>>7630529
You're right, it is a different pose. Its a lot clearer now, breast and shoulder are good and you're hands are great . Good stuff. Ill probably stop advising you after this, I think my style negatively affects the advice I'm giving you, but take from it what you will.
If you're burned, take a break. You'll see everything clearer. Good progress though.
However -
1. Your crotches are more visible than they should be. on left most and right most charas. IMO, they should be more buried them between the thighs, although I know you're drawing slender anime figures, they're still too apparent.
2. Also I still feel like the 3 dimensionality around right-side girl's hips is missing.

Do what you think best though.