposing anons to the alternative.

>>57930126
So by being an asshole? You know, sometimes I really think the author is a woman

>>57930133
Delia/Mime is peak and I won't suffer you carpet munchers saying otherwise.

>>57930142
Mr. Mime pegs Tracey out behind the barn at Professor Oak's lab and you can't convince me otherwise. He and Delia are platonic co-habitants.

>>57929593
References are only cringe when they're hamfisted and obvious. If someone could reasonably miss it or has to wonder if it even is a reference then it's usually based.

>>57930136
Honestly probably the nicest conversation this walking edgelord ever had, and naturally Delia is now part of his backup harem.
The character building of Lorelei was actually decent this chapter, and I'm more than willing to say the cliff hanger at the end was pretty good.

>>57930133
I don't need convincing, the comic about Delia waking up the morning after they first had sex alone, getting depressed and self-loathing because she felt stupid for thinking she'd found someone she could trust again, only for Jessie to burst back in to lay down after eating all the bread in Delia's kitchen was the exact breed of sweet melodrama I live for.

So burgerbros, did you finally picked a body to possess in the Pokémon world?

>>57929931
why did the author write that part
why would silver even care
>>57930136
she breaks down and isn't one of the author's constructed faceless characters so SI-lver did the classic grr I'm so grumpy but here's some deep insight to show I really care routine

rec some crossover stuff to read while commuting.

>>57927032
He did all 18 just fyi https://files.catbox.moe/zet8d6.zip

>>57930376
What do you like tho? Like anime, games or manga setting which are basically non-existent

>>57930325
Either Unova Dream Scientist Lady (I always forget her name since I never played that game) or... I don't know, it's hard to think of a guy in pokemon who's aesthetics I like in a 'I wanna be them' way. Maybe Will, if only because I could take off the mask and nobody would know who I am. Plus I like psychic powers.

>>57930376
I feel obligated to shill my Final Fantasy 1 x Pokemon crossover.

Pokemon Crystal Light

https://archiveofourown.org/works/63406333

>>57929931
Not sure why I keep reading this, I guess some of the training is interesting? Maybe just sunk cost. Do you think the writer genuinely thinks SI-ver is a good character? Thinks that he's a nuanced and conflicted character? His "conflict" lasted all of half a chapter and he's been solidly in the mega-asshole since then. His "actually is a caring person" shtick is bog standard and maybe even more grating because the universe bends over backwards to justify his assholeishness.

Bigger question. How self aware does everyone think SI authors actually are? Do they think these characters are deep and compelling? Is it just they enjoy the fantasy of chimping out on everyone and think their readers do to? Is it the sort of ironic self awareness that seems to infect everyone, "I know I'm an asshole and a bad person, but because I know I am that makes me better than people who don't know they're assholes?"
I'm genuinely curious. Theres quite a few Edgelords, suffering is character growth, and "panics and freezes" SIs.

>>57930557
Alright you shameless self premoter. I know nothing of FF but I'll read this and get back to you with my thoughts.

>>57930557
>>57930739
Alright just caught up with it, keep in mind I'm not familair with FF (beyond the Wiki summary I just read).
The anon from a while back talking about the structure of the flashbacks is right. The back and forth between present, future and past is sort of convoluted. It probably would read better if in the first chapter it was arranged chronologically. Other chapters can have flashes to specific scenes, like the choosing Trio day but the start? Nah, a bit too disjointed, especially for someone not familiar with FF.
I enjoy the idea of prophecy being different between pokemon and humans, and that both could potentially be right. I think characterization is pretty good, no one feels just one note. Some choices though feel like they lean hard into the anime/JRPG stuff. The main character's no kill desire, the talk no jitsu for both death of garland and pirate fight, knockoff hex maniac and a joy being lesbian? sure man, whatever gets you hard
The no kill thing is an odd choice, as far as I'm aware FF makes no compunctions about killing shit, and doubles down on that in later games so why did you go this direction? Could possibly be character growth worthy but you'd think an established knight in fantasy middle ages would be a little more use to death/killing.
Descriptions of pokemon, moves and fights are pretty good. I enjoy that you don't immediately just tell readers "oh he looks like___"
I enjoyed reading it, but I've not played FF games, never got into them when I was younger and now they're all way too into their own lore/ass to bother getting into. So I think people who like FF will really enjoy it and people who aren't familiar will struggle at first, especially in those first 2 chapters, but find the story interesting.

>>57929931
>Silver says something rude or acts like a jerk
>characters comment how rude and jerk he is
>repeat ad infinitum
it gets annoying after a while

>>57930967
The no kill thing, along with a lot of things in the story, is just something that seemed to naturally evolve from the character. Wol is the heavily defensive type, and he just naturally is the kind of person who doesn't want to hurt people or pokemon more than necessary. Plus, I am trying to keep the tone of the story from getting too far away from the Pokemon side of things. I want to give both franchises equal footing, while the setting is Final Fantasy inspired the characters are more Pokemon inspired. And it isn't a one note trait, the first major arch is pretty much an escalating trial of the difficulties of pacifism. Exploring the logic, benefits, and limits that come with wanting to save everyone, even your enemies.
Actually writing this made me remember a scene from FF8, where the child soldier mercenary MCs have to save a town of absolute pacifists from an evil empire that they couldn't reason out of burning the town down. The world needs both pacifists to work to make the world a more peaceful place and soldiers who can protect when peace fails.

As for the lesbians, I'm not even into yuri. It just felt like a natural joke to make considering they are two weird girls living alone together. It was more about showcasing that even though Wol is much more experienced with pokemon and combat than Jane she is better at reading people and social cues do to being a princess who has been trained with courtly affairs. Sort of a 'While you were at parties I studied the blade' situation.

And thank you for confirming the issues with the flashbacks. Your feedback confirms it wasn't a one off issue but a possibly major hurdle for new readers to work through. The intent was to be a reflection of Wol's own confusion about what was happening and why. Though thinking about it I realize it's a technique I actually use again in later chapters too...

1/2

>>57931628
In some later chapters dealing with mind control and illusions I use the same sort of disorienting style as the flashbacks to put the reader in the same mindset as the characters. There is much more intentionality with it then, but I am worried that it may just be a style I've given the story that can't be removed or changed without effecting the entire tone. I may have to accept that the story is goingnto be even more niche appeal than originally intended. If so then I may just accept that.

Anyways, I appreciate the reading. You're the first person to give feedback into at least the third chapter so it surely won't be long until somebody finally gives me feedback on the literary value of the mermaid gangbang in chapter 4.

>>57932076
Me and Gigantamax Roxanne.

>>57932076
What if Onyx SHRINKS (which every pokemon can instinctually do btw) while sandslash is inside him?

>>57932275
sandslash also shrinks

>>57931659
At least with the mind control and mermaid malamar/dark elf fuckboi the shift in perspectives/jumpiness sort of makes sense. It's still not great from a reader perspective but at least that one makes more sense.
The boss fight in chapter 6 paints a pretty good picture as to where the plot is going or at least how you'll handle the boss fights moving forward with the mix of people/pokemon just like digimon frontier you hack but it was handled well overall.

>>57931628
Tonal wise that makes sense, I'm not a huge fan of multi-cross stuff but I can respect what you're going for and I think you've got a good balance so far. honestly killing astos/darkrai shouldn't even count as a kill. He's a dark elf, they're scum no matter the setting
Didn't know about the FF8 scene, though that just means you'll have another reference that FF fans can catch/think about.
Fair enough on the social cues "I studied the blade" thing. Though its pretty easy to tell that Wol is socially retarded at that point in the story. He seems to have missed every social cue so far. princess relationship, pirate shenanigans, the thing with garland in the beginning, small princess relationship He's getting better but he's definitely on the spectrum.

Reminder that there's nothing wrong with using popular Pokemon for your teams and that the wannabe hipsters who always whine about them and say they wanna see more unpopular Pokemon getting used and what-not are just a very loud minority.
Popular Pokemon are popular for a reason no matter how much some people want to pretend otherwise.
Don't let their sour grapes and crab in a bucket mentality over the Lucarios, the Gardevoirs, the Charizards, the Eevees and more let you stop you. Just laugh at how envious and seething they are at their favorite shitmon is not as popular as the previously mentioned mons.

>>57932672
Just use whatever makes sense for the story.

>>57932672
Reminder that you should use pokemon that make sense and have a reason to be in your characters' parties. Also remember that those 'mon are either reclusive or rare in universe.

>what if... psychic type punched?
Interesting interesting, but what if Psychic type didn't punch? Have any writers considered that one before?

>>57932672
Reminder that your MC should have a harem for his team.
Don't be a pussy.

>>57932699
Psychic/fighting type is a thing tho

>>57923255
Thanks, I appreciate the criticism

>>57932789
>Psychic /Fighting type
Name 100(one hundred) fics that do this.
Psychic puncher is ALWAYS not a fighting type

>>57932855
Are there stories with actual psychic/fighting types in MC team? I don't think I've read a story with Medicham, and the story that has the ralts line is with a female ralts.
Then again Sword spoon and searching far and wide are the only two fanfics that I remember that have "fuck using my brain I'll punch/sword shit" as a gimmick, others just have psychics use everything.

>>57932624
Actually I'm taking so many liberties with describing locations and events that the only thing that most Final Fantasy fans are gonna recognize are the names and the basic plot outline. This is way more a pokemon story than it is a Final Fantasy one with how it's evolved, which makes sense since I was inspired by these threads to write it. Especially since every mainline FF game takes place in a completely original setting with different rules for how its universe works. Most FF fans won't recognize anything in this story. Which is fine, it's an outlet for my own pokemon and FF related autism, but the actual FF references are so deep that most FF fans aren't even going to get them.

>>57932672
Reminder that MC's team should pass her around like a blunt.
Her womb is for eggs.

>>57932699
Inspired me to make a psychic who is a dumbass who likes kung fu and fighting types. His dumbassery means there is a lot of empty room in his head for his psychic powers to brute force anything. But he would rather just kick somebody's ass with his fists.

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>>57918844
Would you end your fanfic with aldith being victorious over Cynthia or what >>57918794 (OP)

It'll end with dirty kikes like shaunberg getting kicked out of 109 universities, including a shitty commiefornie one where they dump the dunces who couldn't score high enough in the SATs and had to take a joke """test"""
Remember that shaunberg, the kike from tel-aviv, tried to pretend he had an """iphone""" at first, then a substandard (((prebuilt))) """desktop""", then a Samsung, and now some IBM (compatible) shitbox. Like all his kind, he'll never be able to get his story straight. After all, he tried lying about being from (((Stern))) despite his IQ and SAT score being far too low for anything above a shithole like CAS. The fable his fellow shartyniggers try to spread about him being an American, therefore, is an outright fabrication from some yidsraeli who can barely speak English. He even has to wait until this hour to use some shitbox without permission, after supposedly """buying""" (stealing) some useless machine to post from. One can't help but notice how it's always the kike shills and their hired shitskins who support him, or his filthy jew family that buys shitphones for him and lets him reset their routers, or his fellow jews who let him beg them for freebies.
He'll never be able to deny this because shaunberg, as a yid, has no spelling errors when typing in his native language, yiddish. Meanwhile, whenever he tries to type in English, so many typos abound. This alone is enough to out shaunstein as a filthy jew, who was kicked out of Nasser Yorat University and not New York as he tries to imply, and was rejected from the University of Tel-Aviv and not UTM. As a member of a (((tribe))) with a professional victim complex, shaunberg's only available instinct when punched by a single pajeet was to curl up and beg for mercy, then play the victim later, rather than fight back like a real man would.

>>57933072
based