>>717648213
First of all, that's over twice the length of the original passage and would never fit in a text box.
Second, it also adds a lot of unnecessary information which risks contradictions later in the script.
>strong and able.
What if he's strong and disabled?
>I've never felt so safe
What if she felt excited and endangered? Women are often attracted to their rapists.
>the warmth of his body
What if he's actually a coldblooded lizardman? Or a zombie?