Hey dudes, trying something out. Not sure if it's working. It's supposed to feel a bit visual, like you're reading a comic book. The external plot is about a guy writing one, but he's struggling with major porn addiction, so he can't get anything right. Anyway, my questions are mostly about the style and layout. What do you think? Is it evocative? Is it lame? All the stuff in asterisks will be italicised, but it's a bit hard to read in the screenshot.