>>8975626
Oh my gosh...!
I've never gotten anything like this. I'm actually shaking a little bit. This means so much to me. I'm just a small shy little writer guy working in my small safe little corner and I'm so glad you like it. I hang out in /bzzt/, but an anon was kind enough to point me here. I'm constantly worrying about stuff like, are the Fyrix alien enough, is their culture coming through clear enough, am I doing this premise justice or am I the wrong person to be given this inspiration, and so it's heartening to hear I've been doing something right!

As for your criticisms >>8975627 If you're average height, stand and hold your arms flat against your body. Where your fingertips end is about as tall as a Fyrix, (antennae not included). As the other anon pointed out, Eigen is several times their mass and their structures are weaker due to not needing to worry about gravity as much to go high up.

I've tried to keep it *somewhat* grounded with things like the genetic modifications that the council is so concerned about being what's responsible for keeping him in good shape despite years of complete isolation. (Also he's still full of metal) Obviously you need to make some concessions for badassery to take place, which is handwaved as military experience and just ignorance to the actual danger. The second point is one I've agonized over, and I've tried my hardest to make him come off as not only savage, but so strange that the logical leap to "insanity" wouldn't happen when other explanations would seemingly fit better for a beast they found in a broken ship it certainly couldn't have created. It's difficult to include that with his babbling, which implies language, but I've done my best. Also he's terrifying and huge and apparently ate his coworkers, so they're definitely biased. I'm planning on doing a final draft after I finish. I'm hoping to shore stuff like that up, so thanks for the feedback!

(I've never played Halo 2, actually! Great minds, I suppose)