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7/23/2025, 5:21:04 PM
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Duel (Toabyak)
It’s very funny both end the duel through underhanded attacks not actually associated with the duel itself.
Adel, I think it was smart color-coding the text, because a lot of crabs I do think have difficulties or don’t even want to bother reading. It helps with accessibility! But I notice you use passive voice, things like ‘can be seen holding’ instead of ‘held’ to match a past tense descriptor which causes I think distance and pause in scenes you probably want to pop a bit harder. Passive voice is hard to ignore and writing improves significantly by avoiding it. Likewise keep attention on what tense you’re writing in and keep it consistent. Content wise I get a lot of it, I play ygo!
Toabyak has much stronger drawings and its pretty funny, I like the joke YGO cards and just how expressive you make Adel, her faces are really good in this.
Cursed Tomb [RESTRICTED]
Dea’s coloring is really great, I’ll admit I wasn’t expecting much from her just by judging the pre-R1 art but I’m glad to be proven wrong. There’s a lonely atmosphere to the entry I like and the rendering for the first half is great. I think, though, building up all that atmosphere didn’t pay off given the second half was severely unfinished in comparison.
Mummies [Nio]
I’ll say it here, this is such an unbalanced match because of Midori dropping out.
That said for the time the cops got they pulled off a nice and funny comic. I love the cops, and I like the continuity between them here and Fluxxo’s entry claiming the title ‘SPACE COPS’. The text is a bit hard to read though.
Nio’s entry is so dynamic and fun, and I’m delighted by the inclusion of Imhotep (again the second time I’ve seen him, I like really the Misfits continuity between their entries).
Duel (Toabyak)
It’s very funny both end the duel through underhanded attacks not actually associated with the duel itself.
Adel, I think it was smart color-coding the text, because a lot of crabs I do think have difficulties or don’t even want to bother reading. It helps with accessibility! But I notice you use passive voice, things like ‘can be seen holding’ instead of ‘held’ to match a past tense descriptor which causes I think distance and pause in scenes you probably want to pop a bit harder. Passive voice is hard to ignore and writing improves significantly by avoiding it. Likewise keep attention on what tense you’re writing in and keep it consistent. Content wise I get a lot of it, I play ygo!
Toabyak has much stronger drawings and its pretty funny, I like the joke YGO cards and just how expressive you make Adel, her faces are really good in this.
Cursed Tomb [RESTRICTED]
Dea’s coloring is really great, I’ll admit I wasn’t expecting much from her just by judging the pre-R1 art but I’m glad to be proven wrong. There’s a lonely atmosphere to the entry I like and the rendering for the first half is great. I think, though, building up all that atmosphere didn’t pay off given the second half was severely unfinished in comparison.
Mummies [Nio]
I’ll say it here, this is such an unbalanced match because of Midori dropping out.
That said for the time the cops got they pulled off a nice and funny comic. I love the cops, and I like the continuity between them here and Fluxxo’s entry claiming the title ‘SPACE COPS’. The text is a bit hard to read though.
Nio’s entry is so dynamic and fun, and I’m delighted by the inclusion of Imhotep (again the second time I’ve seen him, I like really the Misfits continuity between their entries).
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