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I definitely enjoyed this fic. Reading this one after Mono’s Twiguard, it’s clear both that Mono has improved since this fic came out, and that she was always quite good. Advanced errors notwithstanding.
For an immortality blues fic, it was way better than I expected. I liked how much time the story dedicated to the SoL elements, especially Twilight’s dates with Rarity. The storytelling scenes were all delightful, as well as the progression of physical closeness between them through the chapters.
I also liked how fast the story went. There were a lot of bad immortality blues and misunderstandings tropes that got worked into the story and could have dragged it down. I prefer it when they’re just missing, like in WaSLC or another fic, but here at least the stay of Rarity’s breakup speech and the “woe is me, all my friends die” crap was cut very short. I especially liked Rarity’s counter about how Twilight gets Rarity’s whole life, that was ridiculously over-the-top romantic.
As for issues with the fic, I’ve seen worse time travel plots, but this one was definitely not that good. The double dipping with Rarity’s note on Twilight’s journal both being there and not being there was bad, and the established time travel mechanics don’t allow for it. Also, why did Luna get mad at Twilight for doing what she dared her to do?
Also, compared to TEL and Twiguard, it’s apparent from this setting that the ship itself is weak. Mostly, they just love each other because. To reach, it looks like Twilight loves Rarity because she can keep up with Twilight intellectually, and Rarity loves Twilight because she’s hot and adorkable. Doesn’t really seem like the foundation for a millenia-surviving soul bond.