>>712424739I did a quick re-read and it DID read much better when taken all as one big uninterrupted experience but I largely agree with your appraisal and mostly dislike part 2.
>>712424739Makima is my angel and my goddess and I'll always love her more than anyone. But I'll also never see her again (honestly might be the best considering Fujimotors current state). AsaYoru is appealing to me and the closest to remotely approach Makima's lovableness and status in my mind. Her duality is nice Yoru's dommy and sluttier but also compeltely pon and kind of retarded childlike personality mixed with Asa's cynical femcel and love/sex shy trepidation. Asa is also a "normal" girl and ultimately approachable in that way. She's not alien and unknowable like a devil is in a lot of ways.
P.S. It's my firm belief Asa herself is a closet gooner dirty pervert no one who isn't talks about sex in these kinds of terms except people who fetishize the filthy intimacy of the acts she's describing. Which is also why she's not violently opposed to the handjob and kissing and Yoru's sex promises like all the tranny redditors insist she must be, saying she's a rape victim.