>>212420716No. It's bad because its too long and contains too many steps.
>part 1: we are the spark>part 2: that will light the fire>part 3: that will burn...downIt's far too long. Brevity is key; make it short and snappy.Why didn't thy just remove part 2?
>we are the spark that will burn the first order downIt's shorter and to the point.
I don't want to be called a retarded african, but I will repeat anon with trips
>>212420777. Burning things down is is too aggressive.
I like his, but it's still too long. My suggestions are:
>we are the spark of the rebellion>we are the spark that keeps the rebellion litThat's why I thought it was bad.