>>3797218
Just finished reading, loved your work. Aoyusumu is truly becoming holy cinema. At the moment I can't even think of much to criticize; only 2 things come to mind.
I believe it's after you start falling in the volcano and you hear the prayers and begin the process of the transformation, it's written that then the mc starts 'laughing maniacally' at a certain point. I don't think it fits the.. style? or the moment in question for the style?
The other is at the end. I don't know what you have in mind for/if any possible consequences of telling or not telling, but couldn't there be an 'honorable' option of telling Khan that you can't tell the whole truth because it puts a mark on him or smth? Then it is up to you if he pushes for the truth or decides to leave it at that.
Side content, idk.
For aoyusumu, if people will start viewing the mc as a saint, the temple could approach him with a simple request? Maybe even just PR. Since he's broken at the start (right?), it gives room for some unpowered content and at the same time it could start delving into temple politics/problems/lore.
