>>24552485
Sorry, old habits die slowly.
>>24552515
I intend that as the start. I enjoy starting chapters mid-conversation and letting the reader figure out what happened before.
>>24552522
>Can you change that command to a period?
Yes.
>Maybe change one of these? Reads a bit awkward
Yeah, that is just unpolished, there was never meant to be two beyonds.
>Aside from those two small things this reads very well.
That's actually a surprise.

>Is this setting Mongolian or Native American?
Nomads are Mongolian, I would prefer to make them more Turkic, but seems like they will automatically be seen as Mongolians.
The vassal states should be 33% of Aztec, 33% Greek, and 33% Indochinese