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Anonymous No.718968097 >>718969019 >>718970512 >>718972171 >>718973356 >>718973386
I have become The Icebreaker
Anonymous No.718969019 >>718970165 >>718971673 >>718971859
>>718968097 (OP)
>become sober
>get over your ex-gf
>get a grip on yourself
>somehow this is the bad route
>get shamed by the binoclard
Anonymous No.718970165
>>718969019
Your stoic expression does not go away after the binoclard's remark.
You are what you choose to be, regardless.
Anonymous No.718970512 >>718970783 >>718970938
>>718968097 (OP)
Harry go to the bathroom now. You're shitting yourself.
Anonymous No.718970783
>>718970512
>Pain Treshold [LEGENDARY - SUCCESS] -"Nuh yet"
Anonymous No.718970938
>>718970512
>Drama [DIFFICULT: Success] - "I don't like your tone of voice."
Anonymous No.718970957 >>718972360 >>718972545
I wish i could write as well as this game is written.
It really sucks to have creative aspirations and then be a genuine double-digit IQ retard who's very aware that's just not an option for him.
Just hard-filtered by genetics.
There isnt any exercise that can raise your IQ so why bother.
Anonymous No.718971673
>>718969019
Counterpoint, he's a kipt.
Anonymous No.718971859 >>718972065 >>718972997
>>718969019
Disco Elysium was intentionally written in such a way that trying to be reasonable, or worse, a centrist who sees that there's flaws in all political ideologies, is inherently bad. Harry Dubois is not a rational man, so acting in such a way is actually him losing what makes him special as a person. Even if the alcohol is literally killing him and he's a broken-down mess of a man, Harry needs to be insane for his own good. The only thing you can do worse than being a reasonable guy is being a bigot
Anonymous No.718972065
>>718971859
>Implying that becoming The Icebreaker isn't its own brand of insane and flawed.
My headcanon is that The Icebreaker solves the case, calls Kim a racial slur during the church dance-off, and stops drinking.
Everyone hates him 10x more because he now is racist unironically and wont stop about The King and how the commies killed him.
Anonymous No.718972171 >>718972512 >>718973161
>>718968097 (OP)
so this game is just a book right? i started it and it seemed like a book
Anonymous No.718972360 >>718972412 >>718972594
>>718970957
not to diminish your struggles with low intelligence, which are real, but i just want to say that, as someone who writes a lot and whose writing seems to be well received, good writing is not easy or quick to produce. anything you see that is "well written" has gone through multiple edits as well as intense rumination in the author's head where they may not even be writing, just like on break at work or something, but still thinking about whether they've used the right words in the right order to create exactly the right connotation that they're after.

my point is that nobody just sits down and writes well. it takes many many drafts and edits. so if you sit down and write stuff and it's shit that doesn't mean you can't write well, because that's what everyone does. editing is what makes writing good.

my advice to people who want to get better at writing is always to take a scene from a book or story or whatever that you really like and think is well written but not perfect and rewrite it yourself to try and improve it. in the process of changing things around to try and alter the passage you learn a lot about why particular words and sentence structures are used the way that they are. so for example you could take a part of disco elysium and try and rewrite the scene to be just a little bit different.

to practice my writing i literally just get ChatGPT to spit out prompts at me of character and stimulus and then i write the character reacting to that stimulus using the order of operations schema (stimulus -> sensation -> reflex -> thought -> action/dialogue + emotion). it's good practice.
Anonymous No.718972412 >>718972457
>>718972360
p.s. this post is horribly written because i just shat it out cuz i'm in a rush to go to uni, so trust me bro when i say i normally write better than this lol lmao etc.
Anonymous No.718972457
>>718972412
It by far exceeds the board average
Anonymous No.718972512
>>718972171
It's a VN with extra steps
Anonymous No.718972545 >>718972853
>>718970957
Disco Elysium is the product of a lifetime spent in a post-soviet hellhole drinking far too much and dreaming of a better life that was never possible to begin with. The writing style is one thing, you have to break your own brain to write in weird, bizarre, interesting ways like Harry Dubois thinks to himself. But that's a skill you can learn, you just have to practice.
As for the actual tone, meaning, themes of Disco Elysium, which is arguably more important than the actual writing style itself, you need to sit down and seriously think about how fucked up your life is, get very, very drunk, and then channel your depression and pain into draft. Worked for Hemingway!
Anonymous No.718972594
>>718972360
I'm not good at working hard which i guess is the bigger issue.
Whenever i've written it was by "vibe" and i mostly did edit/rewrites to re-arrange order of things, reword em' to avoid repetitions or make it "sound" better(like i'd read it out loud to see if it flows well if that makes sense), et cetera.

I usually do 1 chapter of an idea and then get bored, drop it, write something else in two weeks.

I'll try to do your exercise and be more solid about it. I've never read anything that i liked and thought "I could write it better than the author"
Anonymous No.718972853 >>718973154
>>718972545
I also live in a post-soviet nation but im depressed in a very uncool and true to life way.
I hadnt talked with anyone since elementary school so i dont have life experiences. When i was in HS every year they'd send me to a shrink so i could get papers for being retarded but every year the shrink would deem me normal and the school would get pissed the fuck off. My employment consists of job-hopping, living like a hermit and then neeting for a month or two at a time with whatever i saved up.

So i have no anecdotes, no knowledge of anything, hadnt met a lot of interesting people.
I just sit in my room and mindlessly replay old games while thinking in circles the same sad thoughts i always do.
I dont even drink bc its too expensive.

I dont have the "drive" to escape into a fully fleshed fantasy either. I just beat my brain up with the same bullshit daily and burn through time getting my little dopamine kicks.
Anonymous No.718972997
>>718971859
At the end of the game, Kim thought I was a racist just because I shit talked women once or twice in the game. I never picked a single racist option. I just wanted to roleplay Harry as a drunk that was bitter and angry about the breakup instead of heartbroken over it.
Anonymous No.718973154
>>718972853
There's a NEETlife masterpiece just waiting to be created by someone anon, there are zero books out there that truly capture the essence of what it means to have no aspirations, no friends, no meaning in your life. Sure, you can argue there's nothing interesting in such a premise... but think about the premise of Disco Elysium. If you told people what the game really is, which isn't really about the investigation but literally about a drunken, suicidally depressed amnesiac cop wandering around a city trying to steal enough cash to buy some booze and/or find some kind of meaning while his memory returns to him and he stumbles ass-backwards into solving a murder case, most people would be turned off. But Disco Elysium dresses up all these mundane things in the robes of something novel and fascinating, via Harry's schizophrenia and internal dialogue. The key to writing a masterpiece like Disco Elysium is not what you write about, it's how you approach the subject.
Anonymous No.718973161
>>718972171
It's a choose your own adventure novel.
Anonymous No.718973356
>>718968097 (OP)
Are you fucking insane?! Don't answer that!
And STOP posting that! Let's go.
Anonymous No.718973386
>>718968097 (OP)
Based fascist Harry gamer, just like me frfr
Anonymous No.718973651
>Icebreaker thread
>Self-admitted double-digit IQ europoor starts venting not even 20 posts in
Can't make this shit up.