Hey, guys. Would it be possible to get some feedback on this fic I'm writing? It's not meant to be terribly serious, mind... and I still have a long ways to go. Be as brutal as possible, please!

https://pastebin.com/B4MmUYXM

>>149082235
She needs a hug
>>149082273
Sounds promising Anon
>>149082694
How would Stolas or FemStolas react to you being Paimom's boyfriend
>Octavia finding not only this make you her grandfather but her dad's dad/mom's dad

I'll never understand what it is about Loona that attracts all the specimens. You never see this shit with Stella and Octavia.