>>42516408
Very good advice. I did a bit of that, but I tried to do a little of that as possible, as I think stories flow a lot better when it reads more like a movie script or play without having to open up with
>And character said,
everytime. Gets a bit annoying in my opinion, and I think there can be more creative ways to fix the problem, like making characters speak in a more unqiue way.

>Fer instance, ah am talkin' like Applejack an' y'all gotta stop callin' me a background pon-eh. >Or maybe I can speak cool, although I'm already awesome, being Rainbow Dash and all

I think it gets harder the more characters you add. I've been really struggling with Sunset Shimmer because I've never really understood her personality other than being angy, ashamed, and forgiving, and her way of speaking is very plain compared to the other characters.

But at the end of the day, readability is number 1 when reading anything. Even if flow suffers a little, and I am going to try to edit my green to make it more readable.