Come one and all to the meta-writefag and help raise the quality of MLP fanfiction! Featuring: Your baker following through on the threat of >>41987786!

ITT: 6,000 word sex scenes, forgetting about your main character, Bowser was secretly a hot ass dragon, the niche for anthro lactation clopfics, outing yourself as being a paranoid schizophrenic, mentally 17 is above average for this thread, baiting someone into doing a rage review, being surprised by someone on 4chan being mentally suboptimal, Pinkie as a less fucked up 40k Emperor, real tears come from things like testicle pain or heartburn, the average horsecock is thick enough to tear through the width of Scootaloo's tiny foal leg, Andy Warhol only showed his films at empty warehouses with his band of maladjusted cohorts, Derpy's grandmother is Mongoloid Hooves and her mother is Retardy Hooves, and a proper ITT!

>/fimfic/ Secret Book Club
The one hundred and twelfth and one hundred and thirteenth books are The Creature and The Knight:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/567461/the-creature
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/577735/the-knight
If (You) want to join in the discussion, finish the fics by Sunday, June 22.

>Recommended stories:
Tired of authors crossing over a dozen IPs? Fed up with downer shipping? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!
New Starter Kit - http://mlpficreviews.org.uk/starter/
Old Starter Kit - http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png

>Common fic abbreviations used by the thread:
https://ponepaste.org/7317

>A list of reviews made by the Anons in this thread:
http://www.mlpficreviews.org.uk
Use the commands ">review <story link>" and ">discuss <story link>" to add reviews to a story.
Userscript for extra features: https://ponepaste.org/8619

>An in-depth writing guide for beginners:
https://eznguide.neocities.org/

>Can you pre-read my story?
Post it on Google Docs or HackMD with comments enabled and give us a link.

>Additional material for authors:
Rhorse's Horse Behavioral Notes - https://ponepaste.org/932
Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/
1911 Walter Baker's Hot Chocolate - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wAueNTXpn1E
Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://poneb.in/g4VpEg4f
Setting a story in motion - https://youtu.be/ufO8LbwTdu0
Taking criticism - https://youtu.be/-v4R2ZcxPlA

>Various reviews and riffs:
Fillyanon's Bookshelf - https://ponepaste.org/5555
Notkickass222urmom's Reviews - https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmom
IHeartShinzakura's Reviews - https://ponepaste.org/user/IHeartShinzakura
Appleanon reads fics - https://poneb.in/wmGX7FPm
Deluxe Big Master Review List - https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeU
A Guide to Rational Fics - https://files.catbox.moe/3jzrfm.png
The Royal Canterlot Library's Top 16 Fanfics - https://royalcanterlotlibrary.net/top16/

Previous Thread: >>42287628

You all knew this had to happen, right? This is how we defend our freedom. Our homeland. Our autism and homosexuality. We will die on this hill: Threads must have a proper ITT.

>>42307509 (OP)
Tradition should be observed, yes.

Why always Scootaloo
Is it rainbow factory

tradition is for faggots

>>42307518
She's already a cripple. What is it going to do, make her less crippled?

(reposting in the new thread)
Hey /fimfic/, i invite all of (you) to my /mlp/con panel "Russian fanfiction overview"!

Some of you might remember a small writeup on the Russian pony fanfiction i did a couple years ago and a post ITT this spring where i promised to rewrite it and make an extended version. Well, i decided to ditch that idea and make a whole panel instead. I'm gonna review a number of popular original Russian pony fanfics (both good and bad ones) and also throw in a couple of my personal favorites that didn't garner much attention but still are good stories. I'll make a recap of stories' plots accompanied by some crude amalgamations of google images and pony pictures from derpibooru to make it easier to understand what's going on and also share my personal opinions on all those stories and some facts about their significance in the fandom.
All of this is gonna take place on the 6th of July, you can check the exact time in your local time zone on the /mlp/con website
mlpcon.online/schedule
If you have any questions/suggestions - i'm all ears! But i'll respond later since it's already too late and i'm going to bed now.

>>42307522
Why not torture Sweetie Belle for once, her life is going good

>>42307519

>>42307523
>"Russian fanfiction overview"
>moonrunes in the picture

>>42307509 (OP)
>>/fimfic/ Secret Book Club
>If (You) want to join in the discussion, finish the fics by Sunday, June 22.

>>42307545
Pack it up, make another OP

Great, now there’s two of them.

>>42307563
Fics full of iconic lines that rhyme like poetry?

>>42307545
>/fimfic/ Secret Book Club
The one hundred and thirteenth book is Rainbow Typhoon:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/22148/rainbow-typhoon
If (You) want to join in the discussion, finish the fic by Sunday, June 29th.

>>42307545
>/fimfic/ Secret Book Club
The one hundred and fourteenth book is Rainbow Typhoon:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/22148/rainbow-typhoon
If (You) want to join in the discussion, finish the fic by Sunday, June 29th.

>>42305538
No, I'm not a coward. It's a pretty tame fetish I picked, though, and it's for the novelty of the event more than anything.

2^2^2th for best duo!
Enjoy this conveniently packaged Tuna: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/247031/the-mare-who-once-lived-on-the-moon

It really is impressive how, even if provided with just a list of their names, you could easily spot the moment the Dune novels changed author by the way the titles suddenly suck ass. Shame you apparently need the two sequel novels to close out the plot properly but I could also just stop before Heretics.

>>42305524
Even if you give Sombra the maximum mind control buff and give Equestria the maximum NMM + Discord + Chrysalis nerf, I still don't see him being able to cause a total war-scale warfic. The Crystal Empire's just too poorly setup for it.

>>42306237
>Wordpad is built into Windows
>LibreOffice is free
>Gdocs auto cloud saves and is accessible from any device
>there are cracks of every version of Office for the last twenty years while a grey market license costs ten bucks
As the other anon said, you get what you deserve.

>>42307523
Make sure to mention that one S.T.A.L.K.E.R. crossover about the Anomaly that baits the slav brony into a false HiE setup. I still remember it years later.

>>42307524
Okay Rarity.

>>42307873
Gdocs is trash that works inconsistently across different devices, locks features to only some of them, and is known to lose data every once in a while. Every other editor is ugly, intrusive, and has a bunch of shit that isn't needed when you're posting on Fimfic.

>>42307969
She would never do that to her daughter

>>42308028
She's jealous of Sweetie's superior natural beauty.

>>42308028
Given Sweetie's surprising magical aptitude, can Shining be assumed to be the father?

>>42308074
He only likes pink pegasi. Watch out G6 pinkie!

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/374991/alicorn-of-balance-the-second-life
Hidden gem. God, I love a nice, earnest shitfic. I didn't think they were still making them like this in 2018.

>>42308095
Candyass was already horny when he tapped her, actually.

Fics to drunk drive and run deer over to?

>>42308210
The one with my male alicorn OC, Asriel.

Hi guys, I got hooked on this show a few months ago, but stopped watching before season 6.
I want to write a story or make a comic, I dont know how to write/draw but I will learn or die trying.
What I want to is how I can get started. Would you guys accept a story where every character is oc, and do I just post a google doc here?
Im also kinda worried anything I can come up with has already been done.

>>42308262
>What I want to is how I can get started.
There's a writing guide in the OP. Do yourself a favour and read it. It's not perfect but it's incredible help for a new writer. Also, write and read a lot. That's how you get better at writing. Preferably read good things and well written ones.
>Would you guys accept a story where every character is oc, and do I just post a google doc here?
Yes. Not sure how much direct feedback you will receive, but that works.
>Im also kinda worried anything I can come up with has already been done.
No story is wholly original and the pursuit of originality is not a worthwhile endeavour. Just focus on writing something good.
Good luck.

>>42308262
Everything under the sun has been done, anon.
All you can do is try to create something partly unique, a fresh spin on an old narrative or concept.

>>42308257
The Seven Ice Cold Beers:

>>42308262
>What I want to is how I can get started.
Check the beginner guide in the OP.
>Would you guys accept a story where every character is oc,and do I just post a google doc here?
There are plenty of stories that stick with OCs only that have an audience. Someone will probably be willing to give feedback if you post a google doc draft here.
>Im also kinda worried anything I can come up with has already been done.
Don't worry about that. Everything has been done before.

>>42308271
>>42308280
>>42308308
Thank you all. I will use the guide to fix up the punctuation and grammar of what I've wrote so far and then post it.

>>42307977
Fine, Emacs.

>>42308262
>I dont know how to write/draw
Nobody else on Fimfiction knows how to write, either. Or read. You will quickly find that the easiest way to get your writing noticed on Fimfic is to write slop. Wish-fulfillment isekais and HiE anthro porn practically debut at the top of the feature box, even when they're badly written. Anything high-concept or OC-focused attracts fewer readers. Not zero readers, though (usually). It's important to remember that popularity is not the same as quality: Your stories might be unpopular but good, or popular but bad, or both unpopular and bad. You won't be both popular and good (it's possible, but not if you don't know how to write).
>Would you guys accept a story where every character is oc
Yes. Do keep in mind that OCs are less popular than characters from the show.
>do I just post a google doc here
Yes, go to "Share," select "Anyone with the link can view," and give them "commenter" permissions.
>Im also kinda worried anything I can come up with has already been done
That complaint is several thousand years old: "What has been will be again, what has been done will be done again; there is nothing new under the sun." But that doesn't stop people from producing new content, nor does it stop people from enjoying that content.

>>42307873
>Make sure to mention that one S.T.A.L.K.E.R. crossover about the Anomaly that baits the slav brony into a false HiE setup. I still remember it years later.
Good idea, i'll probably include it even though i'm already pushing the time limit with all the fics i have on my list. Thinking about it, it's very cool that in response to me posting this story back then someone would do a complete rewrite in English based on autotranslated subtitles(!!). Gotta respect the autism

>>42308074
>>42308095
You think Shining would be willing to play sperm donor for Twilight's future wife? He is a very caring brother.

>>42308651
>future wife
Nah, he's going straight for the sussy. Gotta keep that bloodline pure.

>>42308651
Shining will impregnate all mares and render Equestria a mare only nation with himself as god emperor.

>>42308710
Any proper god emperor needs a breeding program, and Shining is eager to fulfill his duty.

>>42308651
Why, I daresay he'd be happy to give her the sperm donation in person.

Do you guys decide on a genre before starting your fics, or do you just write and then try to match genres to the end result?

>>42308881
the latter. thinking in terms of categories and boxes will limit your creative ability.

>>42308881
the former. lacking an idea of what feelings your story will evoke will limit your creative ability.

>>42308651
Twilight can just use magic to make a pinkiesparkle baby. It just won't have any legal rights, as per Equestrian law.

>>42308948
Is that how she makes more fleshlights for Shining?

>>42308948
That sounds way less fun than Pinkie dressing up as Cadence in order to seduce Shining.

>>42308881
I do this
>>42308929
and also this
>>42308945

>>42308881
I've realised over the years that my creative process is apparently a lot different from most people's. I always hear about planning stages or snowflake methods or multiple significantly different drafts, and I've come to understand that people grow an idea as they work on it. That's not what happens to me. My own ideas gestate a lot longer in the background of my own head, but once they come to me they're basically fully formed. When I start a fic I already know the story, the ending, the length, even chapter titles already. It all comes to me over the course of a few days at most and writing is merely the process of putting together what I've already traced the edges of in my head. So I usually pick genres first. This is also why I tend to start with a tittle already in place, and sometimes I'll even lay down the chapter structure before I get writing. I'm aware it's an improper approach if you were to deliberately go about things like that, but working on a fic mentally instead of having notes isn't just something that comes easy to me, it's how my brain works if left to its own, and so far it's actually served me pretty well.

How old was Spoiled when she discovered her special talent was being a gold digger?

>>42309022
Elementary School.
A colt brought really tasty snacks and she wanted some. She pretended to be into him, the way her mom did to her dad when she wanted to get something, and it worked.

>>42309051
You think they were planning to call her Spilled Milk and changed it when she was born a filthy mudhorse?

>>42308326
Good lord this took way longer than I thought it would lol. Anyway here it is, I've probably lost my mind but I want to make this into a comic or something.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PJt37gVuO7rW-1s_o1MpyL2uHiDGEQr4AyloWY-rIUc/edit?usp=sharing

>>42309022
>funny answer
It happened when Filthy proposed to her. It was in a very crowded restaurant and it made the entire event super awkward. She was a very late bloomer. When DT got her cutie mark so early, she overpraised her, and it was the only time she did so, planting the seeds of her ego.
>sappy answer
It is actually symbolic of her supporting Filthy while he was down on his luck. Something about bonds and unity and all that. She was much better at economics than him growing up and helped him with studying them. She is the spice to his sugar, and, if nothing else, is surprisingly loyal despite being a total ice queen.

>>42309081
She's from a unicorn family, she can suck a tennis ball through a garden hose, weird nose or not.

>>42309235
I like that they went with the rhinoplasty = rhino-like nose visual joke.

>>42308402
I think you're missing how Fimfic has a fundamental advantage over other alternatives in that just like Google Docs, you can access and edit the same story from different devices, but unlike GDocs it's consistent and works the same across all those devices.

I wish I had someone blackmailing me with a sex tape, so I'd get some writing done.

>>42309373
Write about an author who writes because they are being blackmailed with a sex tape

>>42309374
Would the concept of sex tapes even exist in the 'Questria? I'm not even sure they have talkies.

>>42309382
There are projectors that run on tape (Hurricane Fluttershy)

>>42309382
Could do some magic bullshittery and have a pony blackmail another pony with their dreams of having sex with someone else instead.

>>42309386
the only talking in that movie is topcunt's nails on chalkboard voice.

>>42309382
How else is Cheerilee going to educate young foals about their maturing bodies?

>>42309391
dyewts

>>42309268
Good point... Overleaf?

>>42309409
I prefer Underspic.

>>42309393
A surprising amount of Anons would answer 'no' to that.

>>42309058
>My Little Pony Rock!
It's a bad title. Scrap it and try again.
>CRASH! The unicorn slammed through the guards!
Reads like a screenplay. Don't say "crash," describe the crash.
>Chef
Why is she giving orders to her chef? Why does she even have a chef? Do you mean "chief"?
>His horn glowed a cold blue, casting a spell that burst the door open!
Show, don't tell. Insert some more description here by describing how the door bursts. Does it explode? Fall off its hinges? Does he just unlock it and open it the normal way?
>She caught a plate of pancakes and proudly put it on her head
the fuck?
>King Mammalon
Literally he's named "mammal on"?
>foreseen an incredible event
But why does foreseeing this event require him to crash through guards and into the castle? Why can't he show up and politely ask for an audience with the king? Maybe there's a good reason why he can't, but if so, you haven't told us.
>eating the breakfast she had put on her head earlier.
the double fuck? I'm out.

I'm not impressed so far, but I do think you have potential. Your writing is unpolished but adequate. You seem to have a grand adventure in mind, but I think you need more practice before you can put your vision into words. I think this opening scene could easily be three times as long or even longer if you slowed down and told us more about the characters and the setting.

>>42309382
They have film anon.

>>42309382
They have film anon. They could just, you know, film some porn.

>>42309829
Don't the CMCs watch a movie at one point

>>42309939
With 3D VFX out of the screen, even. Season 3 still showing its effect on canon.
>songs
>canon

>>42308262
For drawing, see here >>42266021

>how I can get started
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/index.html
If you're a complete and utter newfag to written English, the Purdue OWL is a good starting point for the foundational stuff.

If you're talking fic-wise, it's always good to read--not just other fics, but published novels. This will show you how "good" writing is actually done and how editors like to format fiction. If you're a poorfag and can't afford Bookbub's 2 buck ebooks or the time for your local library, there's the Gutenberg Project for the "classics":
https://www.gutenberg.org/browse/scores/top

When you start writing a fic, I'd strongly recommend doing something small and simple involving the setting of the show. Some kind of oneshot in Ponyville. This will help give you a feel for the characters, tone of the setting, and just generally let you dip your toe in. Then you can start hitting harder stuff.

>where every character is oc
I'm fine with that, but you have to be good to really pull it off well. It can be very challenging breaking away from canon's crutch and doing your own thing.

>do I just post a google doc here
Yeah, gdoc with commenting enabled.

>has already been done
Most plots have been tackled in some fashion, but there's always new spins that pique interest. Never give up on idea just because someone else wrote something similar to it. Not everyone's read it.

>>42308881
I usually have a specific plot in mind and the main genre mostly comes baked in with the premise. The secondary genre usually comes after the fact, once the story's written and there's a clear picture of what's in it. That happened with the freighter fic I wrote, where it was always [Sad], but the [Romance] only came later.

>>42309409
May be good but it gives me PTSD after I had to use it for my thesis.

Which main character is most likely to have a long estranged sibling they don't know about?
My money is on Dash. I can see her parents driving one kid away and either overcorrecting or falling into the same trappings with the other one.

>>42310386
Definitely Pinkie. Such a big family on such a remote farm, it's only natural for someone to slip through the cracks. Literally, perhaps.

>>42310386
You could make Maud fill that role, given her introduction and how people reacted to it. Set your fic before S4 and you could use the annoying retcon for something good in the context of the story.

>>42310437
"Pinkie has yet one more sibling" was literally a plot point in Pony Life.
>>42310386
GlimGlam.

>>42310449
>one more sibling
>he doesn't know

>>42310460
I'm calling the janitor.

>>42310460
Octavio had a different cutie mark and was still male, unless you're implying this only happened in the FiM timeline. And we don't even know for sure if he's her only brother or if the other one is dead like she initially implied.

>>42310472
Getting forcibly castrated would drastically alter your fate, and thereby, your cutie mark. As we all know, these sorts like to start 'em off young.

>>42310475
Clearly doesn't apply to the picture.

>>42309022
>>42309054
Do you reckon she has a twin sister from Trottingham called Spoilt Rich?

>>42310496
That's not how twins work.

I've finished the fic just now, and I'll need a moment (15-20 minutes?) to write anything resembling a bookclub post. Sorry, but I am only now starting to fix my schedule and put everything back in order.

Rainbow Dashing through the origins of the Superstorm, in
/FSBC/

This is a very intense story. After it properly starts, that is—the opening is pretty long, with the "true" plot only beginning after a third of the fic is done, and the epilogue chapter is substantial as well. They are much-needed parts of the story, to be sure, and without them, Dash's personal struggles would both feel empty and pointless. Luckily, the density of the middle 50% is high enough to justify this structure.

Like, damn, those middle 15k start with a life-or-death scenario and continue in a constant escalation of stakes, both objective and personal, until the climax. The author managed to avoid making it feel exaggerated (for me, at least), which is crucial for a fic like this. Rainbow Dash is challenged by both nature and her own limits, over and over again, just barely managing to do what she can. I liked this fic, and I think it's better than how much I liked it; it realized its idea in a convincing, very capable manner, and I can't find much to criticize here. Maybe some could try to say that the tension was too high and reaching into the absurd? I'd disagree pretty firmly—this is what the fic is about—but I can see how it could not be to SoL-only enjoyers tastes. Then again, no fic can appeal to everyone, and it'd be silly to criticize them for it.
Despite the dangerous situation and some very close calls, it didn't feel like the fic lost any of its "ponyness". Between the antagonist being an uncontrolled, wild superstorm, the strong focus on Loyalty that Dash exhibits, and the general focus on Dash's inward analysis of her character, nothing breaks the setting here. The interactions with all the other ponies feel appropriate, and I liked the Wonderbolt dynamic she's had with Soarin and Spitfire. Slight tangent that I shouldn't be delaying the posting for: do people even remember that RD used to be shipped with Soaring simply everywhere? It feels like one of the ships that went almost completely extinct compared to its glory days.

Anyway: Good, well-written fic. Can recommend.
Next week, the spooky and not-so-spooky:
www.fimfiction.net/story/525598/a-skeleton-in-the-closet
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/566978/maize

[VOTING]
Because they're short, we've got to pick the next one, too. Some ideas:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/455858/the-bug-in-the-cave
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/328030/her-soldiers-we
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/191237/ghost-of-a-rose
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/375944/one-white-unicorn

Rainbow Dashing through the origins of the Superstorm, in
>/FSBC/

This is a very intense story. After it properly starts, that is—the opening is pretty long, with the "true" plot only beginning after a third of the fic is done, and the epilogue chapter is substantial as well. They are much-needed parts of the story, to be sure, and without them, Dash's personal struggles would both feel empty and pointless. Luckily, the density of the middle 50% is high enough to justify this structure.

Like, damn, those middle 15k start with a life-or-death scenario and continue in a constant escalation of stakes, both objective and personal, until the climax. The author managed to avoid making it feel exaggerated (for me, at least), which is crucial for a fic like this. Rainbow Dash is challenged by both nature and her own limits, over and over again, just barely managing to do what she can. I liked this fic, and I think it's better than how much I liked it; it realized its idea in a convincing, very capable manner, and I can't find much to criticize here. Maybe some could try to say that the tension was too high and reaching into the absurd? I'd disagree pretty firmly—this is what the fic is about—but I can see how it could not be to SoL-only enjoyers tastes. Then again, no fic can appeal to everyone, and it'd be silly to criticize them for it.
Despite the dangerous situation and some very close calls, it didn't feel like the fic lost any of its "ponyness". Between the antagonist being an uncontrolled, wild superstorm, the strong focus on Loyalty that Dash exhibits, and the general focus on Dash's inward analysis of her character, nothing breaks the setting here. The interactions with all the other ponies feel appropriate, and I liked the Wonderbolt dynamic she's had with Soarin and Spitfire. Slight tangent that I shouldn't be delaying the posting for: do people even remember that RD used to be shipped with Soaring simply everywhere? It feels like one of the ships that went almost completely extinct compared to its glory days.

Anyway: Good, well-written fic. Can recommend.
Next week, the spooky and not-so-spooky:
www.fimfiction.net/story/525598/a-skeleton-in-the-closet
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/566978/maize

[VOTING]
Because they're short, we've got to pick the next one, too. Some ideas:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/455858/the-bug-in-the-cave
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/328030/her-soldiers-we
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/191237/ghost-of-a-rose
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/375944/one-white-unicorn

>>42310563
This was a pretty cool fic. It's a very pony, and it came off as an early season Dash-centric special-length episode, albeit more visceral and violent. The epilogue, however, made me feel bittersweet — no matter how hard it tries to downplay it, Dash being the one responsible for ponies getting hurt kinda sucks.

To rapid fire points: I liked the writing. That opening pace and vivid freedom of flight transitioning into more conventional prose, "Her head was filled with static, a sea of small jagged thoughts [...]", and the imagery of the rail tracks upon thunderclouds, nice. And although brief, the Manehatten and depot section was cosy; I imagined the heat of the bustling offices contrasted with the cold rain in the streets outside. An interesting thing is that Dash is always moving; only when she hits an obstacle — figuratively or literally — does she stop. In fact, I think for most of this she's either flying or on the train, rarely on the ground. It's a very pegasus, very Dash, airy energy. As for the characters, first and foremost, this is about Dash and her self discovery, so most other characters were understandably flat. There was some good Applejack appreciation and surprisingly quite a bit of Soarin and Spitfire (she didn't even reprimand Dash for going AWOL!). Dash still thinking about her friends when getting her uniform or the chaos of the train depot was a nice touch. The scene where Twilight sends a letter to the princess for help only to receive "not my problem" in response was brutal. I can't believe Spike died off screen.

As brought up last week, the importance of themes and interpretation. This fic isn't subtle at all about it: It's not will vs instinct, but rather will and instinct coexisting — being aware of and to understand oneself, leveraging both to be your best. The first scene showcases it excellently, and it's later spelled out bluntly by Soarin and once again by Dash's hamfisted-but-necessary recollection in the eye of the storm. It's reinforced throughout: Willpower to fight the urge to run away when apologising to the stationmaster, galloping through the dark tunnel, and pushing past her limits. Instincts saving her from spiraling out of control, saving Applejack, and always being there. And the Wonderbolt uniform acting as a tool to ease Dash into introspection, separating being a Bolt (will) and herself (instinct), and as she develops over the course of the story, her uniform is slowly torn piece by piece until she fully becomes Rainbow Dash the Wonderbolt in both body and soul. The storm could be considered the physical manifestation of her struggle pushing against her, so the real lesson to be learned here is that if you let Rainbow Dash into your heart, all your hate for Manhattan can be redirected to Philadelphia, because fuck 'em, I suppose.

>>42310563
I got soft-filtered by chapter one. I started to read it and thought, "This is kinda boring." And I didn't want to hold that against the fic, because I knew I wasn't far enough to really say that with any confidence. Then life interfered and I never made it any further. I'd be open to reading the fic in the future, I guess, if anons here think highly enough of it. But there are other fics that are a higher priority for me.

>>42310496
We've agreed, for the sake of incest, that she's Cookie Crumble's estranged gold digger bitch sister.

>>42310386
This was literally a plot point with Twilight.

>>42310619
>Dash being the one responsible for ponies getting hurt kinda sucks
But that is also the message of the fic, isn't it? The whole "doing you best even if it's not ideal" is in the fic's description, and it's the one of the main things it tries to show over the entire duration of the story. She made things better, and she most likely saved the lives of a lot of ponies. It wasn't a very long part of the fic, but I think the fic handled her learning about the consequences of her actions just fine.
>An interesting thing is that Dash is always moving;
Yeah, she lives and dies with her momentum. When she stops, things are clearly going poorly. I think that's true of the show's Dash as well. I also liked how "pegasus" the fic felt. It's not that often that the fic manages to convey this sense of freedom and just flying as well as this fic does it.
>I can't believe Spike died off screen.
Kek, I completely forgot about him! ...And so did the author, apparently. But that's not too bad—fics forgetting Spike can't be a sin.
>The first scene showcases it excellently,
Well, extremely bluntly, but yes, it is effective in getting the readers on the same page. It wasn't until the fic's climax that I thought it was a little too much.
>separating being a Bolt (will) and herself (instinct), and as she develops over the course of the story,
Ooh, I probably have to take back the above point, seeing as I somehow didn't catch that. Very neat bit of storytelling.

>>42310643
>"This is kinda boring."
The fic has this introspective tone that makes the non-action parts play out more slowly. The middle half of the fic isn't like this, if you ever decide to give it another shot. But I also didn't think it was, like, one of the top N fics on the site. Good? Yes, definitely. Amazing? Eh, maybe if this kind of a fic really appeals to you.

>>42310563
This fic started off kinda meh and when I was finally getting into it I realized I was 50% done which was a surprise since I never looked at the word count. I think ultimately I don't like the author's style but do like the story. The author is too... I don't want to say intense or extreme because those I think would've properly invoked feelings. But I don't want to say 'try hard' either because I don't think that's fair. We open with RD having the internal monologue of an Ace Combat character and by the end of the fic she is closing her eyes and getting lost in the darkness of her mind while fighting off shadows of her past failures as they drown her. Rainbow's mental state feels like she's in Don't Starve. None of the internal stuff landed for me but I did like quite a bit of the physical stuff. Not all of it, I think it could've been less brutal in some parts, but a lot of the physical actions and characters were good enough to get me into the story. And I wish we got to hear something more about Rainbow's involvement at the end but I can understand why we don't.
>Work crew standing on the tracks
>train buddy
kino
>RD weighs as much as AJ

>>42310563
>The author managed to avoid making it feel exaggerated (for me, at least)
I only really got lost when she's having her mental break although my eyes definitely widened when she flies full speed into the tunnel AND THEN somehow crawls off the tracks and slams her head onto a rock. That part was pushing it

>>42310619
>the Manehatten and depot section was cosy
Yes, I didn't make a note of it, but the trainyard and the offices she went to were very nice and really good for setting the tone of the super storm
>so the real lesson to be learned here is that if you let Rainbow Dash into your heart, all your hate for Manhattan can be redirected to Philadelphia, because fuck 'em
kino

>>42310643
I'd say power through it on a fic of this length because I agree. The story had nothing for me until the storm actually started to get involved. but if you get to the train and still dont feel it then eh

>>42310762
>The fic has this introspective tone that makes the non-action parts play out more slowly. The middle half of the fic isn't like this, if you ever decide to give it another shot
agreed

does anyone know any good comedy centric fics that they could recommend to me?

>>42310882
I have only ever published [Comedies], but I wouldn't presume to call any of them "good".

Oh god I need to write my review of To Perytonia now. I didn't write any notes as I was reading. This is going to be hard.

>>42310707
He wasn't estranged and only the others didn't know. Which is far more realistic than people complained about. As someone with a sibling, it's entirely possible to go months or even years without mentioning their existence to a friend if they never happen to be relevant to a conversation. You're more likely to mention your pets than your siblings.

>>42310882
If bronies were funny we wouldn't be

>>42310921
>RD is the youngest of ten siblings and just never brought it up because she's selfish

>>42310563
>dash outspins a hurricane
A lot of dumbass Dash jokes write themselves with this one. Ponyville’s weather pony not only unaware of hurricanes as a weather phenomenon, but unable to even grasp the concept of it until she’s in one?
The story is good. I had low expectations because it is a simple concept RD story, and it’s also not really more than that. Even so, there were several individual scenes that were really evocative, and seemed outstanding for such a story. My only issue with the fic, really, is that it’s just a RD story: the author seems better than this.
>>42310619
I like the insight about will and instinct, those were clear enough but I didn't really pick up on the part about blending them, mostly because like >>42310776 I couldn't believe the hamfisted introspective parts. They weren't outright bad. If anything, it's to the story's credit that they were so short and to the point. I just couldn't accept that Dash would have that kind of internal monologue. It's completely out of line with episodes like Sonic Rainboom, and much too fast a resolution compared to Wonderbolts Academy or Newbie Dash.
It's not a sin to write a pony better than they are in the show - it's basically required for Celestia after all - I just don't care for Dash much so it doesn't really elevate this story.

>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/383344/to-perytonia
To Perytonia's premise is simple. Rarity, Rainbow Dash, and Fluttershy go to a foreign land and visit each city as they journey to the capital. Each city is very distinct, so we see a wide variety of cultures and enjoy the cast's attempts to understand them. Highlights include Fluttershy telling a story, Dash making friends with a warrior culture, and knocking over a big bird. It is very low stakes. You will also enjoy some of the lore, Luna thinking Dash has a death wish, and Fluttershy being awesome.

Much can be explained about To Perytonia by repeating what the blurb accurately says it is: adventure with a romance subplot. I do not do well reviewing such works because they rarely have big highs or lows that make it easy to point out the story's strengths and weaknesses. The obvious strength is that the fic was planned out. If you want to find adventure writing or world-building done right, then look here. The story certainly did what it was trying to do. At times I thought that I could skip three chapters ahead without much loss, but I would have paid the price for that later on.

I have not praised the romance. Some of the fic's stronger scenes come from it, with the second joust being a common example, but I find the romance pretty forgettable.

The weaknesses of the fic are so obvious, even early on in your read, that the author's notes in the epilogue points one of them out. I will not give spoilers here, but it suffices to say that the romance subplot relies on Rainbow Dash repeatedly missing something obvious and that the adventure relies on all of the ponies missing something that is obvious to the reader. The word most often used is "contrived". A much less significant weakness is that the fic has a few clear typos. It could have done with just one more editing pass.

Another issue is that the fic is damn long, so long that it probably harms the story. It's 70,000 words longer than The Lord of the Rings. At no point does it feel like a slog. On the contrary, I'd say that it's very easy reading. Unless you want to go as far as totally cutting out the romance, there is little obvious that could be cut entirely. I'd say that the weaker parts are the scenes of travelling between cities (character drama between the three ponies is the main thing keeping that afloat) and that the Morrowsworn stuff near the end takes up a lot of words and feels like it derails the plot. If anything can be cut down, it is there. I promise that you will have entirely forgotten some characters before the last time they are mentioned.

I cannot deny that the fic hooked me very quickly. At the start, just the mystery of Perytonia was enough. Later on, you're reading because the cast is fun. I do not regret the read, but I cannot imagine re-reading it. The length alone makes me hesitate to recommend it, but it is certainly far above the average that I expect from fan fiction.

>>42311006
One final thing to add: the warrior tribe segment is great. We have a culture that fits Dash well, but Rarity also finds a way. I practically cheered at the hydra scene. It's the intensity that the fic needed. I wish that we could have watched Rarity do the shaving, rather than changing scenes to the romance.

Fics featuring paper boats?

this will always be one of the best stories I’ve ever read https://www.fimfiction.net/story/171675/cartography-of-war

>>42311068
It is my lifelong goal to have someone voice this sentiment in regards to one of my works.

>>42311068
What about cuntography of vore?

>>42311091
Share some

>>42311068
>Daetrin
>Total Words: 220,190
Jesus Christ. Why have I not read this already?

>>42311106
Bookclub when?

>>42310776
>I realized I was 50% done which was a surprise
I've had a similar experience (but without such a 'meh' reaction; I thought the opening was necessary for the plot). This is one of the things that makes me believe that the writing is good, followed by the relative lack of errors and the fact that these highly emotional moments don't cross into 12-year-old's tryhard prose.
> I think it could've been less brutal in some parts,
Normally I'd be the first to make that argument, but here I thought it didn't cross any lines. Maybe it was more tolerable for me, since I liked the internal struggle here.

>>42310992
>A lot of dumbass Dash jokes write themselves with this one.
Pls be patient, she's doing her best.
>the author seems better than this.
No! The "worse" or simpler premises arguably need good writers more than the easy ones if the fic is to be any good.

>>42311140
We did that already. It's one of the best fics the bookclub has ever read, imo. I personally still have (Daetrin's) Triptych a little higher due to it having a stronger connection to the show and using canon characters, but I can't criticize or even disagree with anyone picking Cartography as the best fic on the site. The romance there is a lot better, and the story is more brave in several aspects, almost always nailing the execution perfectly.

>>42311149
>We did that already.
Wait, no, we didn't. We did the first three fics, and then some people read that outside of bookclub and discussed it itt as an extra story, because Triptych already saw a decline in readers (such is the fate of sequels on the bookclub).
I'd be up for a re-read if enough people want to.

>>42311100
Eh, what the heck?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/568786/gallileo-fic-aro

>>42311091
it's a good feeling

This is currently the top story:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/578505/i-just-want-to-talk-to-him

This may be the laziest cover art I've ever seen on Fimfiction.

>>42311620
remind me again why I shouldn't pivot to writing greens?

>>42311620
>sweebers gets an abortion
How does this work in Equestria? Is it done via magic? Is there a unicorn wandering around with an abortion cutie mark?

>>42311630
>abortion
I think it's meant to be giving it up for adoption.

>>42311651
AU fic where Granny Smith dies in a Timberwolf attack along with bright Mac and pear butter and all of the Apple kids go into foster care.

>>42311620
>shotgun
Why would Rarity be upset about this when it's exactly how she ended up with Sweetie Belle?

>>42311668
I think that's the point literally in the fic?

>appear for two seconds in a song
>spend the rest of your existence fucking Sweetie Belle or your mom

>>42311733
His "mom" is a disguised changeling. There is no "Cream Heart". Wake up, sheepones.

>>42311859
Well then he's still mashing Sweetie's buttons I guess.

>>42311667
Technically it'd be a Lilo and Stitch situation where Big Mac has to maintain custody of both of his younger sisters.

No, Fimfic, I put those breaks in there for a reason. Why won't you let me click the X to silence your mewling?

>>42311889
>I put those breaks in there for a reason
Wrong.

>>42311974
Don't presume to know my process, philistine.

>>42311977
I know everything there is to know.

>>42311989
I know nothing. So I never stop learning and never stop improving.

>>42312009
Wrong. Death is coming.

>>42312028
>spend whole life learning as much as possible
>die
>funeral happens
>pallbearers carry my body to the grave site
>my massive fucking brain busts through the bottom of my shitty plywood coffin and explodes across the church patio
>total pandemonium
>i get the last laugh from the deepest possible pit of hell

>>42312052
Any human who's gone on /fimfic/ can neither go to Heaven nor Hell for eternity.

>>42312065
They can, but only once they finish their longfic. So, semantics.

>>42312009
>gif
did she orgasm from the sight of those big yellow arches being erected?

>>42312085
She once dryhumped one of those ceramic Ronald Mcdonald bench statues.

>>42312131
A mare after my own heart.

>>42312134
>>42312131
So THAT'S the basis for Twipie...

>>42312148
One of these days, I'll write a Twipie tragedy.

>>42312154
That's inherently at odds with Pinkie's existence as a beacon of endless joy.

>>42312155
Which makes tearing her down all the more cathartic.

>>42312155
Just make Twilight outlive her.

>>42312162

>>42312168
Imagine Pinkie passing, and five hundred years later, Twilight is still finding hidden whoopee cushions and jack-in-the-boxes

>>42312191
Imagine Pinkie passing gas.

>>42312191
Missed G5 opportunity.

>>42312168
>tfw I will never experience this because I will never find love in the first place

>>42312196
Fuck is this how I have to do my SunnyIzzy immortality angst fic, with Twipie parallels

>>42312232
>writing g% fanfic

>>42312264
If you can't make things work with a bit of elbow grease, you don't deserve the towel to wipe that elbow grease up.

>>42312268
I'm more of a J-Lube guy, but whatever slickens your starfish.

>>42312264
its a cute ship

>>42312268
>polish the turd goy

>>42312308
You are in the turd polishing thread, buster.

>>42312168
Why is Twipie the best Pinkie ship?
[Spoiler]It's not.

>>42312375
>Twinkie haters can't Ctrl+S

I always feel awkward discussing my writing woes in this thread because it's like I'm disappointing every last one of you. Even the ones telling me to kill myself. Especially those ones.

>>42312375
It is.

>>42311155
I should read Triptych and the others written by Daetrin, butI’ve only read Cartography so far. I saw someone recommend it on here a few years ago and have read it twice. I said it’s the best because it’s one of the most illustrative stories I’ve ever read, the setting is beautiful, the plot and themes are deep, and the entire fic is extremely well-written. It’s also the perfect size and (this isn’t even criticism, just a personal preference) the only thing that is even slightly less than perfect was that some small parts of the middle dragged on ever so slightly. But it is an adventure book.

If it weren’t about MLP, I would tell everyone I know to read it. Instead it’s a secret I’ll probably keep forever. Thank you guys for being here at least.

>>42311620
Fucking hell there's a ton of typos.

I apologise for not interacting in the club much. It's very late where I am when the club starts, and I'm usually far too shy and busy to continue after waking.

Is it time to shame RainbowTyphoonAnon >>42012365 ?

>>42310563
>Rainbow Dash is challenged by both nature and her own limits, over and over again
I did constantly think about what Dash's limits were and how she would measure up to the other Wonderbolts. She lost consciousness three times (two knock outs, one exhaustion) before the fourth put her into a coma. Burned, slammed, cut, twisted, sprained. It bordered on unconvincing.
>do people even remember that RD used to be shipped with Soaring simply everywhere?
Yep, it's the OTP. With how Soarin was initially acting in this, I had to go back to check the tags and publish date.

>>42310762
>But that is also the message of the fic, isn't it?
Absolutely, it's done well enough. But however unintentional it was, it's a trolley problem dilemma. I empathetically loathe a scenario where Dash would have to essentially explain to a now-quadriplegic foal "I did my best to sacrifice you". It's a haunting, real life prospect, and with ponies, I think there should be room for ideals and magical third options. Not to say I disagree with its message or would change the fic, it's just the sad part of what is a good outcome and I worry for the fictional character.

>>42310776
>train buddy
All of the railway staff were great with their little quirks.

>>42310992
>My only issue with the fic, really, is that it’s just a RD story: the author seems better than this.
Kek.
>I just couldn't accept that Dash would have that kind of internal monologue.
I agree, there were a few lines that really didn't seem like her. I justified it as a difference between the mediums (cartoon vs written), and that she interprets her inner voice differently (though a poor excuse). Anything's possible with a TBI.

>>42312196
Twilight's reincarnation her life upended by Pinkie's so it works out.

>>42312196
Twilight's reincarnation had her life upended by Pinkie's so it works out.

>>42312381
>pic
Is Opaline the closest the franchise got to that?

>it's another "hundreds of meaningless 1000 word fics flooding the front page of the site" episode

>>42313007
I'm hoping my 1kw fic will stand out, even if its only impact will be getting me barred from future participation in the contest.

>>42313007
Sour grapes.

>>42313017
Bad analogy, more like sour and sweet and whatever grapes when I came to the apple orchard to eat some apples, but someone's holding a grape contest so now everyone's planting shitty grapevines instead. I don't fucking want grapes but nobody's growing any apples anymore until the contest ends

If all it takes is a little bit of money, I wonder what kind of contest I can hold to shit up the new submissions for a while. HiE contest maybe

>>42313014
So... it's foalcon? Asking for a friend.

>>42313024
Bad mentality. The fics you wanted wouldn't have been written with any more frequency without the contest.

>>42313025
I'm the friend.

>>42313027
But they'd have been visible in the feature box and whatnot, rather than being flooded out by the zillion 1000 word submissions.

>>42313025
>>42313032
I'd like to reassure both yourself and your esteemed companion that my story in no way contravenes any Australian legislation.

>>42313037
>they'd have been visible in the feature box
Unless the fics you want are HiE and clop and shitty comedy, no, lmao. There's only three 1k fics in the box right now, and yet compared to the rest it's quite possible they're bringing the average quality up.

>>42313039
The sound you never want to hear while working on a cloud engine.

>>42311198
I thought the quality of writing was good. Well-written, good dialogue, the plot is simple and not too burdensome for a short story, good pacing, good look into pre-established characters.

>>42313185
Thanks. Dusty clicked for me once I rolled back the counter on her spiral into vengance, since my original premise of "get Spitroast fired for gross negligence" wasn't really in the spirit of Horsemas.

>>42311149
>>42311155
IMO Tryptich was ever so slightly more boring, because it was a lot less adventurous. My memory isn't 100% solid on it but IIRC a big part of it was Celestia just going around visiting other immortal rulers around the world, dragons, zebras, shit like that. She was clearly in little to no danger at any point, most of them were old friends anyway, and the travel was also trivial.
Again my memory is hazy but I think there was a second plot of Luna and Twilight trying to rule Equestria in her absence? Unless I'm majorly mixing it up with something else. But if I'm remembering right, that was also very slice-of-lifey, at least of a princess's life.

Daetrin's strength in all his other fics are the fantastical travels and adventures. Tryptich was by no means bad, but due to the complete lack of adventure or thrill as I remember it, it felt a lot more boring. If Tryptich was the first one to see a decline, not Apotheosis, then could also be why.

>>42312434
I think all of Daetrin's adventure fics are improvements on each other. Edge of the Map is a less polished version of Apotheosis is a less polished version of Cartography. For which reason I always recommend reading his fics in order - they're all great, and you'll appreciate them all the more going from start to finish, than starting with the best and going back to read the earlier ones.
Cartography, being the best, is definitely the one to read if you'll only ever read one. But his fics really aren't that long.

>>42311155
The two of us probably already said all we want to say about Cartography when we did our club of two.
However, there are two or three more regulars now than there were who rejected Cartography when it was on the table. They would have to pipe up to actually have a club on it.

>>42313257
You remember right. The main halves of Triptych are Tuna trying to fill Celestia's horseshoes, and Celestia going around the world and interrogating gods on their roles. The Tuna is decent, but Celestia's journey is the highlight. Besides the good prose, the Triptych's main strength is its worldbuilding. If you don't need the danger and conflict to stay immersed, the places Celestia journeys to are more than captivating enough just in the sense of seeing the sights and imagining the cultures to stay completely engaged.
Some readers do that, though. More than one other poster in the club for it was just "this is Celestia going to a place and asking the same question four times."

>>42313361
The worldbuilding is great but imo the story just kinda feels flat without any conflict. I'm a big worldbuilding enthusiast; some of my favourite stories are extremely worldbuilding-heavy, and worldbuilding is definitely one of Daetrin's strengths.
But that quote is really very apt for Triptych. The worldbuilding is still great but it's just a bit... boring, when it's conveyed through the immortal princess going around and either supplexing or brohoofing every other ruler. The story's also not super short either - 50k words is not gigantic, but it's not some worldbuilding vignette, it's a proper novel - on the short side for it but still very much a proper novel. I just don't think you can build a novel out of "immortal untouchable ruler flies around the world and sees the sights while lightly discussing some surface-level philosophy with some other immortals".

Like consider Apotheosis for example, Luna's still powerful in it and there's not THAT much danger IIRC, but fact is that they're lost and also Twilight is still vulnerable. Their journey is not super action-packed, but there's the underlying quest to find their way back home driving them forward, and the dangers to Twilight are very real even if Luna is doing her best to keep her safe. You can have an immortal princess in an adventure and have it work; Triptych's leisurely stroll, with no particular goal or purpose other than "let me teleport to a few places then come back", no urgency, no suspense, no conflict whatsoever, just isn't it.
Even if the other gods had said some stuff Celestia didn't like - boo hoo, she'd have been sad? She'd probably have flown back and then Luna and Twilight would have knocked some sense into her. Seriously, there's zero conflict in Triptych. How can you write a 50k story with no conflict?

I unironically think an anthology of vignettes, each describing the daily life and customs in the various places Celestia visits in Tripych, but without Celestia's visit at all, would have been more interesting. We don't even see much of the different cultures, we see some massive ancient gods, but we see them in a setting where their power doesn't even matter because Celestia is even more powerful.

I think I lied though, there might have been some conflict in the Tuna arc, but it should be obvious why "borderline comedic relief about running Equestria while Celestia's on a short sabbatical" doesn't quite stack up to the plots of the other stories in the series.

>PrintFriend hasn't seen my PM over 18 hours later
Is he okay?

>>42313419
Some people don’t check their messages and emails and such regularly.

>>42313481
You'd think he would on the supposed deadline.

Forcing myself to finish the video games on my phone before reading fics again.

>>42313654
>forcing myself to roll up the dopamine IV like a toothpaste tube and drain every last drop before i'm forced to move on to something marginally more challenging
I'm not saying horsewords are peak intellectual stimulation, but come on, anon.

>>42313666
Peak intellectual stimulation in 2025 lies in the posts of obscure internet schizos.

>>42313673
Hey, that's me!

>>42313666
Checked but terrible take. Actually sticking to an activity instead of jumping like a monkey between different stimuli is the more challenging and disciplined approach, even if said activity isn't as noble and intellectually deep as reading about Rarity rimming Twilight's asshole while smelling her balls.

>>42313699
Sure, but it depends on the activity. Forgive my bias, but I tend to assume that any given mobile game is less challenging and requires less discipline than reading. Besides, I'm talking about actual fics, not ten-minute clopslop.

>tfw gaming computer getting repaired so all I can do is horsewords

>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/73283/missing-her
I'm a sucker for romance and tragedy and drama, so keep that in mind. This one starts off feeling like a sort of "heartbreak cope" fic, which is all well and good. Real-world pain often inspires art. What I like about this one is the way that it steadily unveils important information. At first, all we know is that Lyra is extremely depressed and stuck in her head over her breakup. But bit by bit, we learn details that provide important context for her situation. What the relationship was like, why it ended, how long it's been since it ended. That last one recontextualizes everything that Lyra has been feeling and doing in the "present", and shows that she's perhaps off her rocker and not as sympathetic as one might originally assume. And by the time that idea is processed, she goes and ruins everything spectacularly.
I wouldn't recommend its sequel, though. The outcomes presented in it feel a bit "too much", and the whole thing treats Lyra with a weird reverence that she frankly doesn't deserve. It's more interesting to speculate on what would have happened next, than to go with the sequel.

>>42313666
How do you roll a toothpaste tube? Do you break your KitKat laterally?

I cannot recall ever reading a single good button mash fic. Pic unrelated.

>>42313736
If you aren't intuitively familiar with this analogy, then I'm going to have to assume that you haven't brushed your teeth since your parents stopped helping you with it.

>>42313666
I had to stop playing RPGs because I was so obsessed with not missing content that I would always be over-levelled.

Speaking of video games, do you guys consider visual novels to be literature?

>>42313739
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/505555/a-new-kind-of-game

>>42313785
I consider Morrowind to be

>>42313785
They're about the same tier as comic books as far as I'm concerned. 10% text and 90% colourful pictures. You can still tell a story with that, but I'd only call it "literature" in a very wide sense, not colloquially.

>>42313785
Higurashi was.

>>42313724
That was maybe true 10 years ago, but nowadays despite gachaslop being prevalent there are real proper games on mobile too. Even aside from the ability to emulate anything up to an N64 and probably more at this point, there are both a number of ports of great game and a slew of good original ones if you're looking in the right places.

I keep seeing "A Quiet Rune Scribe" on the featured box. Is it worth reading? 1.6m words?

>>42313820
>Higurashit
Can't wait for Onions Shill F(art) to flop so the clown is exposed for the fraud he is.

>>42313825
How do I look in the right places? I've tried looking a few times in the past and have never found anything.

>>42313829
No.
>>42313785
By wordcount some are stupidly long, so they might count. Unlike comic books >>42313810 they lack elements like panelling and sequence flow, so if books can have illustrations and still count I could see an argument that VNs are just CYOA books with a lot of illustrations. It's not an argument I'd make, the visuals play more of a part and they tend to have some audio component too, but in a broader sense you can still argue the story contained within is comparable to literature.

>>42313829
I haven't tried it yet but it's HiE (turned into a pony). That means one of two things: either it's unreadable garbage, or it's decently moderately written slop that's worth reading if you have the right kind of autism to enjoy HiE.

If you think you have the right kind of autism to qualify for option 2, try it and you'll quickly see whether the fic falls under 2 or 1.

>>42313829
No. It's magic system slop and not well written.

>>42313785
Probably? But focusing too much on what is and what isn't doesn't tend to be productive. There was a joke that Witcher 3 is a VN, arguing that everyone praises it solely for the story and immersion (and a million interactive cutscenes, too) and that the 'game' parts of that "game" are so trivialized and bad as to not count. And some VNs reduce the already minor "gameplay" even further, to the point that they become "stories with pictures"; some are completely unvoiced. Are these "more" literature, just by stripping away a few of the "distractions"?

At the end of the day, the primary purpose of many of them is telling a story, and they rely mainly on the written word to do that. Lots of those words, to be precise. Given that, I don't think there's a meaningful line to be drawn between them and "pure" literature, regardless of what you decide to call them. Some of them can even tell good stories.

If a singer can win a literature Nobel then VNs count. He deserved that btw.

>>42313885
>it's magic system slop
>...and not well written
why is all the good slop NEVER well written REEEEEEEEEEEEE

>>42314119
There is no good hard MLP magic system. It is time to accept that.

>>42314122
DOWAS

Gimme good NMM fics
No not ___ I've read that

>>42314167
People seem to think my last fic with her was good, but it's more about Luna.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/570865/love-thyself-cinderblox
For less self shilling options, Monsters is not something I'd consider an amazing fic but the NMM parts are some of the best in it if you don't mind edge, and while she's only slowly and somewhat subtly introduced she's great in MCA too.

>>42314189
Oh I've had Monsters on my read later list for a decade. Thanks for reminding me, I should actually go ahead with it.
Who's MCA?

>>42314192
Machina Cor Armaggedon

>>42313829
No. Just don’t read long ass fanfiction period. It’s almost never worth it.

Damn, this guy is still writing after 13 years.

>>42314427
>>42314440
>mobile
>light theme
Look after your retinas, Anon, I'm begging you.

How many fics are there over 1,000,000 that are possibly worth reading? I have a few guesses but I want to know what you people think.
>>42314445
Im fine.

>>42314133
Celestia's conflict in Triptych isn't very flashy, but it's there. At the start of the story, she's become untethered from her millennium long role as Equestria's sole ruler, no longer sure of what to do. She decided that she has to relearn what it means to be a Princess of Equestria, rather than the Princess of Equestria, so she goes on a quest to learn about her own nature as a goddess by interrogating her peers. She learns that she's changed what she is by indirectly ascending Twilight, and comes back ready to retake the throne, while sharing it.
I'll also add that any real depth those conversations she has comes from the way they're different from each other rather than the conversation itself in isolation. That's mirrored in the worldbuilding: how will each locale Daetrin brings us to differ from the last? Those are what's most fun about reading her journey.
As for the Tuna, it's not exactly comedic. Part of it is Luna interviewing her subjects and trying to be a better princess, another part of it is Twilight fucking up a spell and mind controlling the entirety of Equestria for a little while, and then Chrysalis shows up.

Anyway, Triptych is just really different from Daetrin's other stories.

>>42314464
>>42313389
whoops
>>42314133
Although DoWaS is the best of them, Archmage also has an excellent magic system and the one from In Sheep's Clothing is also quite good.

>>42314456
Of course you're fine right now, you're most likely under 25. If this thread is still going in five years, I'm going to poke you in your 1.5/8 Harry Potter varifocals and smear my greasy fingerprints all over them so that you can't see the keyboard well enough to refute me laughing at you.

>>42314468
I remember when I could see light themes without getting a migraine. Now I'm 30 or 40 years old and can't see the color yellow.

>>42314468
>>42314483
There is something wrong with your eyes, and it has nothing to do with light themes. I'm over 40 and I find light themes easier to read.

>Google docs tries to correct "You two" to "youtube"

Fucker

>>42314440
consistency and longevity do not translate into quality.

its drek

>>42314456
>How many fics are there over 1,000,000 that are possibly worth reading?

unsurprisingly few. the smarter ones will break up their million words into multiple books. the downside to 7 digit wordcounts are that you never know when the writer is going to come to their senses and either walk away like whatmustido or die like kudzuhaiku

>>42314688
>the smarter ones will break up their million words into multiple books
Yeah basically this

>>42313829
>1.6m words
>HiE
>show rewrite
Anon...

>>42314445
Light mode is easier on the eyes due to the higher perceived contrast.
Obviously just don't blast the backlight at blinding intensities in a pitch black room. Have some ambient lighting, however dim, and dim the screen accordingly. Once you do that, there's no need for any dark modes anywhere.

>>42314467
Who's Archmage? Is that the one where a new completely arbitrary-sounding "school of magic" is added every other chapter out of nowhere and Twilight has to spend that chapter doing some inane acrobatics to "learn that type of magic"?

>>42314964
>If you act like a normal, functional human being, you won't need night modes ever again!
I don't see how this can be practical.

>>42314688
Wait is Diaries actually dead?

>>42314973
Anon you fucking retard. Buying a $5-10 chink nightlight and turning it on, then pressing two keys on your phone/laptop to turn the screen down a bit, has nothing to do with being normal. You can easily do it while living in the filthiest hikikomori depression den.
You can even skip the nightlight. I often do actually. Just turn the fucking brightness down. I promise you won't suddenly lose your wizard powers.

>>42314983
>You can easily do it while living in the filthiest hikikomori depression den.
But if there's more light in the room, I'll actually be aware of the stare of my NEET-hovel.

>>42314992
Simply buy more screen to encircle your cranial area with.

>>42314971
Yep! By Loyal.

>>42315390
Why did you deniggify her? I thought you were le heccin woke and communist?

>>42315390
>that tripe
>good
The magic system was among the worst things in that story, and that's saying a lot.
>>42315398
That facial structure was never a nigger, anon. At best lunafag de-tanned her.

>>42315402
It was niggy, merely animemoeslopped. Remember the japs will flatten everything to their shit 'style', from proud aryans to cave dwellers.

>>42315398
>>42315412
>"b-but she was a nigger in my head!"
Animeblack is not a real ethnicity, but your attempt to still get mad at it is noted.

>>42315436
>nooooo my beautiful animequeens would neber include niggers in their work
kill yourself

>>42315444
Nippon hath no darker than the Okinawan.

>>42315412
>the japs will flatten everything to their shit 'style'
Yeah, exactly, she looked like a generic anime, not a nigger. She just happened to have black skin.
"Blacks" doesn't just mean dark-skinned people, it means negroids. Dark skin is just usually the easiest way to identify one, but that doesn't mean that if you ms paint bucket the skin you turn someone into a negroid. Not any more than an albino nigger is a white just because his skin is white.

printFriend, are you still there? Or did Truck-kun isekai you to Equestria?

>>42315513
printfriend was a publisher's agent conning you into giving up the rights to your horsewords.

>>42315532
Oh no, not my royalties! I'm going to starve now.

>>42315532
Jokes on you, my shit wouldn't ever make a cent.

>>42314976
for 2 years

>>42315676
shieeeet

>>42315676
I was deeply disappointed when I found out that it was not, in fact, a pony adaptation of Gogol.

>>42315685
That's down to interpretation.

>>42315703
Depends whether or not the author died from despair over not being able to finish it to his liking.

Today I remembered Equestria canonically made a national holiday out of dubcon.

>>42315948
Celestia's National Rapeplay Day was needed to bolster the summer economy, what with its dearth of holidays and whatnot.

>>42315951
I was thinking of H&H Day actually.

>>42315954
Just because the crusaders tried to daterape their teacher doesn't mean the entire holiday's about that.

>>42315954
That's just pony Valentine's Day, silly. It was the CMC who brought dubcon into it.

>>42315962
>>42315960
>Twilight Sparkle: I've just been reading the most fascinating book about Hearts and Hooves Day. Did you know that this holiday got its start because of a love potion?
>Sweetie Belle: Did you say... a love potion?
>Twilight Sparkle: That's right. It even has the recipe.
>Sweetie Belle: I... don't suppose we could borrow that book for a little while, do ya?
DYEWTS?

>>42315974
Unicorn propaganda mad about Earth Pony alchemy.

>>42315974
I rewatched this specific episode less than a month ago and I already forgot that part. I think it's time for me to go into a home.

>>42315977
>recipe uses clouds, rainbows, and pegasus feathers
I think the potion may have been of pegasus design.

>>42315974
>two minor kingdoms in ruin as a result of accidental love poisoning
>make a national holiday out of it
What did Celestia mean by this?
Also how does the 1 hour clause work with sleeping?

>>42315974
I'd guess ponies celebrate H&H as a repudiation of 'fake' or coerced love as demonstrated in its origin myth but I'm gonna go ahead and imagine they're all a bunch of sickos instead because it's more fun

>>42315988
Of course the pegasi are rapists...

>>42316094
It's a bio-weapon to force the other tribes to inbreed

Congratulations on the (inferior) local Rarifag for being a filthy degenerate coomer feeding the clop machine. Oh an on actually finishing and publishing a fic, more than most people ITT can claim to their name.
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/579912/sweeter-than-sugar

>>42316159
I have a fic ready to be published right now, but I'm gonna wait 5 days just to spite you.

>>42316159
>more than most people ITT can claim to their name
S-shut up...

>>42316159
>Pros
Decent build-up.
>Cons
Mares are meant to have teats, there were none mentioned. A mare without teats is like an angel without wings.
Usage of the word 'buck' has always been one of the fandoms most retarded memes. You're writing about ponies have sex, just use the word fuck.

>>42316279
>like an angel without wings
or a tgirl without her penis

>>42316327
Men have penises, so yeah getting rid of them is weird.
Nice unrelated picture of Trixie btw.

>>42316330
>unrelated
Trixie is Equestria's foremost gelder. This is common knowledge.

>>42316347
She certainly does geld her opponents (metaphorically) with magic.

>>42316180
You'll do it one day anon, just write something appealing.

>>42316416
Writing to please others is the literary equivalent of being the town whore. You might as well take commissions and at least upgrade to prostitute.

>>42315213
>Block out the world entirely!
Brilliant. Why didn't I think of that?
That way, I can procrastinate on dozens of fics at once!

>>42316527
>what he likes isn't liked by others
Oof

>>42316527
Oh, of course you'd jump to pleasing others you tramp. Is being appleaing to oneself not even a consideration in that sordid mind of yours?

>>42316572
maybe I get enough people to like me I can finally tolerate myself

>>42316595
I like me.

>>42316608
Nobody likes a showoff.

>>42316614
Explain Trixie's popularity.

>>42316614
I do. Confidence and passion is sexy.

Narration and descriptions shouldn't have typos. but it's okay for dialogue to be grammatically incorrect. When people talk they don't talk all good like.

>>42316619
Trixiefags fall into two categories: those who want to help an emotionally stunted mare grow past her need for affirmation, and those who merely see her a reflection of themselves.

>>42316629
What if my narrator is a part of the Apple family?

>>42316636
No Apple Family member is literate enough to narrate a story.

>>42316636
Like it's being told by Granny Smith or something? You should probably make that obvious at the start of the story.

>>42316630
>those who want to help an emotionally stunted mare grow
Isn't this every waifufag for every character on the show?

>>42316670
No, Scootaloofags just want to torture and abuse her.

>>42315402
The magic system in Archmage is one of the best things about the story that doesn't have all that much else going for it. Even so, I know some posters in this thread can't grasp how well the schools of magic are blended with the plot, as evidenced by the accusation that they "come out of nowhere."
Besides being an interesting and creative collection of magical disciplines, each given time in the story according to their weight, it also has the distinction of laying out the magic system that the show actually uses years before episodes like All Bottled Up did.

>>42316738
No they don't.

>>42316862
>domineering, secretive behavior
>not an abuser
mhm

>>42316630
There are three types of trixiefags.
Originalfags that ended up being successful blue pilled normies
Oldfags ended up being chuds
Or newfags that are troons.

>>42313419
>>42315513
>>42315532
>>42313481
Hello! I'm alive, just busy juggling some projects at work and other personal business. I’m happy to report that everyone has managed to swoop in and send me feedback at the last second before my self-imposed deadline. Barring some technical issues and a few more discussions of edits, it seems like everyone is happy with their proofread fics. That process was the single biggest time sink thus far, so hopefully it was worth it.

Moving forward, I’m going to actually start laying out words on digital paper. As a reminder, you can see the page style here >>42160859. For those curious, here is the order in which the fics are going to be arranged in the final product:
Requiem for a Friend, Math Spook
Statistics, xTSGx
Something On Your Back, Faeforches
No Time to Scream, Equimorto
Flickering Flame, Not That Anon,
S.S. Gale Clipper, xTSGx
Nightshift, Jinxed
Ponies Don’t Lay Eggs, Kassaz
The Hole, Not That Anon
Trixie’s Adventures Under Ground, alki
The Anoniad, Math Spook
From Love to Changelings, Kassaz
The Bells’ Toll, xTSGx
The D.H Postal Company, Jinxed
Rainbow’s Secret, alki
Long Way Forward, Not That Anon
Made in Heaven, Equimorto

Bitching and moaning about the order is welcome. I'll try to give more frequent updates from here onward.

>>42316929
can you put all the pregnigger's shit right at the end so I can just cut out the back of the book

>>42316862
>Child molestation isn't abuse!
I'm sorry, son.

>>42316955
Consensual sex isn't abuse. But yes, Byte would deffo force himself on an unwilling filly.

>>42316898
>>42316955
I didn't mean that Scootafags don't want to torture and abuse her. I meant they don't *just* want to. They also want to fuck her. I don't think they'd be happy just hitting her. They'd be happiest if they could violently rape her to within an inch of her life, only leaving her alive so that they could do it again later.

>>42316999
See this is why I'm glad I'm into consensual sex with mares.

God I fucking hate and loathe some of the people on this board.

Anyways this fic was just finished today after exactly 13 years minus one day.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/21481/know-your-mare

>>42316999
I want to give her a good home and help her come to terms with her disability.
But I'm not a scootafag.

>>42316749
I have no complaints about how well it's blended with the plot. But the system itself is awful.
The way a completely random and arbitrary school is presented every couple of chapters is great at driving the story, I don't disagree, it just makes for a nonsensical magic system
>umm you have to learn anger magic!
>for this you must get really angry and chuck boulders at a mountain for a day
>congrats now you know anger magic
>never mentioned in the story again, never used to cast any spells, literally just an odd intermission

Also, speaking of, I don't even remember them being blended with the plot well in terms of actually being utilised. There's a bunch of chapters of Twilight trying to grow some rare tree, a feat which, if she succeeds, will somehow suddenly qualify her as an expert of plant or nature magic I forgot. By the way not as an exam or test mind you, but as the actual lesson - get that tree to thrive and bam you know nature magic, but anyway I digress. Unlike anger magic, this arc lasts for multiple chapters. And afterwards I don't remember nature magic ever being brought up again or used by Twilight.
The magic system is not "blended with the plot" if, after the exposition, it's never actually used for casting or for solving problems.

>>42316929
>gif
Do you look that cute irl?

>>42317316
>I have no complaints about how well it's blended with the plot
>Immediately complains about how arbitrarily the schools are presented
>can't see them used in the story
Yeah, no, that's not the story's fault, and I already had this discussion >>38562997
If you take such a surface level view of the story and don't even see that Twilight masters her own anger when she taught anger magic by the princesses, then proceed to get upset at the story for seemingly never bringing it up again, it's just your own fault.
I never even thought that these were story threads that required deep insight to glean, but here we are. I'll continue to praise it for having some subtlety.

Does cover art just not matter anymore?

>>42317676
>le anger magic exists
>Twilight, throw rocks for a while
>you have mastered anger magic
>this also means you have mastered your own anger
>because the story says so
>this is deep writing

>>42317737
>How can you read this? There's no pictures!

Anthro should be banned from fimfic, actually

>>42317748
just become a fillyfag desu
it's more fun and you don't have to worry about SUDDENLY, HANDS

>>42317745
It kind of matters.

>>42317737
Meanwhile, at the other end of the sinbin: purest sovl.

>>42317676
Mastering your own anger has nothing to do with the school of magic being stupid. We're talking about magic systems and just throwing together a dozen of completely arbitrary "magic school of X" with no rhyme or reason does not make for a good magic system.
I get your point about mastering your own anger, actually, that's fair and not a terrible plot point, it's still just a terrible school of magic. And yes, if we're talking about magic systems, I AM upset about the story never bringing it up again because the point of magic systems is to cast spells, and if the majority of the "schools" in the system are never actually used magically ever again then it's completely useless to include this part of the system in the story. Twilight having anger issues was not exactly a plot point I remember, anyway, so mastering her anger was only necessary as part of having "anger magic", and if anger magic is never used again it is unnecessary.

I also like how you ignored all my points about nature magic. I think I remember shield magic also having some grand ceremony thingy going to the heart of canterlot but again Twilight never taps into shield magic again to cast anything in particular. The list could go on except it's probably been like eight years since I read the story and I don't care to remember enough to list more examples of its magic system being disjointed, incoherent, and shit.

>>42317799
The Lunaflag is a known lolcow, ignore him.

>>42317801
People often say that but I don't actually always disagree with him, and I think he often has sensible opinions. Just this time around it's completely egregious.

>>42317802
You're forgiven for being retarded on occasion.

>>42317799
Twilight doesn't have anger management issues, so it's not hard for her to master it. The story doesn't spend much time on it, anyway. If you're just mad that it doesn't come up again, it does: the firey unicorn apprentice that she takes on has anger management issues that affect his magic, and she uses what she learned about anger to train him. That's a school she learns not to use herself but to help other ponies with, as the Archmage.

I didn't ignore your comment about nature magic, either. The comment I linked discusses it, you can go read that. In short, she failed to learn the lesson and it promptly impacted her ability to perform the role of the Archmage in the story. There's more layers to the blending than "here's a training setup, here's her using the training payoff"

>>42313724
I assume that anyone with a brain emulates old handheld games rather than play actual mobile games.

>>42314456
I'm pretty sure we've had this conversation before.

>>42314983
I can't believe in the nightlight thing. I want as little light as possible when I'm trying to get to sleep. I bought blackout curtains for this.

>>42318175
Presumably when you're staring at a screen is not when you're trying to sleep.
>inb4 lol I'm so quirky and terminally online I doomscroll on my phone every night until I literally drop asleep with the phone in my hand
Almost nobody actually does this, even the most online people I know still put their phone down when it's time to actually fall asleep. If you really do live like that then what color theme you use is irrelevant for your health anyway

>>42318178
I have almost nothing installed on my phone. All of my apps fit on to one screen and a lot of those are pre-installed. I'm either reading fics, reading something technical, or emulating a game.

>>42316749
I couldn't even get 10 chapters into Archmage. It was shit. My only lasting memory is Luna telling Twilight to go take a dick so she can learn magic.

>>42317737
That's actually pretty good cover art. It shows Big Mac trapped by unseen forces, which the summary reveals to be his temptations.

>>42318181
Not my point retard.
When you're trying to sleep you're presumably lying in bed with your eyes closed. When you're on your phone, you're looking at the screen with your eyes open and presumably not actively trying to sleep at that very moment.
Therefore, having a bit of ambient light e.g. from a nightlight while you're staring at screens (your phone or otherwise) is completely unrelated to your preference for sleeping in the dark without any lights.

>>42317958
Fair points.
And none of that changes that the magic system is still utter shit. There is still nothing actually coherently linking the magic together into a "system", it's still just a haphazard collection of random schools.

>>42318187
Darkness before sleep makes you sleep better. Why would I not try to get as much darkness as possible?

>>42318167
I can play StS while shitting though.

>>42318194
Because it fucks up your eyes, for one, and for two because it's not actually less light, because the contrast between the darkness and the screen makes you perceive it as more light.

>>42318212
Why would an extremely low brightness phone fuck up your eyes?

>>42307509 (OP)
> Funny story idea
TONIGHT, on PONY-GEAR:
> Blueblood is found on the Epstein files,
> Anon steals Applejack's Stetson,
> Twilight eats local cuisine at a dodgy food truck, gets severe diarrhea, and loses her wings because of her shame,
> And Celestia banishes the CMC to Tartarus to drown in a pot of boiling liquid shit for all of eternity because they leaked her minstrel performances.
All of this and more, tonight on PONY-GEAR

>>42318226
Write it, then. Couldn't be worse than Runig.

>>42318194
Blue light fucks up sleep a lot more than yellow light. A nighlight will be at least no worse, and likely a lot less bad, than a phone right in front of your face.

>>42318218
Are you using dark mode on extremely low brightness? If so then fair enough.
Because of the aforementioned contrast issue, most people will use dark mode with more brightness than they would if they were using light mode.

>>42318226
> Luna is excommunicated from the church of Hasbro due to her questioning whether or not the hippogryph massacre could've possibly been 6 million,
> Sapphire shoals deletes her twitter,
> And Rainbow Crash steals the horseshoes off of a hobo.
All of this and more, on TOP PONY

>>42318262
>most people will use dark mode with more brightness
Do they? Not him but my PC screens are at 4/100 and 7/100 precisely because dark mode in longer sessions is tiring on the eyes at high brightness.

>>42318295
If you then switch to light mode, does it feel "too bright" or not?

>>42318315
It feels a lot brighter, but not uncomfortably so. There are some sites or apps that don't support night mode, too, and switching to those isn't very jarring.

Fuck reading.
All my homies transmit their stories through oral tradition.

>>42318382
I have no doubt you partake in some oral traditions with your "homies".

Thanks to the anon who reminded me of Monsters, I've read about half today and it's excellent

>>42310882
I just recently got back into the show after a decade and I've been gorging myself on fics. As a result of living under that rock, though, I have no concept of which ones everyone's already read, so YMMV. Here are a few I liked (I really need to make an account so I can make a favorites list instead of guessing from the titles on my browser bookmarks):

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/152944/the-gift-horse
>Pinkie Pie summons a horrifying urban legend monster known only as "The Gift Horse" in order to steal the presents it carries
6k words. Passes merely 'comedic' and veers into full-on 'shitpost' near the end.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/34787/a-door-jam
>Twi and AJ have been roped into keeping Pinkie Pie from devouring the Cakes' big order they've been working tirelessly on, only to find she's become completely obsessed with the idea that something lurks beyond Sugarcube Corner's back door.
11k words, really nails the early season vibe too.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/2012/the-contest
>When Fluttershy said she was the quiet game world champion, she wasn't kidding, and she's back to defend her title in this year's competition.
7k words, not much to say other than that the author is really good at wringing every joke he can out of the premise. Rarity's attempt is probably my favorite moment.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/531571/the-firries
>Rarity discovers that Fluttershy is secretly part of a community of ponies that dress up as and roleplay as trees, known as 'Firries'. After helping her with her costume so that she doesn't give herself splinters, Rarity decides that she's accompanying her friend to this year's convention to protect her from whatever it is that goes on there.
11k words, I'll just let the premise speak for itself.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/512949/tirek-season
>Bugs Bunny isn't quite sure where he is, and the guy he asked for directions didn't take too kindly to it. Someone should really knock this 'Tirek' guy down a peg or two.
6k words, and the only crossover I'll never refer to as a "guilty" pleasure.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/13565/naked-singularity
>Twilight Sparkle has taken it upon herself to write a novel, and asks Rarity to help proofread. The only problem, of course, is her chosen genre... and after her friends' attempts to spare her feelings leave her thinking that what she wrote was anything other than a crime against literature, it's now up to them to stop her from reading her awful science-themed erotica as part of an event before she humiliates herself.
11k words, and part of what I'm pretty sure is a mini-genre of "Twilight writes really bad smut" fics. Good humor and good at evoking a cringe reaponse, I had to take breaks at multiple points to recharge before I could bear to continue.

>>42318472
It's not but you're welcome.

>>42316929
It looks good to me. Are stories with similar tones clustered together?

>>42316937
kek

Help a Trixiefag out and recommend me some action/adventure fics of magichorse besides the Lunaverse fics

>>42318550
>Help a Trixiefag out
I don't have a shotgun on me though

>>42318550
She does some cool stuff in Behemoth, though mostly after the Crystal Empire battle IIRC.

>>42318550
I don't know what Lunaverse is but the Rariad (specifically this fic, not Myths) is standalone and mostly good if you enjoy ancient Greeks and/or Illiad. Not a perfect story and some of its arc don't feel very "pony", but if an idea of a greek fanfic doesn't sound too bad then I can recommend it:
www.fimfiction.net/story/358957/the-rariad

And it's a romance fic, not adventure, but I can't recommend any Trixfics without mentioning the Eyes on You. The final third part of the story is mostly an adventure arc, too.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/7531/eyes-on-you

Back to action/adventure, there are also Chasing Winter and The Moonstone Cup, but these are of less stellar quality. I didn't like it very much, but you should at least try Chasing Winter.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/98069/chasing-winter
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/3378/the-moonstone-cup

>>42318189
No, it's not shot. It's good, the problem is entirely with your taste.
You say it's haphazard, but I demonstrated several examples of the system being closely integrated to the plot.
You say it's random, but every school is derived from FiM. There are several schools centered on an emotion: almost all of the magic system shown in the show is centered on emotions. Love, hatred, friendship and anger all have episodes centered around them. Shield magic is the most completely rendered school in the story, and there are a lot of different kinds of shields in the show. Night and Day magic because the princesses are great, even if the show had not delivered on those at the time Archmage was written, it's just good fanfiction. It even manages to dedicate a whole story arc to the hammerspace magic that Rarity so often wields.

You are upset that the story's magic system is not a clean, artificial rule-based Minecraft construct, but there's no requirement that a magic system has to be that way. Magic in Archmage is organic, living and growing just like the shields it describes in Canterlot's caves.

>>42318550
Would you accept an adventure into lesbianism?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/5764/kindnesss-reward

Lunafag the type of imbecile to say The Moon Rises is a bad characterisation of Luna.

Congrats on the local slopmaker for making more slop. If people ITT were less faggy and pretentious and actually wrote stuff we could have better representation out there.
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/580007/dadwhacked

>>42318810
Due to your incessant faggotry, I will strip all references to this thread from my next fic.

Considering you faggots discuss story & dialogue all day long you should technically be good at discussing the TV Show better than others, right?

... right? you should also have better tastes than the average mlpfag, right?

>>42318818
Well, that's okay, it's no longer Pride Month after all.

>>42318831
Wrong, you fucking idiot. Literature and visual media are completely different languages. Learning to judge prose does not train you to appreciate direction, shot composition, voice acting, music, or anything else that goes into something like a show. This reductionist approach where every story is valued only in its writing is a plague upon the human understanding of art in the present day. You should be ashamed of yourself. Go watch a Hitchcock movie to atone for your lack of understanding and appreciation for narration through and with a visual medium in motion.

>>42318846
Good thing MLP FIM is a cheaply produced 2D flash show with the flattest composition and dullest atmosphere, voice acting and music possible, right? :^) you'd have to be a total fucking faggot to be incapable of analyzing a show for little girls or for that matter a book written for children such as Warrior Cats and Redwall all while yelling it's for adults.

Bats used to be bebreedable.

>>42318859
vogelfag... is that you?

>>42318874
If you couldn't tell from >>42318831, then I don't know what to tell you.

>>42318831
Whoah whoah don't ask these faggots for a story script or episode discussion, these faggots cannot write themselves out of a paperbag all while cursing at season 9. They're hypocrites of the highest degree.
These faggots have EQG and season 6 in their favourites. Do not trust these faggots with anything, they wouldn't be able to tell apart mature from childish dialogue if their virginity was on the line. They wouldn't be able to tell how to use sarcasm in an adult way if their manchild card was on the line. They suck their own dicks and don't read real books to save their life. They're as uneducated and inept at extracting proper info as the average drunkard pub-going retard and stoner hippy. They're about as good at analyzing an original story on their own without guidance as the average American community college geek or Mexican highschool drop out and Spanish elementary dropout.
Glimmer, Trixie, Derpy are their favourite ponies, that's how bad this place is.

These faggots cannot discuss prose, dialogue, story, characters to save their lives, just take a look at /lit/ nothing but rapping brownoids & niggers & ESLs.
Most people here are are ESL, they don't know shit about the English language and English behaviours.
These niggers would write you season 6 if they were in charge of the scripts.

>>42318882
Does he post in this general often? The last I saw of him was when he was talking about leaving /mlp/ forever

>>42318884
If you can't judge this place by their recommended stories then I don't know what to tell you.
Most people here have the average writing skills of Tamers12345.

>>42318810
Thanks.

>>42318884
Das some bretty gud bait, have a (You)

Whenever I'm writing a story based on a prompt I have the irrational fear I read the prompt wrong and am writing something completely off from what I should.

>>42318888
Checked! And yes, I'd say that he comes here at least every other month or so.

>>42318903
A prompt is merely the jet of spunk shooting into your brain-womb, where you gestate it into a fully-formed filly of a fic.

>>42318930
What's the fully formed colt of a fic

>>42318930
I think anon is more concerned about identifying who the father is and any congenital issues that could arise.

>>42318482
It's unusually difficult to make an account right now. Due to a surge in spam, normal account creation has been locked. To make an account, you have to go on Dicksword and message Knighty personally. He will probably ask you a question or two to see if you're a spammer (all you have to do is give a coherent response, because spammers tend to reply with utter nonsense), and then he'll make it for you.

>>42318859
I tried to read Redwall once. I didn't make it through chapter one. Maybe it's okay for the target audience, but the writing is terrible.

>>42318994
Well that's a shame, seeing as I'm banned from the fimmy dicksword. Guess I'll just post my filly smut on my main account.

>>42318994
Will the deluge of bots ever end?

>>42319028
Just make a new Discord. You can use the number trick on your email.

>>42318994
Oh darn. I actually plan on writing eventually (I have a fic from another fandom I told myself I'd finish first) and I don't want to tie my online identities together so I'll just spin up a new burner account to do that unless it's a temporary measure I can wait out.

>>42319056
Burner accounts are for pussies, I rawdog all my dicksword dealings. Only one T&S penalty so far!

>>42319028
>>42319056
Going through Knight is supposed to be a temporary measure until the new site update is complete (it's supposed to have additional anti-bot measures). There's no timeline for that, unfortunately, but Knighty does post screenshots which prove he's working on the site.

Got my clopfics and my slop
Just don't hope I write a flop

>>42319092
O Celestia, who art on the feature box,
Blessed be thy algorithm.
Got my clopfics and my slop,
Just don't hope I write a flop.

Deliver me from humanized trash,
For two legs are the devil’s path.
Let not the shadow of Equestria Girls fall upon me,
Nor the cursed “Anon in Ponyville” fic tempt my soul.

Grant me tags that do not mislead,
Cover art that deceives not,
And comments longer than just “nice.”

Give strength to knighty,
That he may one day update the site,
Or at least fix the search bar.
Though he walk through the valley of burnout,
We fear no mods,
For the downvote button is with us.

Forgive us our abandoned fics,
As we forgive those who write self-inserts.
Lead us not into spam groups,
But deliver us from Feature Bait.

For thine is the New section, the bookshelves,
And the eternal Top Rated.
Horsewords forever and ever,
Amen.

>>42318994
This really sucks for all the people without a discord account. Like, damn, authentication through a different service is never good, and especially when it's a service that doesn't let you register with burners.
Fuck those people, I guess. Should've registered earlier.

>>42319136
>a service that doesn't let you register with burners
skill issue

>>42319116
High effort post, good job <3

>>42318994
Wow, I thought it to be bad when I had to make a Protonmail account because my horsefucker.org email address was rejected.

Well just finished the Skyla Pseudonym and damn that was a fun series of Twilight (pirate)adventure books, which I really wouldn't have expected from reading The Celestia Code lmao. I guess I'll read the 8k meme sequel but I do wish there was more but considering it finished in 2017 my hopes aren't high.

At least we see real numbers now

>>42319085
>new site update
I eagerly await the new UI drama. Been a long time since we had some of that. Is he bringing back banners like he hinted four years ago so I don't have to use Fimfic Advanced?

>>42319457
banners are fucking bloat. how about updating some of the shitass code instead?

I wrote a pornographic Celestia/Anon/Luna fanfic with light BDSM elements and light romance over a decade ago. Randomly browsed /mlp/ and saw this thread, thought I'd drop it.

Also first time I've had an opportunity to use an MLP reaction image in 10 years

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/209449/celestia-and-anons-adventures-in-submission-and-dominance

>>42319507
>Anon
Absolutely disgusting.
Also, I've got your story marked as read and upvoted, but I don't remember anything about it.

>>42319512
Thanks senpai, gives me a little warm fuzzy to ping a random connection from the olden days

>>42319289
I’m a bit sus of it actually being that low. There was another period from late December 2024 to mid February 2025 when it also dropped but it wasn’t that low. It was average like 15 per day. I remember checking the new accounts during that time and most if not all of the ones that were not deleted looked like real accounts, and there were about that many real accounts added per day.

>>42319540
Also the user page is fucking busted. After the first three pages which are normal it’s all either blank or for some of them only showing one or two users.

>>42319546
The amount of users per page erratically goes up the further back and then it 500 internal server errors at page 417

>>42319564
For the life of me I can't understand why websites struggle to make a search function that actually works. I've run into non pony boorus that show an arbitrary number of images on each page. Fimfiction can't even give you proper results on your own user page, if you have enough stories and search by tag with default sorting you'll get the same stories multiple times across different pages.

Why do you always have to disappoint me /fic/? it's like you're doing it on purpose to be petty over how garbage you are. Do I look like your father?

>>42319898
I can't see your face, anon, so yes, exactly like him.

Gratz on the fitty, Fae.

>>42319546
>>42319564
Knighty knows about this and why it happens. He's been deleting suspected spambot accounts: Any account which has done nothing on the site except be registered and make one blog post is getting nuked. It takes the database quite a while to check that an account has done literally nothing else, so this purge has been going on for weeks and still isn't finished. He has talked about doing a more careful purge after this one is done. Anyway, he hasn't had the Elasticsearch backend rebuild its index yet, which is exactly why this funny behavior occurs.

>>42313257
> I think all of Daetrin's adventure fics are improvements on each other.
Just read Edge of the Map and Apotheosis. They were good and I definitely see Daetrin improving with each story. As you said, Edge of the Map was less polished than Apotheosis, but I still liked the former’s story better.

I think your sentiment about having super powerful characters ruining physical conflict scenes rings true even for Apotheosis. Normally I’d say even having main-characters that you know will survive also takes something away but Edge of the Map had me invested the whole time. Daetrin is amazing at writing characters that feel real.

>>42319999
And where did you get this information from?

How do I write from experience without incriminating myself?

>>42319942
Thanks. I like making Celestia's life fall apart.

>>42320244
Experience of what?

>>42320263
Incriminating himself.

>>42320244
Write from experience and after that just say you made it up.

>>42320274
Ah, the John Clancy method.

>>42320244
Just publish over tor

>>42320244
Art reflects the creator in one way or another. You can't put yourself into your work without putting yourself into your work. Crazy, I know.

>>42320244
>without incriminating myself?
Are you writing about the CMC getting kidnapped or something? Because there are already plenty of stories like that. Just say that you are very passionate about true crime if anyone presses you.

>>42320263

>>42320257
Why?

>>42320382
Cause she's kind of a fuckup already and that makes for a good source of drama. After all, both her personal relationships Sunset and Luna fell apart.

>>42320385
What about Blueblood?

>>42320676
What else needs to be said about him that hasn't already been said

>>42307523
An example of what images accompanying my fanfic retellings are gonna look like

>>42320796
Damn I can't beliefs they almost jesus crucified rainbob dash

You know, I was almost tempted to read this shit, but then realized it had Poochie Pie in it. Thank you, Sheldon Cumrag, for making me pause.

>>42320833
>Let's hope humor is enough to keep him sane.
Never seen a bigger red flag for an unfunny story

>>42320889
I have
>Human
>Romance

>>42320949
Every part of the image is a powerful red flag for funniness except the like ratio I suppose

>>42320966
Take away the human bonus then calculate, honestly.

>>42320833
Don't forget that one where anon is a baby that Celestia mommies and that one where "What if Twilight had a third sibling who was the Loki of them but it's a human also for some fucking reason"

Fics with bridges?

>>42321091

Don't do it!

...

Publish a fic first!

>>42321091
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/495958/the-bridge-over-the-river-why

>>42321175
Estee fics that aren't vehicles for ranting about life in a way that is entirely not befitting ponies?

>>42321186
I don't think Estee has written one of those that has a bridge in it.

>>42320676
So the kids she raised are either
>Went nuts and became a nightmare god
>Ran away, took over a school, and became a nightmare god
>Is a spoiled bratty bitch boy
>Is Cadence

>>42321251
Don't forget Twilight.

>>42321281
I mean Twilight has visible living parents.

>>42318810
>Hype Sombra up as evil
>Isn't evil at all
Lame

>>42321477
Divorce makes fools of us all.

Fics that don’t cite their sources?

>>42320203
By reading #site-help-and-dev on the Fimfic Dicksword. You could get this rich, creamy, delicious information yourself if you're willing to deepthroat a Dicksword.

>>42321548
See >>42319028

If you had a gun to your head and were forced to write an HiE story how would you go about it?

>>42321614
I'd write about everyone's favorite Austrian painter and his seduction of Celestia.

>>42321614
Transformation into an actual character and it's never brought up again after chapter 1
Or humans are ancient and extinct and pony archaeologists mine their fossilized blood for gravy.

>>42321618
I bet this has already been done. I once read a fic where Hitler meets Celestia, and there are probably others like it.

>>42321563
See >>42006928.

>>42321618
Only if he convinces her to enact a final solution to the Griffon question.

>>42321614
Crossover with something I like so I have an actual character to work with and can dodge the whole crossing reality and fiction issue that plagues most HiE.

>>42321614
I'd make it one of the April Fools shitpost stories that are written bad on purpose.

>>42321689
See >>40605813

>>42321614
Mall Ninja in Equestria. A stereotypical loser goes to Equestria but the portal fuckery makes all of his cringe real, so he really does become a badass with a katana. I also thought it might be funnier as a green but realistically I'm never gonna write it either way.

>>42321699
You're allowed to invent real characters of your own, and I'm pretty sure most HiE stories treat both worlds as real even if MLP existed in the human world.
Honestly I place the Crossover tag far below the Human tag.

>>42321707
That's just Kai Leng from Mass Effect.

>>42321721
Some crossovers can be fun. Just don't shit out something like "What if Twilight was in Skyrim"

>>42321780
>I used to be an alicorn like you. Then I took an arrow to the wing.

>>42321782
>My cousin's out fucking Celestia and what do I get? Guard duty.

>>42321787
I thought "guard duty" was just a euphemism for fucking Celestia.

I remain entirely convinced of the notion that no one on this thread actually ever wrote anything
Instead, all works of mlp fanfiction simply sprout from the earth indiscriminately into the fimfiction servers as I scroll through the twilestia group in search of fluff
As I keep to my quest towards further discoveries attending to equine-ladden entertainment, the cosmos proceeds to lie down and grant me evermore twilight sparkle containing written ouevres lest I become morose in my wandering pursuit

>>42321809
No, that's lard duty.

>>42321812
If it helps, I'm really struggling with this fic. "Of course I can write a thousand words," I said. Might not make the deadline with this one. I'm going too slow.

>>42321809
Well extrapolating from known statistics being a guard makes you most likely to fuck a princess.

>>42321837
You'd think they'd screen out those with less than pure intentions.

>>42321838
Oh anon, the fucking comes from the top.

>>42321838
The princesses screen specifically for that purity. Those poor innocent wide-eyed recruits who have only ever viewed Celestia as a motherly goddess are often in for a rude awakening come spring. The palace basically turns into a fucking horror movie, with them getting picked off one by one. It's gotten even worse since poor lonely Luna got back, and we're just lucky that Twilight's castle doesn't have any guards and that Shining Armor's got that Sparkle family endurance.

>>42321853
Where's your fic exploring this?

>>42321853
That's kinda cruel.

>>42321855
Sheesh. Get off my damn back, I'm not a princess. I'll do it right after I write Luna seducing the pony grim reaper into getting her pregnant, alright?

>>42321863
I suppose if you're playing matchmaker, it's ideal to pair Death with the pony who's dead inside.

>>42321861
Even immortals have needs, anon. So unless you've found a strapping male alicorn then I'm afraid the bright eyed freshmen guards who were too stupid to get into to college have to have their virtue sacrificed on the altar that is Celestia's bed. At least Luna likes to cuddle afterwards and read them poetry.

>>42321520
Any AI fic.

>>42321867
I want to read poetry with Luna.

>>42321614
A human wizard becomes friends with some ponies in a nearby village and they go on adventures and have life experiences together or something.

>>42322009
Are you a wide-eyed virgin night guard curious about the new princess of the night in an actual honest-to-princess platonic way? Did your mother always make you bow to the little painted Celestia on the mantle everyday before school? Are you okay with eye contact during sex?

Will you be the one that stays for once?

>>42322033
>Did your mother always make you bow to the little painted Celestia on the mantle everyday before school?
Awful headcanon. No emperor worship/imperial cults and in equestria.

>>42322063
Application rejected. Maybe the crystal guard will take you so you can watch.

>>42321866
Death is a good guy, he's just a workaholic and need to learn to relax.

>>42321091
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/473744/the-pony-of-the-mackinac-bridge

>>42322009
There once was a virginal guardsmare,
whose morals and manners were too square.
Her princess was hot;
she turned gay on the spot,
and licked her in public with fanfare.

>>42322205
Luna, dear, i think we'll have to hold on to this one, no need to publish it...

>>42322214
>some nefarious villain breaks into the royal library's restricted section in search of forbidden spells
>finds nothing but the princesses' clopfics

>>42322247
Those ARE the spellbooks

>>42319495
>banners are fucking bloat
Banners are insanely comfy, anon. Knighty's constant stripping of the site of its identity into Genfic, which was then stillborn, was the worst UI decision he's made.

>>42321091
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/530883/at-the-bridge-of-equinox
>tfw fillyanon is too busy with work to shill his own fics anymore

>>42321614
Sci-fi first contact, with humanity in the role of the advanced aliens. If you're forcing a "classic" plot, I'd do the comedy idea I had where anon repeatedly tries to kill himself because the ponies don't have genitals, but the setting does a reverse Final Destination and implements convoluted Rube Goldberg devices that not only stop his suicide attempts, but make them look completely innocuous to the innocent and naive ponies.

>>42322282
>I'd do the comedy idea I had where anon repeatedly tries to kill himself because the ponies don't have genitals, but the setting does a reverse Final Destination and implements convoluted Rube Goldberg devices that not only stop his suicide attempts, but make them look completely innocuous to the innocent and naive ponies.
Kino. I wish the AiE threads weren't dead

>>42321677
there's one where hitler meets aryanne and they reconcile their opposing ideas of racial superiority the /pol/ way
>>42321707
there are a few that fit the first part of a neckbeard going to equestria but i can only recall a prompt for him actually being badass
>>42322019
overdone
>>42322282
the first idea is way overdone but the second has potential

up

>*Hires /fimfic/ for 2 pizzas a day to write me a show accurate fanfic*
How do you faggots do?

>>42322634
>2 pizzas a day
>Not even letting us pick the toppings
I purposely include that anthro and HiE is actually canon like the G1 series.

>H'ven Sent in the feature bar
>wasn't that finished years ago?
>author added a new appendix chapter
Neat.

>>42322638
1 pizza a day it is then and no soda >:) only water.
Fine I guess you can make your own pizza half & half toppings.

>>42322634
None of the faggots here can write a show accurate episodes to save their lives.
None of these faggots here have actually read books
Show accurate would you mean you have to copy Renzetti & Faust's style, vocabulary, line of thinking, characters 100% and these autists here haven't talked to a human being in their lives.

>>42318500
>It's not
I'm about 3/4ths through now and unless the ending drops the ball completely somehow (don't spoil me though), you're objectively wrong.
I'll report back probably this evening or tomorrow with the verdict.

>>42322649
>these autists here
Found the biggest autismo

>>42322662
It has the advantage of being a competently written fic which is more than most stories on the site can say, but it's entirely just okay and that's if you can get past le cool edge grimderpness in the first place. The other fic recommended in that post is better by a mile. If you think Monsters is amazing I'm sorry to say you must have been reading mostly garbage so far. Feel free to look at the various club discussions for it to see what other people had to think; I'm pretty sure "good but not amazing" was the common opinion all throughout.

>>42322668
The club is gay because every time I stumble upon a discussion for it, half the time nobody even links the fic they're talking about so I end up skipping a dozen walls of text.

As for Monsters, maybe I just really have a soft spot for bat ponies and NMM in general. I'm a NMM enjoyer so with the initial setup I fully expected to sympathise with the cultists - if you've ever played EaW even a bit, I think the chiropterrans are extremely based for example - but the fic has really done an amazing job of driving home how NMM was really a force of evil, without either cheapening Luna as a character nor being preachy.
The idea of bats being soulbound in service to Luna also pushes just the right autistic buttons for me.
And I think the characters are great, Page is a cutie.

Like I said I haven't read through the ending parts yet so there's still potential for it to drop the ball, but so far it's not only competently written but has a plot I'm really enjoying and excellent characters.
>le cool edge grimderpness
I'm not usually big on this but honestly I do think it works in the setting. In canon, we know almost nothing about NMM, her reign, and the early years of Celestia running Equestria alone. Well except the S4 battle which is so utterly anticlimactic I don't think it's worth taking as gospel. I think it's quite plausible for NMM to have been a terrible evil and for Equestria to have been left in shambles and over the next thousand years Celestia gradually established her near-utopic rule to bring about the nice, calm, colourful Equestria we see in the show.

>the other fic linked
If you say so I'll give it a read, but it's only 9000 words and I'm squarely in the camp of people who prefer fics that have a proper fleshed out world, characters you get to know over time, etc. rather than quickie shorts.
Not that it would make the story bad but I'm just probably not going to remember it as amazing even if I enjoy it. Anyway I'll report back with what I think.

>I'm sorry to say you must have bee nreading mostly garbage so far
I've read a bunch of things over the years, only some of which I found to be excellent, but I'm bad at keeping lists especially of things I've read 5-8+ years ago, however great.
Off the top of my head, and trying to parse my Downloads folder for reminders, some favourites I could list would be DOWAS, A Once and Future Darkness as the sole short story probably, Pirene, Daetrin's adventure quadrilogy, and Hinterlands. Feel free to judge.
Right now I'd probably tentatively put Monsters up there, or at least close. Though of course that's not yet certain firstly because I haven't finished it yet and secondly because it's also very fresh in my mind, so it remains to be seen if I'll still be thinking back to it this fondly in a few months - but I wouldn't be surprised if I do.

>>42322696
>every time I stumble upon a discussion for it, half the time nobody even links the fic they're talking about
Skill issue on your part, but mostly a problem with the inferior club.
>if you've ever played EaW
That does no favours to your reputation or that of the quality of what you've read so far.
>I do think it works in the setting
Yes, anon, clearly power armour, mutilation, and foal punting all perfectly fit FiM like a glove.
>it's only 9000 words
You must have the wrong post in mind because I'm talking about a 160k fic.
>A Once and Future Darkness
Yeah you just kind of have questionable taste / an aptitude to not be bothered by ponies getting gratuitously gored.
To be clear I think Monsters is overall a good fic; I wouldn't have recommended it otherwise. But it's really not as amazing as some people claim.
Hopefully someone else links the club posts because I'm too lazy to search for them since the Rarafag doesn't add links so he can fit more of his huge throbbing wordcount in the posts themselves, presumably.

>>42322719
This is the post I'm talking about >>42314189 And it links Love Thyself. I just noticed it also mentions MCA, I'm assuming that's what you actually meant then, I just forgot because it's not linked and I didn't recognise the acronym at first.

>Skill issue on your part
I mean fair but also I just don't like reading on a schedule plus the book club somehow started during a few months when I wasn't lurking /fimfic/, so I never bothered to join, and so it's not really my problem if the conversations are impossible to follow.
>Hopefully someone else links the club posts
To be fair, for what purpose? I'm happy to discuss the fic I'm reading with anyone who wants to, but I don't see the point in just going back to read a bunch of archive posts on my own.

>[EaW] does no favours to your reputation
I never said it had good writing. What do the games I play have to do with my taste in literature? I'm not even an HoI autist, I've played it a few times with friends and happen to know enough of the lore to like Chiropterra. But again I think that's neither here nor there.

>power armour
Honestly that part of the story was a bit out of place, I agree. Doesn't really fit with much of anything else. But it's also a minor enough plot element, they could very easily and equivalently have just been heavily armoured elite troops - which in fact they are - and the story would be the exact same, if you just redact a few mentions of the "magical gears" or whatever inside the armour.

>mutilation, foal punting
In the darkest stain on Equestria's history, yeah, why not? Is your only criticism that it wouldn't fit in the show? I'm fine with not following the show's themes when it's set literally 980 years prior to it, and I don't see an issue with an AU that explores the catastrophy that happened when literally one of the two (demi?)goddesses ruling the country went completely insane, and the effort it took to rebuild a normal country afterwards.

If you only limit yourself to themes that are consistent with the show, you end up with a very narrow set of possible fics and themes. For example you automatically disqualify all sci-fi since there's none of that in canon Equestria. MCA is set in a war and tagged [Gore], [Violence], [Death] - is that really consistent with FiM? Yes the crystal war is canon, but just like NMM in canon, in the show depiction the soldiers are slapping each other. A real war with its death and horror fits FiM as little as the Longest Night does, if you want to be show-accurate.

>A Once and Future Darkness
>Yeah you just kind of have questionable taste / an aptitude to not be bothered by ponies getting gratuitously gored.
You know, I think the common theme between these two is actually Luna going insane in both. Huh.
That said this is just one example out of the 5 favourites I brought up (7, if you count the Daetrin stories individually). I'm not particularly seeking out gory fics or anything.

Why is using grit as the past form of grit such a common error?

>>42322825
I grat my teeth at this post.

>>42322841
*grot

>>42322747
I did mean MCA, yeah.
>it's not really my problem if the conversations are impossible to follow
It kind of literally is. This is like saying it's not your problem if the stairs are impossible to climb, as you see people doing as much. Literal sour grapes.
>for what purpose?
Because the posts I made with my thoughts as I was actively reading through the fic are significantly more valuable than the ones I can make months later only based on my memories of it. It sounds like you care more about engaging with people than about the inherent worth of a discussion. That's a bad way to live.
>What do the games I play have to do with my taste in literature?
All writing looks the same on paper, anon. All writing is judged by the same metre across all media.
>Is your only criticism that it wouldn't fit in the show?
No, anon, I'm actually rather fine with those elements being in the fic too (which you'd know if you read the discussion posts), I was actually arguing against the specific mention you made of things fitting. Is it an autistic and nitpicky complaint that's more focused on the discussion itself than on the actual topic of it? Yeah, welcome to fucking 4chan.
>I think the common theme between these two is actually Luna going insane
Fair enough, mind break / corruption is a kino fetish.

>>42322747
>it's not really my problem if the conversations are impossible to follow
The real problem is your skill issue
>I don't see the point in just going back to read a bunch of archive posts on my own.
I'm going to assume that's also a skill issue and spoonfeed you:
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>>40324133
On the whole, I was more positive than negative about Monsters, but it wasn't without awkward, grimderp moments. The foal punting scene was particularly egregious.

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>>42322841
I know you're making a joke but you're also highlighting how the error is so deeply ingrained in people that you feel like turning it into this joke while actually no, anon is right, people use 'grit' but it's actually 'gritted'.

>>42323130
Well, yeah, but I'm never going to let knowing the right answer get in the way of acting like a retard on the internet.

I like fics about trains

Is it worth trying to become a Fimfic hotshot in this day and age?

>>42323323
Yes.

>>42323323
Do you want your legacy to be HiE?

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>>42322649
If you wrote a perfectly "show accurate fic" it would probably be awkward to read since a lot of the charm of the show relies on things that don't translate well to prose, like the VAs' line delivery or the cartoony visual gags. You can still write a good fic that's true to the spirit of the world and characters and emotionally resonant with the themes of the series but I think trying to replicate the exact style of a TV show in prose is a fool's errand. They're different mediums.

>>42323470
I was thinking more the adoption pill

>>42319178
The only worthwhile chapters from that anthology sequel are the first and last, and there's half a good scene in Judgement, but it's mostly dumb.
Yeah, I can't imagine a real sequel could be good. Even Skyla was a huge 180 from the series' trend (in the right direction, the powerlevel reset was necessary) and it was still full of issues.
What even happened to the whole idea that Equestria prime was locked down? They're opening portals back pretty easily, and even leaving behind a whole manufacturing pipeline to make more and extract nearly all remaining unicorns from that AU. There was also stuff like Twilight's healing factor randomly changing from chapter to chapter, etc.

The Skyla fic was best when it was Twilight and her favorite noodle. It really turned Ao into an excellent character and I really enjoyed how much history the story put into their friendship. Flurry and her crew only needed to be not bad, and they were not bad, so the fic was OK.

The setup for the next story is Half-Life 3 levels of raising the stakes and scope. Kinda hard to imagine it being the pirate adventures kino that the previous stories all are good at. Twilight's duel with herself was good, but that kind of thing is a lot harder to do well, and it would be especially harder to do tons more of that well. I already didn't particularly like that one instance of AU Ponicemare Twilight showing up to enforce the game rules if that's an indication of how the "Brights" are going to act.

>>42323323
Trying to become popular with almost anything else would be a better waste of your time.

>>42323641
But I don't want to be popular with something else, I want to be popular with pony

>>42323323
If you have a story to write, write it.

>>42323688
Finish it. People who abandon stories are basically subhuman and probably like Rarity.

>>42323689
It's true.

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