I dunno how much I'm going to mess around with this, but I wanted opinions and criticism.

Does anything not read well?
More stars, less stars? (they'll twinkle in the final animation)
Any colors that could be swayed in a direction?
Should it have more highlights on the skin and outlines?

The entirely overambitious idea is to add some steam to the sauna, sweat drops on Funou, dick throbs, chest rising with breaths, some stars twinkling with lil' coronas, and her blinking.
There's also a very tiny niggling idea to have Yuri pop over the wall and stare at her occasionally, maybe once per four loops.
But before that, how's it look so far?