>>149074412I think all comics can be displayed as films. That's not to say that it has to be "realistic", but that all comics are sequential images and all films are sequential images, they are both the same in that fundamental nature.
To say that a comic shouldn't show a sequence of events through panels is to deny its being a comic entirely.
It must tell a story through sequential images, if it doesn't do this, it ceases to be a comic and becomes some avant garde art piece.
I haven't read this comic because the art style doesn't appeal to me but having a look at it, I don't like its excessive use of "clever" panelling. It feels like I'm looking at a childrens pop up book. It's gimmicky. I'm distracted from the story at every page.
But to comment on your page, I think the main panelling sequence (the first 4 starting from the top), are inappropriately shaped due to the artistic panelling choice. The timing and intensity of the scene is muddled.
The 2nd panel is especially poor, it's not clear what is happening it's too cramped, the panel is the wrong shape. It's the wrong shape because the artist has pre-chosen the panel without consideration for the story.
But those are nitpicks, the real sin here are the miniature panels within the 4th panel.
These are completely ineligable, they don't resemble panels, there's no sense of timing. I feel like I'm in a fighter jet videogame and I'm locking onto her with my homing missiles.
I found another panel from the comic that does a similar thing, pic related.
Are these panels, or are these magic boxes that actually exist in the world? It's downright fourth wall breaking. It's impossible to be feel that this story is actually alive, it is killed by being too artistic.