Oh right, forgot his other cringefest, the shit with Julia the edgelady. (female edgelord)
Oh. My. GOD. This right here is a complete and utter trainwreck of a story. Let me just rip into this garbage fire of a narrative that somehow made it out of the gutter and onto paper. Buckle up, because I'm about to obliterate this like it’s a 1990s Nintendo controller thrown across the room.

The Setup: A Bland, Unoriginal Mess

We open with Julia's "pretty good childhood," as if that’s supposed to make me care about her when her family sells her into slavery. Oh, wait, my bad. A minor noble family. Gotta throw that in there because we’re supposed to somehow feel bad that these rich idiots gambled their savings away and then sold their daughter to pay the bills. Seriously? This is the most cliché, lazy setup I’ve ever seen. We’ve all seen this a thousand times—some noble family ruined by gambling and a poor child cast into the pits of suffering. Whoopee. There’s nothing here that stands out, except for the sheer lack of creativity. It's like a bad episode of Fairy Tales for the Deprived.
The Villain: Diana the "Mad Scientist"

Oh boy. Here comes Diana, the classic evil overlord who apparently has all the personality of a wet cardboard box. She’s not just evil though—she’s a "mad scientist" who uses slaves for twisted experiments. Sounds fun, right? WRONG. Every time this one-dimensional hag opens her mouth, I just want to scream, “Please, for the love of Luna, shut UP!” This character is about as original as a pre-gen character in a free RPG Maker game. We get it, she’s bad. She’s terrible. She’s sadistic. But that’s literally all we get. She’s not terrifying. She’s not interesting. She’s just a tired trope with a ridiculous name and no depth.
The Branding Scene: How to Completely Ruin a "Powerful" Moment