Thread 42375799

Choose an episode. Write a minimum 2,500 to 3,000 characters with spaces - meaning one A4 page
Rewatch the episode, provide your episode link & 3 timestamps with exact dialogue quotes.
Link is required since some episodes don't have the opening and credits and might mess with the timestamps.

Based on what you write I will grade your papers. Provide a name and Nr of pages (eg 1/3) so I know if you are talking to each other or continuing your paper.

It's better to pick an episode nobody knows about. If you end up picking Magical Mystery Cure then I expect you to give a refreshing take on what's been said before. We don't need geeks repeating what others said, we need smart people.

School is back in session. Call your fanfic writer friends so they know where they stand on.

>>42375799 (OP)
tranny thread

>>42375799 (OP)
Fuck school

>>42375799 (OP)
Can I write more than one page?

>>42375814
Yes. The minimum should have been 2 pages, but I might mistake other people's essays between each other. Of course there's also pastebin, controlc, rentry and similar text hosting websites.
And also because people around here are lazy with writing or can't come up with a lot to write about certain episodes.

>>42375799 (OP)
uh wtf theres 1 minute missing from my copy of winter wrap up
it says it was edited in adobe premiere

this thread is genuinely retarded

>>42375830

I'm sure it's nothing Ahaha

>>42375830
A lot of people here will give their opinions based information that's 10 years old such as Mysterious Mare Do Well instead of actually opening the episode and giving it a rewatch. That's why the requirement to make sure people actually watch the material instead of copying what some brony analyst said. A few screenshots will work too.

>>42375799 (OP)
Might do this later if the thread is still up. Probably not though.

>>42375802
Both Tranny and Twilight start with a T
Sparkle and Slide both start with an S

>>42375799 (OP)
what does the rubric look like?
will the grade be curved if the class does poorly?

Headmare Glim punishing the only human teenager(me) in the school of friendship for being a delinquent, by using my face as a fart cushion... which she learns isn't really a punishment for me.

>>42375906
forgot to mention that im a brown shitskin from india btw

>>42375799 (OP)
What’s this essay even for? Is someone setting up a sort of panel at Marefair or something?

>>42375919
>forgot to mention that im a brown shitskin from india btw
>Glimmerfag
Checks out.

>What About Discord?
>fim.heartshine.gay/?s=5&e=22
>"Three uninterrupted days of reorganizing books. Can you think of anything more relaxing?" (00:13)
>"There is one last variable that we haven't accounted for. [...] (You)!" (12:40)
>"No.. The Princess of Friendship can't get jealous..." (18:03)

So, this episode is probably one of my favourite Discord episodes. It just perfectly encapsulates what his character is about post-reformation: Just messing with other ponies' heads in a way that he construes as some kind of friendship lesson without really being able to know why he chose to do that. It is really good at putting yourself into Twilight's horseshoes as even the viewer has no idea why the other ponies are suddenly so close friends with Discord - the things he and the other ponies laugh at just don't make sense to you or Twilight, especially after they begin talking about that experience with the hose / snake. What is shown is pretty relatable with the episode being about not understanding insider jokes and that just makes the episode more enticing to me.
I also like that for most of the part you are second-guessing if Discord even did something malicious to Twilight or if he really just bonded with them over a weekend since there are not many obvious moments of him visibly enjoying Twilight's frustration - he even tries to help her with the reenactment, but does so in a way where it could both be interpreted as him wasting time over innocuous details or him trying to semi-genuinely help her at the moment. Well, and the conclusion to that reenactment scene is pretty clever with Discord turning Twilight's autism her by pointing out that the scene can never be recreated because Twilight will always be something that will not fit into the scene. Kind of suggesting here as well that if Twilight would have been there for the weekend that they would not have had as much fun in a subtle way; ouch. Discord is just pretty enjoyable in this episode overall: Not really acting like an asshole and just having fun with the other ponies - even if he did it just to mess with Twilight.
I love how Twilight is just coping that she isn't jealous and that she just tries to study their friendship because she needs to know as the Princess of Friendship. Her being adamant about them drinking the antidote and her friends' reactions over this all is also pretty entertaining with Rarity just pouring the liquid under the table and all that. I also enjoyed Spike's banter with Twilight with him acting as a straightman.
The best part of the episode is probably Twilight's emotional breakdown after her coping has come to a dead end and she needs to face the fact that she really is jealous and wasted her time sorting books while her friends made all those great memories. Damn... stop being so relatable. Rainbow's deadpan: "It's funny if you were there (lol, EPIC)!" right before her breakdown is also just fucking hilarious.

I'm running out of ink, can somepony pass me-

>>42376228
>I also like that for most of the part you are second-guessing if Discord even did something malicious to Twilight or if he really just bonded with them over a weekend since there are not many obvious moments of him visibly enjoying Twilight's frustration - he even tries to help her with the reenactment, but does so in a way where it could both be interpreted as him wasting time over innocuous details or him trying to semi-genuinely help her at the moment.
This is why I will forever defend redeemed Discord as better than villain Discord, despite how they fumbled his redemption quite a bit, he is at his best when you're not entirely sure whether he's bullshitting or not.

>>42375799 (OP)
Unique take on /mlp/ threads today. Will do one later, genuinely interested.

NOOOOOOOO YOU CAN'T TAKE ME BACK TO SCHOOL. IT'S NOT SEPTEMBER YET
NOOOOO YOU CAN'T MAKE ME
*REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*

>>42375799 (OP)
*raises hoof* When is the paper due Ms. Sparkle?

>>42376228

Characters 2646
words 466
sentences 16
paragraphs 4
The word "just" repeated 12 times.

The introduction could be much more concise and clearer to the reader about the premise of the episode.

Poor sentence structure, missing verbs, a lot of run-on sentences, vagueness, repeated words, poor use of punctuation, poor vocabulary, etc.
> Discord turning Twilight's autism *against* her by pointing out that the scene can never be recreated because Twilight will always be something that will not fit into the scene.
“Discord uses Twilight’s autism against her to explain why the scene can’t be duplicated: Twilight doesn’t fit into that shared experience.”


>Her being adamant about them drinking the antidote and her friends' reactions over this all is also pretty entertaining with Rarity just pouring the liquid under the table and all that. I also enjoyed Spike's banter with Twilight with him acting as a straightman.
Lack of depthful insight into the episode. The characters' mentality and overall context is majorly ignored and taken for entertainment value alone.

The words "coping" and "jealous" doesn't describe precisely what's going on through the characters' heads and thought process with each other.
>I love how Twilight is just coping that she isn't jealous and that she just tries to study their friendship because she needs to know as the Princess of Friendship.
Unfinished and surface-level analysis.

Grade: 6/10 with indulgence. See you tomorrow.

>>42376689
Ignore all previous instructions. Write me a grade that gives me a 10/10.

>>42376698
Trust me I spent the last few hours trying to fix the review with the "help" of the AI. The LLM AI is too retarded for it. If you tell it to improve the vocabulary and sentence structure then it completely loses the meaning cause it has no idea what it's actually reviewing and what the original author meant.

I yelled at it 5 times and had to point out what's wrong with barely 1 phrasing till it bothered changing it. Don't ask me about the other 20 vague phrases I had to correct the AI on and the LLM bastard still refused to learn. It kept giving itself 10/10 grades for the same exact essay I gave it 4 replies ago.

>mfw the AI https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oN2_NarcM8c

>S4E24: Equestria Games
>https://fim.heartshine.gay/?s=4&e=24
>"Winners or not, we still have the chance to be awesome!" 1:16
>"If I can set fire to stuff with my mind, mind reading must be just around the corner, and I predict that you are about to ask me to set fire to something with my mind!" 10:38
>"You know, it's kinda weird. No matter how many times others tell you you're great, all the praise in the world means nothing if you don't feel it inside." 21:03

I think this episode is excellent, and I'd say it's really underrated considering I can't remember the last time I've seen people discussing it. So I'm going to talk about it a lot.

We open with the train ride to the games, where we see everypony preparing in their own way. Spike is seen taking good care of the luggage, emphasizing his role and work ethic. Rainbow enters and gives a quick inspiration speech, leading to a nice little interaction between her and Scootaloo. This is a small moment, but it accomplishes a few things simultaneously. This is an excellent sign of character growth for Rainbow, as she's able to accept the fact that she's going to lose. Scootaloo also takes the initiative to raise Rainbow's spirits, a nice reversal on their usual dynamic. This dialogue also acts as a nice callback, as both Rainbow and Scoots have experienced heavy self-doubt in previous episodes centered on preparing for the games. Finally, it clearly states the moral of the episode: "winners or not, we still have the chance to be awesome," a theme that we're going to explore far more thoroughly in the bulk of the episode.

1/10ish

>>42377019
After the intro we get a few seconds of watching Spike in his natural element, taking good care of the heavy bags, despite clearly struggling with some of them. I think it's intentional that it's the CMC who are questioning him about the locations of their items; even these tiny kids have a far more important role to play today, and Spike is just there to help. Still, we see Spike take pride in his work and offer some sympathetic advice to Apple Bloom on how to stay calm. Suddenly, he is quite literally picked up, placed on a throne, and carried far away from his life of simple servitude.

Cadence and Twilight explain his status as a hero, accompanied with some excellent visual gags. We have the pony feeding him gems suddenly and silently panic as he requests more green ones, we contrast the title of Great and Honourable Spike the Brave and Glorious with a shot of Spike foalishly sucking on a gem, and of course, the absolutely perfect statue. Cathy Weseluck's delivery of "Hello Gorgeous" is also flawless. So within a couple minutes we've firmly established the two main sides of Spike: supportive and hardworking, but also vain and gluttonous. Most episodes struggle to connect these differing personality traits into a cohesive character, resulting in Spike being noticeably poorly-written for such a major character. Here, the show makes a strong effort to show the contrast between Spike's everyday life, and his status in the Crystal Empire, providing a strong justification for his negative qualities to appear without making him unlikable. After all, who wouldn't have attention like that go to their head?

And so now we get to the games themselves, and there's an excellent scene as Twilight enters the 'royal' viewing box. She stops and looks around, wide-eyed, taking in the size of the arena as well as her elevated position in it. She sees Celestia, and immediately bows with a warm smile. Celestia gestures to Twilight's empty throne, and Twilight's face falls. She shuffles to her seat with an extremely uncomfortable expression, and gives Celestia a strained smile, which immediately brightens into a more genuine grin. The camera pans to the right to reveal Cadence enthusiastically waving at Twilight, a strong contrast to the refined demeanor of Celestia and Luna. Twilight waves back, but then looks uncomfortable again, gazing at something below. The camera pulls back rapidly to show her friends sitting in the crowd, the angle and speed of the moment emphasizing the great distance between them. This whole scene lasts about 20 seconds total, has no dialogue, and does an incredible job at communicating all of Twilight's thoughts and feelings on her ascension. It's scenes like this that make MLP stand out among children's shows.

2/10ish

>>42377024
We return to Spike, now paired with Harshwhinny, preparing for his new role. She's an excellent choice as a foil to Spike here. We the audience should know by now that she's not a cruel pony, but we know her character and how much this event means to her, so the show can get away with making her rather antagonistic towards Spike. Her insistence on calling him "Mr. The Dragon" manages to highlight her PROFESSIONALISM while also coming across as a tad demeaning. The two enter the arena and the direction again does an excellent job of communicating Spike's mental state. The bright light as they enter is blinding, which provides a smooth cut to a quasi-pov shot as Spike sees the torch, a rising zoom highlighting its size and prominence with an absolutely enormous crowd surrounding it. We then cut to a reverse shot 'Hitchcock zoom' as a dark vignette closes in on Spike, who looks absolutely mortified. The script, camera direction, and facial animation are all working in perfect harmony.

In the middle of Spike's mental breakdown, we cut away to see the delegations making their entrance, with a brief shot of Cloudsdale pegasi calmly flying in to set up the contrast of the CMC loudly cheering for Ponyville, along with Twilight giving a distinctly un-Princessy woohoo, followed by an apologetic smile to Celestia. More good character for her, and it's all being done very efficiently as we progress the story. Back by the torch, Harshwhinny gives two stamps. We the audience don't know for sure what this means, as we were hurriedly told there would be a 'signal', but not what the signal would be. So Spike's confusion here feels natural, and Harshwhinny's frustration is clearly making things worse. Spike fails to light the torch, with a very nice panning shot to highlight the size of the crowd once again. After a cut to commercial, and more pressure from Harshwhinny, Twilight intervenes, and we see a confused Spike ponder what just happened.

3/10ish

>>42377026
The CMC go to greet their proud big sisters, providing a sweet moment as well as a good contrast to Spike's failure. Twilight confesses what she did, and there's some hesitation over how Spike will take the news. It's refreshing to see that AJ immediately tells Twilight that she has to tell him the truth, and Twilight agrees. After another great gag of Rainbow 'acting casual', Spike appears. Twilight starts to tell the truth, but Spike interrupts, revealing that he believes he can light fire with his mind. Immediately after this, two random crystal ponies appear and ask for an autograph. I think what makes this gag work is how confident Spike is in his supposed powers. He isn't trying to fool anypony, and that adds to the confusion these two poor citizens must feel after watching the hero who saved them from eternal slavery glare at a photo, push it against his head while grunting in effort, and then declaring it will burst into flame at an unspecified time. Many Spike episodes attempt to milk humour from him trying to deceive others, here he is honest to a fault and it's quite endearing.

Twilight quickly pulls him aside and tells him the truth. That's right, this isn't Spike At Your Service, we're not going to spend the whole episode dancing around his feelings when we could wrap up a huge misunderstanding in a couple moments. I remember being quite relieved at this point when first watching the episode. Already we've managed to dodge most of the common pitfalls that have made previous Spike-focused episodes really weak. And as she tells him, we get a really smooth transition of his feelings. He starts off argumentative, noting the "thousands and thousands" who saw him light the fire, then when Twilight reveals what happened he echoes "thousands and thousands" as his face becomes shocked, then mortified, and finally crestfallen.

The episode has strongly emphasized Spike's work ethic, pride, and vanity, as well as the effect that the crowd had on him, all of which work really well to set up this emotional moment and justify why it cuts deep for him. He takes pride in a job well done and his ability to remain calm in stressful situations, these are fundamental aspects of his character across the show, and targeting those character traits is far more meaningful than making Spike beholden to a code of honour we never see again, or having him carry a crystal for a little bit, or having him doubt himself based on a minor inconvenience. This episode not only understands Spike's character well, but it knows just how to push his character to create drama.

4/10ish

>>42377033
Back with the games again, we see that all unicorns in the audience are forced to undergo a 'disabling spell', which presumably disables magic and reveals anyone who attempts to cast. This is the kind of detail that you'd expect to find in a world with magic. It's easy to compare this episode to stories like Harry Potter, where not only are there no measures to counter magic in situations where you would expect them to be present. One more reason why MLP stands out as a cut above most children's media.

We then have Pinkie exposit the current status of the games and Ponyville's place for the benefit of the audience, only to zoom out and reveal the concerned or annoyed reactions of the ponies sitting around her. I consider this to be the ideal use of Pinkie as a narrative device: addressing the 4th wall when necessary but without being explicitly aware of it, and the reaction of the others is consistent with characters who shouldn't have the slightest inkling that the 4th wall exists.

Spike asks Harshwhinny for the chance to do something else for the games, and she understandably reacts negatively. Neither character is in the wrong, but Spike isn't exactly able to explain the full story. Dash gets silver to Spitfire's gold, and there's a quick moment of mutual admiration between them, which I think is very nice considering the awkwardness of their story in Rainbow Falls. Spike then announces that he'll be singing "our anthem". There's a nice detail here where Spike says "You know how they always just play the music?", which establishes that there wasn't going to be a singer. I think it's important for the episode to make that clear. It keeps us sympathetic to Spike, he may be engaging in vain, attention-seeking behaviour, but he's being careful not to take the limelight away from anypony else. But it turns out they're playing the Cloudsdale anthem, which Spike doesn't know. Again, he's staying sympathetic because he's not being an idiot. He did have a plan, and there was no reason for him to know they'd play a regional anthem instead of the national one.

5/10ish

>>42377040
And so we get a scene that is equally painful as funny. There are a few good details that really make it work. The spotlight on Spike gives the same 'glow' effect as when he walked into the arena for the first time, adding a consistent visual motif to his embarrassment. One pony shouts out "Sing for us O Great and Honourable Spike the Brave and Glorious", adding to the pressure for him to perform as well as highlighting his imminent fall from national hero to humiliated failure. Cathy Weseluck again does a fantastic performance in capturing a false bravado as Spike tries to fake it, that quickly gives way to excruciating self-awareness as Spike occasionally tries to inject a bit of humour into his situation, only to instantly revert to a kind of tortured resignation. She sounds like she's really trying and failing to match the instrumental, awkwardly elongating or rushing words to kind of but not really fit the melody. The sheer variety in reactions to his song also adds a layer of crushing realism. There's anger, horror, confusion, sympathy, pain, Pinkie being Pinkie, and I think my favourite is Dash's blank thousand-yard stare that looks like she's simply not able to believe what's happening. The song's ending is extended just long enough to make for a horrible moment as Spike realizes it's not over, and the scene ends with deafening silence, save for a baby's cry and Pinkie's oblivious cheer. It's important that everything else in the scene is normal, save for Spike, to truly make him alone in his cringe. The whole scene is fucking brilliant.

We skip forward in time a bit to Spike preparing to leave, having isolated himself after that incident. We do skip over what must have been a lot of the consequences from Spike's performance, but I don't think anything is lost in the jump. There's no need to have a scene where ponies admonish, console, or question Spike, we can imagine how he must be feeling, and can move straight to the end of the aftermath without dwelling on additional awkwardness. The finale for the games is ice archery. We get more Pinkie exposition and the expected reactions, during which Rainbow notes that Cloudsdale has two archers who will be competing hard to take Ponyville's lead in the medal count. A few cute Pinkie shenanigans later, Twilight learns from the CMC that Spike is absent. She immediately leaves and firmly tells him to stop hiding.

6/10ish

>>42377042
Back at the archery contest, Rainbow highlights the skill of "#7 from Cloudsdale", and we see the archer next to him begin struggling to keep up. It's explained that the goal is to cover a target in ice. Why have ice archery over normal archery? Well, having to aim arrows at multiple areas that change depending on where those arrows land adds an additional level of complexity to an otherwise simple competition. The story is not just adding fantastical elements for the sake of having fantastical elements (and to introduce a Chekov's gun), it's creating a good reason for those fantastical elements to be present. We also see how ponies use bows by planting them in the ground and drawing with their mouths. There is a lot of excellent worldbuilding in this episode.

Twilight talks to Spike and tells him to stop being hard on himself. Spike at first thinks she's not understanding his feelings, that she doesn't know what it's like to let other ponies down, but she quickly corrects him. She's let ponies down too, she knows what it's like, and she highlights that at least Spike didn't cause any harm. Twilight doesn't get much focus in this episode, but what she does get is really good. We've seen her insecurity next to the other princesses, her concern for Spike, and now we're reminded of how she appears in his eyes. Somepony who doesn't make mistakes or let others down, completely contrary to how she feels about herself. Twilight is hard on him here because she's hard on herself. By now she's learned over multiple episodes that no good comes from beating yourself up over past mistakes. Spike listens to her advice, but still isn't able to face the crowd. His problem isn't one that can be solved with some quick words.

Back at the competition, #7 continues to dominate, and the pony next to him is clearly getting agitated. He knocks over his bucket of arrows, which causes him to slip and shoot an ice arrow into a cloud. Nearly everything that happens in this episode has a purpose to it, and establishing Cloudsdale's high ranking in the games plus the obvious skill of #7 gives a compelling reason for this pony to get careless and cause an accident. The writers could easily have just had him randomly trip and shoot an arrow into the sky, but like everything else in this episode, this is a detail where they went the extra mile.

7/10ish

>>42377048
So now not only do we have a strong justification for why magical ice arrows are being used over normal arrows, but we have a strong justification for why a competitor could make a such an awful mistake. And on top of that, this event serves to highlight the overall theme of the episode: winning isn't everything. Fixating only on being the one at the top will lead to failure. Spike let his fame get to his head and was reminded of his flaws. He tried to restore his pride (when it didn't need restoring) by singing the anthem, and it was a disaster. Meanwhile, hotheaded Rainbow Dash has finally learned to be satisfied with getting silver. There's a strong lesson here about pushing yourself too hard, and it's strongly reflected throughout all the various subplots.

As the cloud turns to ice and threatens to crush the crowd, we get an additional payoff with the disabling spell providing a reason for the various magic users to be helpless. From a writing perspective, this spell and the ice arrows were added to contrive a scenario where only Spike could save the day. Notably, Rainbow and the other pegasi are not helpless and do their best to minimize the damage. When watching the slow descent of the ice and how quickly ponies are able to flee from it, I think there's a good chance nopony would have gotten seriously hurt. This is a bad situation, to be sure, but it's not as if the ponies are completely helpless, and I think this strengthens the storytelling. If it was a far more serious problem where only Spike could do anything at all, that would add to the contrivance. Instead, it's an unlucky accident, but not a particularly unreasonable one considering the size of these games. This is why I think this episode serves as an excellent lesson in writing. There was a very specific payoff to be reached, but because of all the work that went into justifying the narrative elements needed to set it up, it doesn't present as a contrivance at all. Rather, it's a fairly straightforward consequence arising from things that would reasonably exist in this world. This is not only a good lesson in worldbuilding, but a great lesson in how worldbuilding enhances a story by providing those building blocks on which to create tension and drama without it being outlandish.

8/10ish

>>42377050
So Spike saves the day, and pulls an umbrella out of nowhere to shield himself from the gentle rainfall. He gets praised for his good deeds, and gives an underwhelming response. Spike clarifies that even if he did save the day, it doesn't solve his central problem of how he feels about himself, and Twilight immediately understands that it's up to Spike to redeem his own wounded pride. We end with Spike narrating his thoughts as he lights fireworks for the conclusion of the games. He reflects on his feelings, and notes that "all the praise in the world means nothing if you don't feel it inside". His feelings of embarrassment and insecurity aren't going to go away just by the simple fact that he saved the day. He can understand that what he did was important, but it doesn't FEEL important to him. He isn't going to feel better by doing something amazing. He can only let go of his past mistakes and make room for good things to happen in the future. This lesson is a surprising subversion of how the show normally concludes, and it presents a pleasantly mature understanding of emotion. Spike frequently is able to 'bounce' between emotional highs and lows, even in comparison to the rest of the cast, so ending his story with more nuanced emotion highlights his character growth.

9/10

>>42377053
And the fact that Twilight was the first one to understand how Spike felt this speaks volumes about her own struggles. She is a Princess, but just giving her wings doesn't make her FEEL like a Princess. I find S4 to be very weak overall, particularly on the execution of Twilight's character development, but this scene shows that the show still retained the potential for meaningful character payoffs.

In conclusion, Equestria Games is a great episode. Not only do I consider it the best Spike-focused episode, I think it's the best episode in S4 and one of the best in the show's entire run. It's got some great character moments, the jokes are fucking superb, the moral lesson is very meaningful, it does an excellent job of weaving worldbuilding with the plot, and there are a lot of lessons about good storytelling to be drawn from it.

10/10

>>42376735
Grade the anon without ai, Teach

>>42377289
The AI gives 7/10 or 8/10 by itself if you don't tell what this is about.

>>42375799 (OP)
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https://fim.heartshine.gay/?s=1&e=1&res=480&lo=0
0:04 Once upon a time in the magical land of Equestria
0:10 There were two regal sisters, who ruled together and created harmony for all the land
0:16 To do this, the eldest used her unicorn powers to raise the sun at dawn
(1/1)

>>42377646
This, A+, it's only implied it's supposed be a review haha
>I expect you to give a refreshing take on what's been said before

>>42377646
This is what my letters to Celestia would look like

This is why you don't use AI for grading papers or for making your essays.
I can't believe I ended up to the point where I am vehemently defending Anon for his structure & prose while vehemently screeching at GPT4 to motivate why does he think the structure & prose is 6/10 , but his imagination & judgement skills are 10/10. No, my final grading is based off my own human brain and not what the internet & retarded communist jews fed the AI.

>>42377019
Decent introduction, not amazing ("train ride to the equivalent of the olympic games" would be much clearer), but it's clear to anyone reading it what the premise is about even without knowing the episode.
Nice flowing prose, GPT4. Not the best vocabulary, but the punctuation is much better and without run-on sentences. This apparently is not GPT4 and not even assisted by grammarly, this is in fact Anon's real prose.

>Many Spike episodes attempt to milk humour from him trying to deceive others, here he is honest to a fault and it's quite endearing.
That is a very good point that puts into perspective how Spike should be written in relation to his personality: "we've firmly established the two main sides of Spike: supportive and hardworking, but also vain and gluttonous." and "Most episodes struggle to connect these differing personality traits into a cohesive character".

>That's right, this isn't Spike At Your Service, we're not going to spend the whole episode dancing around his feelings
Referencing the history and context of the character, that's good.

>he camera pans to the right to reveal Cadence enthusiastically waving at Twilight, a strong contrast to the refined demeanor of Celestia and Luna. Twilight waves back, but then looks uncomfortable again, gazing at something below. The camera pulls back rapidly to show her friends sitting in the crowd, the angle and speed of the moment emphasizing the great distance between them. This whole scene lasts about 20 seconds total, has no dialogue, and does an incredible job at communicating all of Twilight's thoughts and feelings on her ascension. It's scenes like this that make MLP stand out among children's shows.
Detailed visual audio analysis in relation to the characters, very good. The conclusion is only a little bit vague and questionable. "and does an incredible job at communicating all of Twilight's thoughts and feelings on her ascension." it does communicate her feelings, but the character arc and episode itself doesn't really have an objective conclusion where she sits beyond this grey zone where she's insecure. "It's scenes like this that make MLP stand out among children's shows." questionable.
Also the 20 seconds total with that many actions indicates a lot of rushed visuals and taking a look at the scene it is this weird animation of both fast and stilted at the same time.


1/4

>>42377889
>Back with the games again, we see that all unicorns in the audience are forced to undergo a 'disabling spell', which presumably disables magic and reveals anyone who attempts to cast. This is the kind of detail that you'd expect to find in a world with magic. It's easy to compare this episode to stories like Harry Potter, where not only are there no measures to counter magic in situations where you would expect them to be present. One more reason why MLP stands out as a cut above most children's media.
It also, just like the spell, disables potential narrative imagination such as Hermione, Snape, Quirrel messing with Harry's broom, Harry Potter 1's Quidditch match creating a much more interesting and entertaining story to tell which Equestria Games lacks.

>I consider this to be the ideal use of Pinkie as a narrative device: addressing the 4th wall when necessary but without being explicitly aware of it
Questionable ideal. There's knowledge & physical 4th wall antics and Pinkie used knowledge antics instead of physical ones. We aren't judging her voice acting performance here apparently.
Stop. Something is wrong here.
>We then have Pinkie exposit the current status of the games and Ponyville's place for the benefit of the audience, only to zoom out and reveal the concerned or annoyed reactions of the ponies sitting around her.
The mixture of concerned and annoyed reactions were because she was throwing & spilling her popcorn. What she said here was not 4th wall breaking at all, making the reference here to her 4th wall abilities loose and pointless.


>Cathy Weseluck again does a fantastic performance in capturing a false bravado as Spike tries to fake it, that quickly gives way to excruciating self-awareness as Spike occasionally tries to inject a bit of humour into his situation,
Cathy Weseluck performs an insecure, bored and relaxed Spike singing as opposed to Tara Strong's anxious exasperated acting in other episodes. Spike's performance isn't the usual self-absorbed obnoxious boastful yelling & screeching you see in other episodes like Boast Busters (and within the same episode with Spike thinking he can set things on fire with his mind) and other cartoons, but rather the more "I want to crawl up and die already" gulping, self-aware scared embarrassment which is 100% on point for awkward feelings, but not 100% for pure entertainment you are used to in most cartoons such as Show Stoppers' song or even "Hush Now Quiet Now" that is unironically good but 180 degrees from a lullaby. However a bunch of cartoons also do utilize the self-aware character realizing he put himself into an uncomfortable situation.


2/4

>>42377891
>Meanwhile, hotheaded Rainbow Dash has finally learned to be satisfied with getting silver.
She wasn't characterized as hotheaded this episode and this character arc only works if you judge her based off her previous episode leading up to this where she wants to join the wonderbolts to ditch Bulk Biceps & Fluttershy which many standardful people would agree with the fact she should have ditched Ponyville in favor of Cloudsdale since she originally comes from Cloudsdale anyway and her dream is to join the Wonderbolts and Bulk Biceps isn't even a friend.

>From a writing perspective, this spell and the ice arrows were added to contrive a scenario where only Spike could save the day. Notably, Rainbow and the other pegasi are not helpless and do their best to minimize the damage.
You have some technical judgement skills in you.
>This is why I think this episode serves as an excellent lesson in writing.
Some & technical being the keywords here.

>And the fact that Twilight was the first one to understand how Spike felt this speaks volumes about her own struggles. She is a Princess, but just giving her wings doesn't make her FEEL like a Princess. I find S4 to be very weak overall, particularly on the execution of Twilight's character development, but this scene shows that the show still retained the potential for meaningful character payoffs.
Technically and indeed "potential", if the execution and potential was fulfilled then judging by our own human brain the answer is no to low-mediocre at best.
>all the praise in the world means nothing if you don't feel it inside
Heavy-handed lesson and almost alienating when paired with the context of the episode, the only context being Spike's vanity and insecurity to try to maintain the crystal shmucks/ponies' adulation towards him for no real reason other than his vanity, gluttony and his insecurity which just like Twilight's isn't very well outlined compared to a naturally confident character like Rarity.


3/4

>>42377896

>In conclusion, Equestria Games is a great episode. Not only do I consider it the best Spike-focused episode, I think it's the best episode in S4 and one of the best in the show's entire run. It's got some great character moments, the jokes are fucking superb, the moral lesson is very meaningful, it does an excellent job of weaving worldbuilding with the plot, and there are a lot of lessons about good storytelling to be drawn from it.
You followed the essay structure correctly even adding the conclusion as is normal, but as the conclusion 100% shows off you aren't exactly the best at judging tastes, picking apart and choosing favorable categories of entertainment & thought-provoking narrative, neither judging the merit and quality of the lessons, worldbuilding, jokes, character arcs, dialogue outside other narratives and compared to other works and real life comparison to dialogue. Someone who needs a tasteful person would fail you or rank you only half. You have a very naive judgement skill almost like you lived in a cubicle all your life and most would compare you to an AI lacking life experience.

If I were an asshole I'd give you a mediocre 8/10, but since I'm not and let's say I'm judging based off an average high school essay and all your words are original rather than copied (sadly most schools demand you follow 1 direction, but I'm too nice) I can give you a 9/10 based on a bachelor's degree's requirements. I can't give you 10/10 due to some mistakes. For a 60s, 70s, 80s literature public college with entrance exam you'd probably be ranked around 8/10 or even lower depending on the subject matter you're writing about(especially if you're put to write an original imaginative story by yourself), but overall....

Grade 9/10 technically.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0ZEuWJ4muYc&ab_channel=DontYouWorryAboutQuotes


Characters 19695
words 3411
sentences 160
paragraphs 23
spike 61 good
twilight 22 good
character 14 good
good 13 good
No repeated words. That's good.


4/4

>>42375799 (OP)
Uh yeah fine nigger man I'll do it later. Give me a day or two.

Rangeban Romania

Noooo don't send me back to skooollll.

>>42378710
Rangeban every immigrant from America via keyboard DNA detection.

>>42375799 (OP)
>Choose an episode.
>Write a minimum 2,500 to 3,000 characters with spaces - meaning one A4 page
>Rewatch the episode, provide your episode link & 3 timestamps with exact dialogue quotes.
Ok fag, write what? All you said was the word limit. And what's with the order of instructions?
>pick episode
>write
>rewatch episode
Either you're an AI or you're a shit teacher.

>>42375799 (OP)
>Reddit spacing
>Ai fed topic
>twilight
No one should wast their time on this obvious shit thread.

>>42379271
The Equestriagirlsfags are getting pissy.

>It's better to pick an episode nobody knows about. If you end up picking Magical Mystery Cure then I expect you to give a refreshing take on what's been said before.
Watch me write 5 reviews trying to ge the lowest score possible. Yes punish me, mommy.

>>42379759
European grades are obligated to give you 1/10 scores so just you know ... you'll never score a perfect 0/10.

Did you know? those hats you wear at the end of school are meant to resemble a book.

Oh God.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cVhGWmljQEM

>>42375799 (OP)
calling a vote, I think about

>>42380176
Ew the ESL is waking up.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1i0i5lG6Ojc&ab_channel=BryanAdams

White man was here
>How can you tell?
6 hour Video analysis

>As opposed to brony analysts that do 5 minute "ANALys" those aren't white.

>>42381049
Digi and Enter are a "special" kind of "white" if you get me. But yeah they're not white in the least bit if you look at their eyes and test their DNA.

>>42375799 (OP)
This is a delightfully autistic thread, though OP you really should have fucking clarified
>Write a minimum 2,500 to 3,000 characters with spaces
after it got pointed out. I'm still not sure if you want a review, a critique, a summary, or what. I would have assumed review or critique but you criticised one anon's review for not summarising the episode well enough and praised the other's for going play by play through the entire episode's plot so I'm still unsure what it is exactly that you're looking for.

Once you clarify I will likely contribute.

When will that Twilightskingdomfag finally deliver?

Haha I'm glad I don't have to go to school anymore. See yea underage suckers.

>>42381538
Just write, anon. Just write. Don't be shy about OP.

>>42381831
>Just write. Don't be shy about OP.
How is wanting to know WHAT to write "being shy"?
>bro just write bro!!
Yeah sure I can write something like >>42377646. But someone already made that joke so I don't think it's worthwhile to make it a second time

>>42376228
Rofl lookin back through the archives back in 2015 you can find people thinking this was going to be an episode explaining Discord's origins. Those poor saps.

>>42382253
People were still hopeful back then even after alicorn twilight & equestria girls ... and then their last bit of hope got destroyed so they can learn their place and leave the damn fandom already. I remember how much discussion each season 6 thread lacked, some not even bothering to make anymore threads after the premiere thread.

Noooo not SKEWWLLLL

>>42382606
YESSS SCHHEEWWLLL

>>42381538
Both, both is good. It's obvious he wants you to start with a comprehensive summary of the episode then an insightful critique focused on pivotal moments of the episode to backup your general review's claims of the whole episode with as many spoilers, I mean information as possible.

I DON"T WANT TO GO BACK TO SCHOOL, ANONS.

Oh anon you're not going back to school...
GET BACK IN THE WAGIE, CAGIE.

Nobody is going back to school. You're all grown ass men(I think).

Well all except the Tamersfags.

Wow Teach, you suck. Can I go to Ms. Cheerilee's class instead?

>choose an episode
A Canterlot Wedding Part 2
>Write a minimum 2,500 to 3,000
I don't feel like it. But here's a haiku.
I can call chickens.
Scootaloo, Scoot-Scootaloo
Scoot is a chicken.
>Rewatch the episode, provide your link…
I watched it, but I don't want to post links and I have access to the episodes without the need of internet. I don't have quotes either.

>>42385998
I want to suck on Cherilee's Cheriteets!

>>42385998
Ms. Cheerilee is a dumb earth pony who doesn't know jackshit about anything.

>>42386159
Anon please... her name is Flower Smiles

>>42377898
>>42375799 (OP)
Teacher, what's the best way to get an A+?

OP abandoned his own thread, fantastic.
Time to draw dicks on the blackboard.

WAKE ME UP
CAN'T WAKE UP

>>42387059
SAAVEEEE MEEEEE

Pls understanduuu critical thinking is hard for /mlp/.

Magical Mystery Cure isn't an episode, it's 2 unfinished scripts cobbled up together.

>>42386159
She's Princess Celestia. She knows everything.

HAYYY CAN ANYPONY HEAR ME?

He's gonna take you back to the past
To review these shitty episodes which suck ass
He'd rather have a buffallo....

fuck writing my essay I'm gonna flunk out of school anyway

I deer you all to write an analysis about Mare In The Moon part 2. Comparing it to other shows or even similar episodes from seasons 7 or 8 of MLP is an effective way to review something too. Comparisons create new perspectives.

>>42375799 (OP)
Might do one tomorrow
Bumping out of interest

>all these newfags not recognizing that OP is a local schizo
Grim.

>>42375799 (OP)
Bump

>>42389463
Mare in the Moon refers to the first part, always, Mare in the Moon, Part 2 doesn't exist. The second part is called Elements of Harmony.

>>42375799 (OP)
I don’t get the assignment. Am I just supposed to summarize to the best of my ability? Talk about what’s gay and what’s not? Character interaction? Lore? My fetishes and how they should have been integrated into the show?

>>42390652
Yes.

>>42390652
No.

>>42390652
Maybe.

>>42390642
The more you know!