>this is a subtle reference of Dess stealing Kris's first kiss and virginity

>Susie stealing one of Asriel's stars and placing it to Kris's side
>it's actually a reference of Kris stealing Dess from Asriel

>Susie removes a star and gives it to Kris
>foreshadowing of Kris and Dess having a sexual relationship while she was still with Asriel

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I think I can explain this, it happens to me too when I try to write fanfics

The thing is, you have a story in your head
The more time passes the more that story evolves in your head
So sometimes without you actually advancing the story in the real world, the characters in your head have gone through several arcs and they don't act like themselves anymore
And it's hard to write like they were instead of their new personality

So basically, Toby wrote chapter 1, and in the time it took to develop chapter 2, probably Toby went through the story a few dozen times and in his mind Susie was already a good character.
Maybe I'm being a schizo, but this happens to me a lot when I try to do some "Enemies to lovers" fic