>>534375443
Basically same as last time, everything reads good, only one minor change I'd make, up to you obviously
>358 - "This hand's shaping up" sounds weird, maybe "This hand's coming together"? As usual though, you've got the script so I might be off.
Also just reading this script this movie seems completely absurd.
Also I think using koko is funny, I think most people here would too, but some autists will probably throw a fit.
