>>7636392
You did a good job getting the facial thirds divided correctly. It's mostly the placement, size and shape of some of the features that end up getting you. That and the angles of her head prevent an overall likeness to your reference. Use a bigger brush for your hatching and watch some Reiq for some solutions on facial features. Take your time making light marks before you commit to a decision. there's a lot of different approaches to hatching. You can hatch in regards to the atmosphere, light direction, form, mood, or a combination of all of them. Just make sure you hatch with intent in representing the subject as best you can.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bXfuovBSEIU&ab_channel=REIQ