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Thank you for reading as much as you did (I'm unsure how much you may have skipped, but it is what it is). I will say that as its the second chapter a lot of context is built from the first chapter. So things like Pikachu punctuating Jane's sentences would be more clear from that, though I can admit that it's oddly formatted.
Basically, the flashbacks are for fleshing out Wol's relationships with his friends more since details about their friendship was pretty sparse in the first chapter. Especially with Jane, who barely appeared. It also is meant to inform why Jane and Wol take some of the actions they do as they cope with the grief of Garland's death.
And I just thought it was cool as I imagined it in my head, but that might be from a perspective that is too close to the story to see the flaws clearly. But some of the tips about format I'll definitely try to consider. I'm totally lost about what you mean by British syntax, and kinda confused about what you're trying to say with the school scene. But that just might be retardation on my part.
Thank you for reading as much as you did (I'm unsure how much you may have skipped, but it is what it is). I will say that as its the second chapter a lot of context is built from the first chapter. So things like Pikachu punctuating Jane's sentences would be more clear from that, though I can admit that it's oddly formatted.
Basically, the flashbacks are for fleshing out Wol's relationships with his friends more since details about their friendship was pretty sparse in the first chapter. Especially with Jane, who barely appeared. It also is meant to inform why Jane and Wol take some of the actions they do as they cope with the grief of Garland's death.
And I just thought it was cool as I imagined it in my head, but that might be from a perspective that is too close to the story to see the flaws clearly. But some of the tips about format I'll definitely try to consider. I'm totally lost about what you mean by British syntax, and kinda confused about what you're trying to say with the school scene. But that just might be retardation on my part.
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